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River's Birth

Vernal hills collect God’s tears
Torrents surge to shower’s edge
Pooling life’s essence begins
Life’s highway is born

Entry for John Freeman's Contest

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Verlena S. Walker

Date: 2/26/2014 1:27:00 AM

Congratulations John on your win... Well written succinct... Verlena

Audrey Haick

Date: 2/26/2011 9:07:00 PM

Congratulations on your Ist Place Win in John's contest, Shawn. Very well deserved. Enjoy! Always, Annalise

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/26/2011 4:52:00 PM

I know that God weeps but someday judgment will come..Congratulations on your win..Sara

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 2/25/2011 6:18:00 AM

Congratulations on this outstanding poem placing 1st in John's contest Shawn. Love, Carol

Constance La France

Date: 2/25/2011 3:14:00 AM

Congratulations on your win.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/24/2011 11:52:00 PM

A BIG congratulations to you, Shawn! Great metaphor of life.

John Freeman

Date: 2/24/2011 6:26:00 PM

Extremely happy to see you at the top Shawn. Congratulations on your worthy poem's first place honor, Agape, Moses

Shawn Sackman

Date: 1/23/2011 9:26:00 PM

Thanks,Robert. Your suggestion is great and already implemented. Thanks:0) Shawn

Robert Pettit

Date: 1/23/2011 8:33:00 PM

Shawn, everything is quite descriptive. Your second line has one too many syllables. A suggestion: how about replacing "towards" with "to"? That will bring the line down to seven syllables.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/23/2011 6:14:00 PM

good luck in the contest,, sure enjoyed the passion,..p.d,

Steven Henderson

Date: 1/23/2011 4:05:00 PM

Very nice and imaginative! It was a beautiful boat ride! Thank you for sharing! Steve