Reason A. Poteet Poet Blitz

Rookie Without Control

run for fun
run as a rookie
  rookie plays hooky
  rookie seeks fame
fame is a game
fame can hurt 
  hurt like dirt
  hurt your skills
skills and drills
skills to run  
               run out of fun
               run until faint
                 faint no sound
                 faint dead away
               away not found
               away to place 
                 place thumbs down
                 place out of breath
               breath with a frown
               breath slow	
slow status quo                                                           
slow and shaking                                                              
  shaking lips                                                              
  shaking aching                                                                  
aching lungs                                                               
aching heart                                                                
  heart torn apart                                                               
  heart sad                                                               
sad and mad
sad and ashamed	
              ashamed lack of training 
              ashamed but lingering
                lingering placers
                lingering racers
              racers cheer
              racers chant
                chant and rant
                chant for fame
              fame not shame
              fame for the win
  win wherein
  win with a plan
plan to work
plan the pace
   pace the race
   pace under control
control time
control breath next
   next . . .
   time . . .

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Constance La France January 20, 2022 at 11:13 AM Reason, congratulations on your Third Place win in my B Forms contest ~Constance

Christuraj Alex January 10, 2022 at 8:35 PM Great writing in Blitz form. Long and lovely narration. Congratulations! Reason A. Poteet January 13, 2022 at 4:53 AM Thanks, Christraj, it was a fun write.

Joanna Daniel January 5, 2022 at 8:55 PM A unique theme that fits the blitz form, Reason:) Reason A. Poteet January 10, 2022 at 7:57 PM thanks, Jo. My random rhyme probably counteracts the blitziness of the form, but I like rhyme. Blitzes themselves leave the reader breathless.