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Rust

I am a ruined house With a rusty fence, So many phantoms reside resting recklessly, A clock on the mantelpiece that won't work. It's stuck staring at me, Tick………, The wallpaper is crumbling and fading away like my miserable memories. It doesn't seem real even though it is. Dreamy, dreary , dread , dead. But the fire is still working Though everything is cold And almost dead. Somehow it is never always cold, Flames auburn and assured. I fall in love, When the wind Clatters and chatters the weary windows. When you knocked on the tedious door, I fell in love with you, You seemed full of halo light, Full of sparks Like the 4th of July, Your words full of life, You could make thousands of people alive. But I can't untarnish the fence, Can't paint the walls crimson. But your eyes think, I'm beautiful, Life is fleeting and transient, So, I started painting the panelled wooden house crimson. You can't paint oak crimson. It's ruining me, I can't fall in love.

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Date: 8/7/2025 6:50:00 PM
Haunting and beautiful—your imagery paints both decay and hope with such vivid strokes. The contrasts between rust and flame, cold and warmth, despair and love, make this piece linger in the mind long after reading.
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Date: 8/7/2025 4:54:00 PM
wow, a totally engaging poem...wasn't expecting the last line...took my breath away. Loved the old house metaphor...perfect! hugs, Sara
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Date: 8/7/2025 8:21:00 AM
A powerful and gripping poem, Anne. I found your poem fascinating - grabbed my attention right from the very first line. Well penned! :) john
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Date: 8/7/2025 5:21:00 AM
Change the color to a soft yellow and walla! Problems. Solutions. I'll be here all week...
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Anne Winter
Date: 8/7/2025 5:28:00 AM
Hmm nice idea! But I like gothic architecture though or maybe rococo Thank you for commenting and understanding the metaphor. I appreciate you :)
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Tom Woody
Date: 8/7/2025 5:24:00 AM
Seriously though your metaphor of an old beat up house and the opportunity for renewal strikes a chord. Interestingly I buy old beat up homes and restore them. Always feel overwhelmed and some trepidation at the start, but the end result always feels good. If he thinks you're a diamond in the rough I say go for it!

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