Murray Mahauariki Poet Senryu

Romantic Senryu

A gentle night breeze,

waves caressing the shore line,

in silence we walk.


Sand between our toes,

under a warm starlit night,

shooting stars we see.


Suddenly I stop,

dropping to one knee I ask,

will you marry me?.


Contest:Romantic Senryu ~ 10th place
27/01/2012
M.Mahauariki © 2012

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Barbara Gorelick January 31, 2012 at 7:36 AM How could she possibly say no..lovely. congrats. BG

Linda-Marie Sweetheart January 30, 2012 at 9:11 PM congrats Murray on a top ten win for an excellent entry luv..

Andrea Dietrich January 30, 2012 at 4:15 PM ah, this was so sweet. Very nice, Murray. Congrats to you, Mr. Romantic.

Carolyn Devonshire January 30, 2012 at 11:51 AM Murray, your words made me feel like I was there watching you propose. I hope she said yes! Congratulations on your win in Francine's contest. Love, Carolyn Murray Mahauariki January 30, 2012 at 3:50 PM ahh yes she did, but things didn't wok out in the end

Carol Sunshine Brown January 30, 2012 at 11:33 AM Congratulations on your winning placement in Francine's contest Murray. Love, Carol Murray Mahauariki January 30, 2012 at 3:49 PM thank you

Francine Roberts January 30, 2012 at 11:25 AM truly romantic, congrats on your 10th place win Murray Murray Mahauariki January 30, 2012 at 3:49 PM thank you

David Williams January 27, 2012 at 12:23 PM Murray excellent entry, best of luck my friend..David Murray Mahauariki January 27, 2012 at 1:13 PM Thank you.

Carol Sunshine Brown January 27, 2012 at 9:36 AM I enjoyed reading your beautiful poetry this morning Murray. This week has flown by for me. I hope you enjoy your weekend and find the inspiration to write some more during this time. Love, Carol Murray Mahauariki January 27, 2012 at 1:13 PM Thank you, and yeah I'm trying to write under the guidance of my uncle, so I have to write everyday.

Robert Pettit January 26, 2012 at 11:42 PM Good trio of romantic senryu, Murray. Was the Southern Cross in the night sky when you proposed? Murray Mahauariki January 27, 2012 at 1:12 PM I think is was actually? Sorta got a thing about walking hand in hand under a full moon along the beach.

Nette Onclaud January 26, 2012 at 11:35 PM incredibly dreaammy, M... love the last stanza!.. my winning bet!..:) huggs! Murray Mahauariki January 27, 2012 at 1:14 PM yeah my dream wedding would be on a sandy white beach in the islands somewhere, just as the full moon rises.

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders January 26, 2012 at 11:01 PM Sooo romantic! Lots of luck in the contest. Blessings, Rhonda Murray Mahauariki January 27, 2012 at 1:15 PM Thank you