Rudiments of Wings

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At dawn I gazed at the kaleidoscopic canvas, 
                                       stars still blinking,
                                    uncanny hushed night
                                     somber nebulous sky
                            a few white pristine clouds floating, 
                          a strip of the silvery Moon still glistened! 

                 A gush of lavender emotions ran through my veins, 
                             This indescribable solemn sight…
                                 felt like a surreal dream! 

                                        I found a purpose 
                    The emotions ignited my saffron imagination…
                    spread its wings and rise to the unfathomable
                                        ruby-red horizon! 


                                        February 23, 2022
                          For "This or That" Vol. 10 Poetry contest
                                 Theme: Rudiments Of Wings
                                     Sponsor: Edward Ibeh

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Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 2/24/2022 4:44:00 PM

I could not have painted it better myself, dear friend, An artist with a word flair, that is what you are, Thank you for sharing your talent and your time :)

John Watt

Date: 2/24/2022 1:49:00 PM

Mala, your imagination soars in this write! I really like how the colors add a dreamy dimension to this kaleidoscopic canvas: white clouds, silvery moon, ruby-red horizon, and the very poetic lavender emotions and saffron imagination. Your adjectives take a simple scene of dawn breaking and imbue it with a sense of spirituality and wonder: simple, solemn, somber, surreal, uncanny. Such a joy and an inspiration to read! Many blessings ~ John

Valsa George

Date: 2/24/2022 3:53:00 AM

A nebulous sky will ignite a poet's imagination ! No wonder on looking at the radiant sky, you started soaring on wings of imagination. A lovely poem Mala !

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 2/23/2022 3:11:00 PM

This gorgeous poem is a joy to read, Mala. Best wishes for the contest, my friend. :)