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River's Birth

Vernal hills collect God’s tears
Torrents surge to shower’s edge
Pooling life’s essence begins
Life’s highway is born

Entry for John Freeman's Contest

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Verlena S. Walker

February 26, 2014 at 1:27 AM

Congratulations John on your win... Well written succinct... Verlena

Audrey Haick

February 26, 2011 at 9:07 PM

Congratulations on your Ist Place Win in John's contest, Shawn. Very well deserved. Enjoy! Always, Annalise

Sara Kendrick

February 26, 2011 at 4:52 PM

I know that God weeps but someday judgment will come..Congratulations on your win..Sara

Carol Sunshine Brown

February 25, 2011 at 6:18 AM

Congratulations on this outstanding poem placing 1st in John's contest Shawn. Love, Carol

Constance La France

February 25, 2011 at 3:14 AM

Congratulations on your win.

Andrea Dietrich

February 24, 2011 at 11:52 PM

A BIG congratulations to you, Shawn! Great metaphor of life.

John Freeman

February 24, 2011 at 6:26 PM

Extremely happy to see you at the top Shawn. Congratulations on your worthy poem's first place honor, Agape, Moses

Shawn Sackman

January 23, 2011 at 9:26 PM

Thanks,Robert. Your suggestion is great and already implemented. Thanks:0) Shawn

Robert Pettit

January 23, 2011 at 8:33 PM

Shawn, everything is quite descriptive. Your second line has one too many syllables. A suggestion: how about replacing "towards" with "to"? That will bring the line down to seven syllables.