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Rose


I know that I am dying, I am fading fast,
     my life is almost over, by tomorrow I will be dead;
and I find myself on a grave stone draped in quietus,
        come the next dawn- I will be withered gone.

A girl brought me to this vast place of deep tears,
     her sad weeping wet my soft red velvet petals;
she had plucked me from my shade in her little garden,
          oh, I was so happy there growing by the fence.

I heard her say the word baby in her sadness,
     then she placed me gently on this cold tomb to die;
will I bring the baby peace- will the baby know me,
          soon we are alone, baby and me- hello I whisper.

My name is Rose, soon I will join you in the other world,
     that night I watched the moon and stars above;
for the last time I knew the dawn and then I gasped,
           all was still -  I was in the hand of a child.

The child pressed me to his lips and kissed me beautiful,
     my petals were no longer brittle cold but lovely;
and here we lay under the blue azure sky and cool earth,
         a rose and a baby boy, joined in death by eternal love.

For years we listen to birds singing and wind sighing,
     the rain gently falling and snowflakes drifting in winter;
birds in circled flight above and distant whispers of love,
          and the tears of an old woman falling on our tomb. 
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August 23, 2016

Verse/Personification/Rose
Copyright Protected, ID 16-822-769-0
All Rights Reserved.  Written under Pseudonym.

For the contest, And In The Words, She Blooms
sponsor, Casarah Nance

First Place
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Arnone Avatar
September 15, 2016 at 3:17 PM
Wow. Love the image of the rose passing to the baby. Beautiful and creepy at the same time.
Neumann Avatar
September 15, 2016 at 6:03 AM
Lots of congratulations. This is brilliant. Many wishes, Kai
Hlabisa Avatar
September 15, 2016 at 3:00 AM
Well-placed and deserved number 1, lovely work Constance
Richards Avatar
September 14, 2016 at 7:39 PM
As always, your poem comes from deep within your own experience. Congratulations on your first place win, Constance!
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 14, 2016 at 1:55 PM
Comparing the wilted rose to the dead baby, I see the comparison. Poignant and lovely Constance! Congratulations on your outstanding first placement! # 7 ; )
Scars Avatar
September 14, 2016 at 12:56 PM
Broken Wings, I am just back with my heartfelt congrats on your awesome top placement! well deserved :):) -luloo
Nusker Avatar
September 14, 2016 at 12:22 PM
Wow this poem is a gem. Congratulations on your well deserved top placement, B.W.
Allison Avatar
September 14, 2016 at 12:02 PM
Beautiful just beautiful Constance:-) many congrats on your top spot:-) hugs Jan xx
Daniel Avatar
August 26, 2016 at 1:29 AM
Very beautiful...what a way to tell through the eyes of a rose:) Wish you all the best:)
Martin Avatar
August 24, 2016 at 5:50 PM
Memorable my sad lady!!! good work wirth the verse and personnification! Tom
Scars Avatar
August 24, 2016 at 10:51 AM
Broken Wings, just beautiful..I chose Rose too and yours is just marvelous lady...amazing...good luck :)-luloo
Dietrich Avatar
August 24, 2016 at 12:26 AM
Outstanding verse, Constance. It's amazing how you can take this similar theme and weave it again and again into something fresh and beautiful like this . FAVE. now I am caught up at last over here. A good night to you, sweet poet.
Wigley Avatar
August 23, 2016 at 11:39 PM
This is lovely, BW, I take a shortcut into town when I walk, through a Crematorium, and the little children's area is the first area I walk through. A very poignant piece, beautifully done. Viv x
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