Rudiments of Wings

“As I watched the seagulls, I thought, That’s the road to take; find the absolute rhythm and follow it with absolute trust.” ~ Nikos Kazantzakis

RUDIMENTS OF WINGS

O child, your seablown hollyhocks— recall
of Kilmer’s tree. So rapidly your heart
‘tis wild, carefree.

Sweet child, your cherry cheeks are mountain peaks
in Field’s gingham and calico The Feud.
You soar on swing.

Quill and ink — unflappable raven wings
of Poe’s haunting ballad stir up feelings,
never receding.

Dear child, out in the lonely woods of Frost,
harness bells shaking in the snowy woods—
effervescent cold.

The Lord is my shepherd, Psalm twenty-three.
Lovely solemnity— a poem-prayer.
Schooled in scripture.

Rudimentary poetry in flight.
you hold onto each illumined feather—
the inner child.

2/19/2022
This or That, Vol 10 Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Edward Ibeh

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Date: 2/28/2022 3:34:00 PM
Kim, your poem is gorgeous. It grabbed my heart. we all wrote such different interpretations of rudiments. Best of luck :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/28/2022 6:02:00 PM
Thank you, Ann!
Date: 2/24/2022 5:52:00 AM
My favorite part of this winning poem is "Sweet child, your cherry cheeks are mountain peaks in Field’s gingham and calico The Feud. You soar on swing."
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/24/2022 6:29:00 PM
Thank you! So glad you enjoyed :)
Date: 2/24/2022 4:43:00 AM
I like each of your examples from famous poetry which lead to the concluding remarks: Rudimentary poetry in flight. you hold onto each illumined feather— the inner child. Well to the point, Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/24/2022 6:31:00 PM
Thanks so much, Vijay! Each of these I remember from childhood :) Cheers to a fellow poet!
Date: 2/23/2022 3:18:00 PM
Your verse is quite beautiful, Kim, and I love the quote, too. Best wishes for the contest, Evelyn
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/23/2022 7:00:00 PM
Thank you so much! My first poetry!
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