Richard Lamoureux Poet Free verse

Rising Above My Pinnacle

Rising 

I climb towards the pinnacle of my mind
Slipping on my inconsistancies 
Grabbing at the edges of my understandings
Afraid to look down
For fear I will fall into my abyss 

My feet hold fast 
Pushing me upwards
Extending my reach to the next crevice
My brain’s intricate folds
Jagged memories
This words I hold onto 
They slow my ascent
My not good enoughs
My cannots
My I've always been this way

Here I am hanging upside down
Telling myself
I'm tired
I can't hold on
It's okay to let go

But wait 
I grasp
I reach for the I can
Until I pull myself to solid ground
I stand upon my finite understanding
Now I realize I was never alone
Ropes of hope had held me in place
Over the landscape of my life my eyes trace
Seeing clearly my yesterday
Each step that led to today
All the people that helped me find my way
I realize I have not come to the end of me
My landscape is ever changing
I flap my wings and rise above my mountain
My possibilities are endless
For now my mind is free
In the distance
Eternity
Time is not insurmountable.

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Cecilia Macfarlane October 24, 2014 at 1:38 PM Rick, loved the journey through your mind and how it ends so positive. Awesome write, enjoyed immensely! Hugs Richard Lamoureux October 26, 2014 at 8:46 AM A late response, sorry somehow I missed your visit. Hugs back.

Verlena S. Walker October 14, 2014 at 9:51 PM Such depth Richard and done well. Congratulations on this deserved win... Verlena Richard Lamoureux October 15, 2014 at 8:51 AM Thanks Verlena.

Monterey Sirak October 14, 2014 at 8:48 AM Brilliant piece!! I love the line "I reach for the I can" Sometimes all we can do is reach out, and the 'I can' becomes 'I will' and then 'I did' Richard Lamoureux October 15, 2014 at 8:52 AM So true!

Nette Onclaud October 12, 2014 at 2:30 PM triumphant ride to the top, rich.. a round of cheers on your shining win Richard Lamoureux October 15, 2014 at 8:53 AM Thanks Nette.

Carrie Richards October 11, 2014 at 5:50 PM I love the comparisons, and how you took this theme and literally, did, turn it upside down into something more personal !! Well done, Richard! Richard Lamoureux October 15, 2014 at 8:54 AM Thanks Carrie, I wanted to do something different with the Theme.

Debbie Guzzi October 11, 2014 at 4:13 PM I so would love to fly more, the closest I got was a canvass by? plane & a pontoon plane? Congrad's on your win, Light & Love Richard Lamoureux October 15, 2014 at 8:55 AM I was in a helicopter once, it was amazing.

Abdul Malik Mandani October 11, 2014 at 10:54 AM Very nice Richard. I love it. You finally found how to let go and hang onto it! Richard Lamoureux October 15, 2014 at 8:56 AM Thanks Abdul.

Brenda Meier-Hans October 11, 2014 at 9:22 AM Wonderfully written Richard. I love the meaning behind this lovely poem and what a wonderful feeling when you discover this. Congratulations on your win! Richard Lamoureux October 15, 2014 at 8:57 AM Thanks Brenda.

Maurice Yvonne October 11, 2014 at 9:07 AM Congratulations on your win Richard.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma October 11, 2014 at 8:12 AM Never to give up hope is so true Richard! What a beautiful verse my friend! Congrats on ur great win! One of your very bests!

Paul Callus October 11, 2014 at 7:11 AM Congratulations on your win Richard! This is free verse at its best, and metaphorically speaking it's excellent. Why should we give up hope in life when we can find an abundance of help along the way! // paul

Maurice Yvonne October 9, 2014 at 7:02 PM This is a very special write Richard. Well done.

Carol Eastman October 7, 2014 at 9:06 AM Great development... and wonderful message. Richard Lamoureux October 7, 2014 at 9:38 AM Thanks Carol.

Justin Bordner October 6, 2014 at 9:27 PM The intensity, and mature simplicity with which you build a landscape of emotions and mentality is powerfully portrayed Richard. Climbing brain mountain is arduous, standing at the summit of your soul the reward, exploring the edges, owning the decisions, you are a liberated soul in knowing struggle is a chance to excel. Awesome poem of courage, and I like how you acknowledge God so very subtly. J.A.B. Richard Lamoureux October 7, 2014 at 8:01 AM Thanks for this thoughtful comment. If I could favorite a comment this would surely make the list.

Jerry T Curtis October 6, 2014 at 7:41 PM Oh Oh I feel another Winner coming on ! Richard Lamoureux October 7, 2014 at 8:03 AM I hope you are right. Thanks Jerry.

Arthur Vaso October 5, 2014 at 10:21 PM I just love it, flows so well, regardless of this positive message this is a story tellers poem! ( well in my view ) For me, my favorite style! Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2014 at 11:24 PM Thanks Arthur, you positivity is a Ways appreciated.

Liam Mcdaid October 5, 2014 at 6:58 PM you really made me smile richard thank you from the heart so very kind of you dear friend i changed it on a special request your words touched me bless you pal Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2014 at 11:23 PM My pleasure my friend, bless you as well.

Eileen Manassian October 5, 2014 at 3:46 PM Fabulous! !! Richard. ....a dream of a write.... Fly free.Internet problems. ... hopes this goes through. Change accent to ascent...... hugd Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2014 at 6:46 PM Thanks Eileen, I changed it. Hugs back.

Harry Horsman October 5, 2014 at 3:46 PM love the personification here,powerful poem, one to lead by one to learn from..in fact has it all Richard.. Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2014 at 6:45 PM You are kind Harry, thanks!

Jan Allison October 5, 2014 at 2:59 PM powerful, inspirational, exceptional you will reach the top with this write Richard ! Good luck in the contest:-) Hugs jan xxx Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2014 at 6:47 PM I hope so Jan, thanks and a big hug to you.

Andrea Dietrich October 5, 2014 at 11:47 AM this is , sir , is OUTSTANDING work. I love how you extended your metaphor so marvelously. My entry was nowhere as intricate and profound as this. I expect to see this at the pinnacle of the winners' list. A FAVE Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2014 at 6:48 PM Wow thanks Andrea, this comment makes my day!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma October 5, 2014 at 10:47 AM Fabulous work Richard! Endless possibilities n flapping wings to rise above mountains is the best I like! Such an inspiring write! Best wishes! Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2014 at 6:48 PM Thanks Upma. ;0)

Tim Smith October 5, 2014 at 10:31 AM Very inspirational...Rise above the hurdles in life. Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2014 at 6:49 PM Thanks a bunch Tim.

Liam Mcdaid October 5, 2014 at 10:22 AM really i tip my hat richard on this one dear friend love how you painted the ending vision excellent piece Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2014 at 6:51 PM Thanks Liam. I like your new Avatar you look distinguished.

Charmaine Chircop October 5, 2014 at 9:36 AM This is really powerful.I love the message,to be where I stand today with the help of others.That shows humbleness,and to rise over the mountain.Encouraging indeed.Yes you can ,and yes you will Richard. Richard Lamoureux October 5, 2014 at 6:52 PM This one just came to me this morning. I'm pleased you like it.

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