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Romantic Senryu

A gentle night breeze, waves caressing the shore line, in silence we walk. Sand between our toes, under a warm starlit night, shooting stars we see. Suddenly I stop, dropping to one knee I ask, will you marry me?.
Contest:Romantic Senryu ~ 10th place 27/01/2012
M.Mahauariki © 2012

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Date: 1/31/2012 7:36:00 AM
How could she possibly say no..lovely. congrats. BG
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Date: 1/30/2012 9:11:00 PM
congrats Murray on a top ten win for an excellent entry luv..
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Date: 1/30/2012 4:15:00 PM
ah, this was so sweet. Very nice, Murray. Congrats to you, Mr. Romantic.
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Date: 1/30/2012 11:51:00 AM
Murray, your words made me feel like I was there watching you propose. I hope she said yes! Congratulations on your win in Francine's contest. Love, Carolyn
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Murray Mahauariki
Date: 1/30/2012 3:50:00 PM
ahh yes she did, but things didn't wok out in the end
Date: 1/30/2012 11:33:00 AM
Congratulations on your winning placement in Francine's contest Murray. Love, Carol
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Murray Mahauariki
Date: 1/30/2012 3:49:00 PM
thank you
Date: 1/30/2012 11:25:00 AM
truly romantic, congrats on your 10th place win Murray
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Murray Mahauariki
Date: 1/30/2012 3:49:00 PM
thank you
Date: 1/27/2012 12:23:00 PM
Murray excellent entry, best of luck my friend..David
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Murray Mahauariki
Date: 1/27/2012 1:13:00 PM
Thank you.
Date: 1/27/2012 9:36:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your beautiful poetry this morning Murray. This week has flown by for me. I hope you enjoy your weekend and find the inspiration to write some more during this time. Love, Carol
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Murray Mahauariki
Date: 1/27/2012 1:13:00 PM
Thank you, and yeah I'm trying to write under the guidance of my uncle, so I have to write everyday.
Date: 1/26/2012 11:42:00 PM
Good trio of romantic senryu, Murray. Was the Southern Cross in the night sky when you proposed?
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Murray Mahauariki
Date: 1/27/2012 1:12:00 PM
I think is was actually? Sorta got a thing about walking hand in hand under a full moon along the beach.
Date: 1/26/2012 11:35:00 PM
incredibly dreaammy, M... love the last stanza!.. my winning bet!..:) huggs!
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Murray Mahauariki
Date: 1/27/2012 1:14:00 PM
yeah my dream wedding would be on a sandy white beach in the islands somewhere, just as the full moon rises.
Date: 1/26/2012 11:01:00 PM
Sooo romantic! Lots of luck in the contest. Blessings, Rhonda
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Murray Mahauariki
Date: 1/27/2012 1:15:00 PM
Thank you

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