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Sept.. 17. 2023
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Ruminations On Life

(The news of the death of dear and near ones reaching us on a daily basis has left me thinking of the transitoriness of life and hence this poem) 


Is not our life a wave of energy coursing through ether Just like flickering flames or fleeting gleams that fly Which when stopped, like a weed scorched by the sun Or a tree felled down by a merciless axe, we will die Is not our life a theatrical performance, Where we don the roles we are assigned Some, playing the roles of tyrants or kings While some act as meek minions consigned Is not our life a voyage through rough seas Where we paddle on and on over billowing tide Never asking where we are heading to Nor knowing through what currents we ride Is not our life the footprints left on sandy shores Washed away instantly by the incoming wave Not able to measure their length or width Or be traced as they immediately cave Is not our life as illusory as the mirage of the desert Staying beyond our grasp and endlessly deluding Soothing like an oasis among the dunes of sand Sometimes like a nightmare awfully distressing Is not our life a little space lying somewhere Between our infant cradle and our grave Where we have struggled to secure our slot But soon ousted by others who for our place crave Still we live on, never in despair but in hope That beyond this mortal life and its tangled ties Somewhere for us, eternity’s mighty portals await To harbor our souls when from deep slumber we rise!
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Maverick Avatar
October 23, 2022 at 1:54 PM
Well done False, and congratulations on the win I am considering life, truly to be found only in Immersion with God, who will assign our next Roles.' Not on this earth though, that idea is Too limited, and only birthed from precedence.'
Kauffman Avatar
September 27, 2022 at 10:35 AM
Dear Valsa, congratulations on your win. This soulful poem reaches deeply into our questions about life and life's quest to understand. It is pensive yet hopeful filled with your musings and meditations. Wonderfully done dear friend! Blessings on wings of hope to you!
George Avatar
October 19, 2022 at 12:14 AM
Thank you so much Sam for your insightful response to my poem. Sometimes we are driven to ponder over the stark realities of life. Getting a comment from you is always a joy .
Poet Avatar
September 23, 2022 at 5:28 AM
Back with heartfelt congratulations on your amply deserved top win, Valsa. Blessings my friend
George Avatar
October 19, 2022 at 12:02 AM
Thanks a lot friend for your second visit
Baker Avatar
September 20, 2022 at 8:21 AM
One of the greatest poems I've ever read, Valsa, it left me speechless. A FAV for me. I read it to my wife then came back to try and comment. A winner in my book. A enlightened look at the journey we are on in this life. It was filled with emotion and reflective wisdom. Thank you for sharing from your vast wisdom with us through your eloquent poetry. A humbled reader, Bill
George Avatar
September 20, 2022 at 6:59 PM
Thanks a lot Bill. I feel enthused seeing my poem made a Fave . I am so glad you enjoyed my poem and read it to your wife. What more honor I deserve? Thanks a lot dear Bill for your sweet and kind comment
Wolf Avatar
September 19, 2022 at 8:00 PM
Bravo, Valsa. The last stanza especially knocked my socks off. Better than the ending of 'The Great Gatsby' by a mile. Wonderful and a FAVE! ~ Life hanging by a string
George Avatar
September 20, 2022 at 7:01 PM
Dear Gershon, so happy for your lovely comment and making it your FAVE. May God bless you dear friend.....
Legros Kelley Avatar
September 18, 2022 at 8:15 PM
Valsa, this is breathlessly beautiful, a great work of wisdom. The last lines 'Somewhere for us, eternity’s mighty portals await To harbor our souls when from deep slumber we rise!' That is the shore we are making for though we be tossed in tempest upon the wild seas of this life. Amen, I look to that shore with hope. Thank you for writing this, it is a FAV for me sweet poetess friend! <3
George Avatar
September 20, 2022 at 7:05 PM
However turbulent our earthly life may be, the thought that eternity's portal waits for us, makes our journey hopeful. Thank you for making my poem your Fave dear BJ and thanks a lot for your very sweet comment.
DiMino Avatar
September 18, 2022 at 2:21 PM
"Is not our life the footprints left on sandy shores Washed away instantly by the incoming wave Not able to measure their length or width Or be traced as they immediately cave" Sooo beautiful! Is not our life of often blunder somehow yet a mystical wonder? Let rungs of light together we weave till again we grasp the hand of God's sleeve.
George Avatar
September 20, 2022 at 7:08 PM
Yes, Joe. We shall climb through life's rung until we reach high and can catch hold of God's sleeve. What beautiful thought ! Much gratitude to you Joe.
Leffanta Avatar
September 17, 2022 at 10:01 AM
Nice write, Valsa! Every day is an adventure! Aloha!
George Avatar
September 20, 2022 at 7:11 PM
Yes, each day is an adventure ! Thanks a lot Rico
Poet Avatar
September 17, 2022 at 7:44 AM
When looking for solutions, your ideas will be heard all the way through. Valsa, you have a wonderful way of describing how life actually is. I wish you all success in the contest.
George Avatar
September 20, 2022 at 7:14 PM
Thanks a lot dear Lasaad for your sweet and kind comments . Whenever I feel down thinking that my poems are not upto the mark, I read your comments and derive inspiration from them. Thanks so much.
Pandit Avatar
September 17, 2022 at 5:20 AM
Your thoughts resonate throughout in the quest for answers. Life is as you say through splendid metaphors, Valsa. Best to you.
George Avatar
September 20, 2022 at 7:15 PM
Thanks a lot Vijay. Your appreciation matters much to me !
Buhagiar Avatar
September 17, 2022 at 2:15 AM
Our life is an illusion. It comes and goes without warning. It is how we behave that count. For that will determine which eternity we choose.
George Avatar
September 20, 2022 at 7:19 PM
Sometimes our life appears as a mere illusion. But the thought of eternity gives clarity and purpose to our lives. Thanks a lot dear friend, Victor !
Seeker Avatar
September 16, 2022 at 9:18 PM
A beautiful poem! Quite apt for my contest actually although I know it’s impulsed by loss. Deep, soulful musings here, Valsa.
George Avatar
September 16, 2022 at 9:26 PM
Thank you so much dear Seeker friend ! Since your contest is still open, I think I shall just enter this for your contest, if you feel this will fit.
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