Rudy Fell

He lies on the living room carpet
Conscious, groggy but awake
No signs of injury, lightly moaning
Leaning over him, how to help?
He fell last Thursday too
Better letting him settle
Before trying getting him up
Maybe I'll need to call
My son or ambulance aids
Now I'll just lie down facing him
Talk some, eye to eye
Like so many times before
In bed, on beaches and such
A couple of just sixty two years
Or a couple of one
Oldest lovers, oldest friends
His eyes open a bit teary, he whispers,
"Sorry, dear heart"
At once, I know my Rudy is there
I say back, "There, there love"
Now we are one again
The fall did not take him away
Not this time
I lay there, two oldies on the floor
Waiting for the right moment to resume
To try to live again
Rudy fell, he'll fall again
One day, I'll fall too

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Date: 5/30/2023 1:14:00 PM
Greg, a wonderful poem, so emotional, I have tears, and congratulations on your win in the contest, well done !
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Date: 5/29/2023 6:20:00 PM
Your poem ranked 3rd place in my contest. Congrats!!! Love your use of language and terse approach. Sorry this took so long to judge. Sad and beautiful tones.
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Date: 6/17/2020 10:29:00 PM
Back to say congratulations on this very poignant poem bringing to light not only a time tested marriage but the love matured over time.
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Greg Gaul
Date: 6/18/2020 6:50:00 AM
Sam, your visit is most appreciated. I wrote this for a poetic/mentor friend who actually lived it. Reality imitating poetry.
Date: 6/17/2020 10:17:00 AM
This is written with so much love and empathy it touched my heart, my elderly father falls regularly and my petite Mom can't do anything so this reminded me of their plight, congrats on a fine win!
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Greg Gaul
Date: 6/17/2020 3:31:00 PM
John, this is a true story of a poet friend of mine. Thank you for your open comments and kind award. Congratulations on your contest and thank you for hosting.
Date: 4/12/2020 6:05:00 PM
oh my, what love is shown here. and oh my, to have to worry for this to happen!! I love the way the poem goes about showing this predicament to us and the final line, it's perfect.
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Greg Gaul
Date: 4/12/2020 6:25:00 PM
Andrea your visit and thoughtful remarks are beyond supportive. I most appreciate what you've said here.
Date: 4/11/2020 6:38:00 PM
This poem shines a bright light on an enduring love and it shares the acceptance of aging with empathy for each other. It is brilliantly written Greg! I am keeping this in my Faves my friend! xxoo Happy Easter! xxoo
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Greg Gaul
Date: 4/11/2020 8:26:00 PM
Aged lovers is not a frequent topic but I found it intriguing. Thank you so much Connie for your sensitive commentary. Most appreciated.
Date: 4/11/2020 2:10:00 PM
Boy, having just turned 73 I can relate to this all too, too well-- congrats, Greg on such a bittersweet work.
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Greg Gaul
Date: 4/11/2020 3:28:00 PM
L.J., congratulations on your birthday and I appreciate your kind visit and commentary.
Date: 4/11/2020 1:00:00 PM
Greg, so poignant, full of empathy, as a reflection of love in fullest bloom. Your first line pulled me in and didn't let me go until your conclusion - a lifetime encapsulated in your poem. Beautifully done my friend. Congratulations! Happy Easter!
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Greg Gaul
Date: 4/11/2020 3:26:00 PM
Sam, thanks kindly for your visit and review.
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