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She denied him ... her first true love, yet she would not speak him the reason so absurdly trifling that it was gone from her memory ... completely still, she clung to it like a bible not a thought given to his name or care or visage in many a year ... death danced before her now its countenance mocking her age and illnesses husband of fifty-something years and three children all about her, smiling ... putting on "the face" of expectancy and acceptance almost as if it was her obligation to make them feel better about her own death ... she giggled quietly at the irony a full life of love and family and travel and ... and yet ... the only thing she could see now was his face all their voices were his voice the air was filled with his cologne his hand holding the perfectly-matched spaces in hers the taste in her mouth, his tender bow of lips ... "My sweet love" she said softly, her husband smiling (though it was not him she was speaking to) "Forgive me ..." a puzzled look creeping onto her family's faces ... at this, she gently closed her eyes letting the darkness wash over her, a warm blanket dreaming of the life she might have had and one more gaze ... her lost love's shining eyes. ~ Poem Of The Week ~ on Poetry Soup, from September 20, 2020 to September 26, 2020 - thank you, Admins!

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Date: 10/12/2020 2:41:00 PM
Congrats on a well deserved poem of the week. Turning back to her first True love ~ may she rest in peace :)
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Date: 9/26/2020 8:22:00 PM
The great "if only's" of a lost love perfectly articulated, Gregory, drawing us into the last moments - the last breath. Congratulations on your sad, yet poignant POTW.
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Date: 9/23/2020 5:10:00 PM
Congratulations, Greg, on POTW poem packed with emotion.
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Date: 9/23/2020 1:40:00 PM
Congratulations on your POTW win. WOW!!! What a story/write. Your pen was writing overtime with this one. Enjoy your win.............
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Date: 9/22/2020 7:24:00 AM
This is great writing G, so many familial details makes it seem like a true life experience, only you can weave a web of intrigue like this.
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Date: 9/20/2020 5:49:00 PM
"Rose on the Vine" When I think of this, so many thoughts linger. This is beautiful, tender and emotional, all at the same time. just "one more gaze ... " into "her lost love's shining eyes" I can feel her heart. Your heart in every word. Congratulations Greg, on Poem of the Week. Your thoughts caress gently around me. Hugs, Brandy
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Date: 9/20/2020 4:27:00 PM
A great big congratulations for the POTW selection, Greg. Awesome writing that deserves the honor!
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Date: 9/20/2020 3:04:00 PM
OMG, this is absolutely amazing. FAVE!!!
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Date: 9/20/2020 7:32:00 AM
Greg, congratulations on POTW with this amazing write, so emotional and well done, a FAV for me _Constance
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Date: 9/20/2020 5:20:00 AM
Powerful emotions, Greg..the final words were reserved for her first love..congrats on poem of the week.
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Date: 9/20/2020 4:54:00 AM
Greg, an excellent captivating emotive poem, your poems often leave me wanting part 2, Congratulations on POTW!
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Date: 9/18/2020 9:39:00 AM
Terrific writing, Greg. There are mysteries behind her eyelids that can only be hinted at. What memories she feels must be hidden from her children. The wash of emotions over the 'what ifs' of life, knowing that life was wonderful just as it turned out. Evocative, mysterious, slightly ambiguous writing, which you excel at. Blessings ~ John
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Date: 9/17/2020 11:54:00 AM
Such a poignant write dear Gregory sir.. each lines dripping pure emotions..Death knocking door..ironical one..! I believe your doing well.I am going to FAVE your splendid work:-)Keep inspiring..Take care sir. Warm regards sent your way..
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Date: 9/15/2020 3:23:00 AM
This to me is exquisite poetry. Has the depths, the beauty, the emotional feel of a real life story. And such is very hard to put into ink. A truly exceptional poem my friend. And one that expresses a sad reality that is far too common in life. A fav... God bless...
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