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Rookie Without Control

run for fun run as a rookie rookie plays hooky rookie seeks fame fame is a game fame can hurt hurt like dirt hurt your skills skills and drills skills to run run out of fun run until faint faint no sound faint dead away away not found away to place place thumbs down place out of breath breath with a frown breath slow slow status quo slow and shaking shaking lips shaking aching aching lungs aching heart heart torn apart heart sad sad and mad sad and ashamed ashamed lack of training ashamed but lingering lingering placers lingering racers racers cheer racers chant chant and rant chant for fame fame not shame fame for the win win wherein win with a plan plan to work plan the pace pace the race pace under control control time control breath next next . . . time . . . January 2, 2021 Sponsor Constance La France Contest Name ''B'' Forms, 10 Plus lines I chose the theme breathless and the form blitz

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Date: 1/20/2022 11:13:00 AM
Reason, congratulations on your Third Place win in my B Forms contest ~Constance
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Date: 1/10/2022 8:35:00 PM
Great writing in Blitz form. Long and lovely narration. Congratulations!
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Date: 1/13/2022 4:53:00 AM
Thanks, Christraj, it was a fun write.
Date: 1/5/2022 8:55:00 PM
A unique theme that fits the blitz form, Reason:)
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Date: 1/10/2022 7:57:00 PM
thanks, Jo. My random rhyme probably counteracts the blitziness of the form, but I like rhyme. Blitzes themselves leave the reader breathless.

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