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Rising Above My Pinnacle

Rising 

I climb towards the pinnacle of my mind
Slipping on my inconsistancies 
Grabbing at the edges of my understandings
Afraid to look down
For fear I will fall into my abyss 

My feet hold fast 
Pushing me upwards
Extending my reach to the next crevice
My brain’s intricate folds
Jagged memories
This words I hold onto 
They slow my ascent
My not good enoughs
My cannots
My I've always been this way

Here I am hanging upside down
Telling myself
I'm tired
I can't hold on
It's okay to let go

But wait 
I grasp
I reach for the I can
Until I pull myself to solid ground
I stand upon my finite understanding
Now I realize I was never alone
Ropes of hope had held me in place
Over the landscape of my life my eyes trace
Seeing clearly my yesterday
Each step that led to today
All the people that helped me find my way
I realize I have not come to the end of me
My landscape is ever changing
I flap my wings and rise above my mountain
My possibilities are endless
For now my mind is free
In the distance
Eternity
Time is not insurmountable.

Copyright © Richard Lamoureux | Year Posted 2014

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Cecilia Macfarlane Date: 10/24/2014 1:38:00 PM Rick, loved the journey through your mind and how it ends so positive. Awesome write, enjoyed immensely! Hugs Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/26/2014 8:46:00 AM A late response, sorry somehow I missed your visit. Hugs back.

Verlena S. Walker Date: 10/14/2014 9:51:00 PM Such depth Richard and done well. Congratulations on this deserved win... Verlena Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/15/2014 8:51:00 AM Thanks Verlena.

Monterey Sirak Date: 10/14/2014 8:48:00 AM Brilliant piece!! I love the line "I reach for the I can" Sometimes all we can do is reach out, and the 'I can' becomes 'I will' and then 'I did' Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/15/2014 8:52:00 AM So true!

Nette Onclaud Date: 10/12/2014 2:30:00 PM triumphant ride to the top, rich.. a round of cheers on your shining win Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/15/2014 8:53:00 AM Thanks Nette.

Carrie Richards Date: 10/11/2014 5:50:00 PM I love the comparisons, and how you took this theme and literally, did, turn it upside down into something more personal !! Well done, Richard! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/15/2014 8:54:00 AM Thanks Carrie, I wanted to do something different with the Theme.

Debbie Guzzi Date: 10/11/2014 4:13:00 PM I so would love to fly more, the closest I got was a canvass by? plane & a pontoon plane? Congrad's on your win, Light & Love Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/15/2014 8:55:00 AM I was in a helicopter once, it was amazing.

Abdul Malik Date: 10/11/2014 10:54:00 AM Very nice Richard. I love it. You finally found how to let go and hang onto it! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/15/2014 8:56:00 AM Thanks Abdul.

Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 10/11/2014 9:22:00 AM Wonderfully written Richard. I love the meaning behind this lovely poem and what a wonderful feeling when you discover this. Congratulations on your win! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/15/2014 8:57:00 AM Thanks Brenda.

Maurice Yvonne Date: 10/11/2014 9:07:00 AM Congratulations on your win Richard. Login to Reply

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 10/11/2014 8:12:00 AM Never to give up hope is so true Richard! What a beautiful verse my friend! Congrats on ur great win! One of your very bests! Login to Reply

Paul Callus Date: 10/11/2014 7:11:00 AM Congratulations on your win Richard! This is free verse at its best, and metaphorically speaking it's excellent. Why should we give up hope in life when we can find an abundance of help along the way! // paul Login to Reply

Maurice Yvonne Date: 10/9/2014 7:02:00 PM This is a very special write Richard. Well done. Login to Reply

Carol Eastman Date: 10/7/2014 9:06:00 AM Great development... and wonderful message. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/7/2014 9:38:00 AM Thanks Carol.

Justin Bordner Date: 10/6/2014 9:27:00 PM The intensity, and mature simplicity with which you build a landscape of emotions and mentality is powerfully portrayed Richard. Climbing brain mountain is arduous, standing at the summit of your soul the reward, exploring the edges, owning the decisions, you are a liberated soul in knowing struggle is a chance to excel. Awesome poem of courage, and I like how you acknowledge God so very subtly. J.A.B. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/7/2014 8:01:00 AM Thanks for this thoughtful comment. If I could favorite a comment this would surely make the list.

Jerry T Curtis Date: 10/6/2014 7:41:00 PM Oh Oh I feel another Winner coming on ! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/7/2014 8:03:00 AM I hope you are right. Thanks Jerry.

Arthur Vaso Date: 10/5/2014 10:21:00 PM I just love it, flows so well, regardless of this positive message this is a story tellers poem! ( well in my view ) For me, my favorite style! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/5/2014 11:24:00 PM Thanks Arthur, you positivity is a Ways appreciated.

Liam Mcdaid Date: 10/5/2014 6:58:00 PM you really made me smile richard thank you from the heart so very kind of you dear friend i changed it on a special request your words touched me bless you pal Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/5/2014 11:23:00 PM My pleasure my friend, bless you as well.

Harry Horsman Date: 10/5/2014 3:46:00 PM love the personification here,powerful poem, one to lead by one to learn from..in fact has it all Richard.. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/5/2014 6:45:00 PM You are kind Harry, thanks!

Eileen Manassian Date: 10/5/2014 3:46:00 PM Fabulous! !! Richard. ....a dream of a write.... Fly free.Internet problems. ... hopes this goes through. Change accent to ascent...... hugd Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/5/2014 6:46:00 PM Thanks Eileen, I changed it. Hugs back.

Jan Allison Date: 10/5/2014 2:59:00 PM powerful, inspirational, exceptional you will reach the top with this write Richard ! Good luck in the contest:-) Hugs jan xxx Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/5/2014 6:47:00 PM I hope so Jan, thanks and a big hug to you.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/5/2014 11:47:00 AM this is , sir , is OUTSTANDING work. I love how you extended your metaphor so marvelously. My entry was nowhere as intricate and profound as this. I expect to see this at the pinnacle of the winners' list. A FAVE Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/5/2014 6:48:00 PM Wow thanks Andrea, this comment makes my day!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 10/5/2014 10:47:00 AM Fabulous work Richard! Endless possibilities n flapping wings to rise above mountains is the best I like! Such an inspiring write! Best wishes! Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/5/2014 6:48:00 PM Thanks Upma. ;0)

Tim Smith Date: 10/5/2014 10:31:00 AM Very inspirational...Rise above the hurdles in life. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/5/2014 6:49:00 PM Thanks a bunch Tim.

Liam Mcdaid Date: 10/5/2014 10:22:00 AM really i tip my hat richard on this one dear friend love how you painted the ending vision excellent piece Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/5/2014 6:51:00 PM Thanks Liam. I like your new Avatar you look distinguished.

Charmaine Chircop Date: 10/5/2014 9:36:00 AM This is really powerful.I love the message,to be where I stand today with the help of others.That shows humbleness,and to rise over the mountain.Encouraging indeed.Yes you can ,and yes you will Richard. Login to Reply Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/5/2014 6:52:00 PM This one just came to me this morning. I'm pleased you like it.

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