Sotto Poet Poet Quatrain

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Rise and Shine

 
Written: January 09, 2024
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A glimpse of a lavish dawn graced with hail,
Thorn sparkles and dewdrops on the rose wane.
Honey bees and robin-raptured boughs wail,
Calling me young and pale with a spring strain.

But I grasp the pride in the required time,
With glee, his father leaped for the flower.
As my zeal fades, I come back and sublime,
Will loom to be weathered and will glower.

Let me startle with pride in your garden,
Since I just have a short time left to live.
Let hope fool me if I'm weak from pardon,
It could lead you to smile at a blithe thrive.

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Howard Kerr February 6, 2024 at 8:55 AM Your poem is an uplifting tapestry of verdant visuals that automatically impress and imprint on the mind. Deep philosophically threads complement in a very profound sense the above mentioned imagery. Themes of fortitude and time are explored with vigour. Sotto, this is a truly remarkable opus Howard

Valsa George January 11, 2024 at 8:59 PM Your poem is fresh and soothing like the sweet dawn graced with hail and dew. Nature is so soothing with a lot of sensory delights. Your poem is a conglomeration of both beauty and pricking truths. Flowers, honey bees and robins.... lovely combination! Your chosen words add a special beauty to the poem. Your rhyming skill always astonishes me.

Hiya Sharma January 10, 2024 at 6:04 PM Gosh, another favorite from you, dear Sotto! How gorgeously you've described the intriguing feelings of the riveting nature that seeks to flourish through beauty in the garden.. You've so artistically given a voice to these nuances and coloured a mesmeric picture with your exquisite phraseology.. "Thorn sparkles and dewdrops on the rose wane" That first stanza is really captivating! "Since I just have a short time left to live" Nature too reminds us of life's fleeting essence.. Gorgeously done!!

Maria Fernandez-Garcia January 10, 2024 at 2:26 PM Stunning Quatrain Sotto. Love and nature. Wonderful combination. Very well penned. I really enjoyed it. Thanks. Blessings

Silent One January 10, 2024 at 11:03 AM Hey Sotto your poem vividly captures the fleeting beauty of a dawn adorned with hail, presenting a snapshot of nature in its momentary glory. It skilfully intertwines natural elements, such as thorns, dewdrops, honey bees, and robin-raptured boughs, creating a sensory experience that transports the reader to the scene... The poem masterfully weaves together themes of time, beauty, and the fleeting nature of life, leaving the reader with a contemplative and emotive impression.

Joseph May January 10, 2024 at 9:13 AM Great imagery in this well crafted write Sotto..

Jay Narain January 10, 2024 at 9:09 AM Nice emotional poem blended with nature. You have long life to live.

Vijay Pandit January 10, 2024 at 4:50 AM Words woven beautifully with nature and emotions--lovely poem my friend.

Ink Empress January 9, 2024 at 11:58 PM You always do rhymes so well, so unique and captivating. And this poem depicts inner emotions and how one finds light amidst fleeting time and all that which goes around. A very soul hitting and powerful poem this is. I love so many lines in this, especially love how you’ve written “ But I grasp the pride in the required time,“ can feel the strength there in just that line “ Since I just have a short time left to live. Let hope fool me if I'm weak from pardon,“ that hits so strong! BoL

Paige Hind January 9, 2024 at 7:16 PM Oh this is beautiful. What a lovely metaphor, using your garden to bless lives, we all aren't guaranteed how long we live, but you grace us here :)

Hilda Greenhough January 9, 2024 at 6:38 PM The description of an overflowing , but perhaps struggling garden, caught my interest. My gardens have always been maybe. I liked the glorification of the sparkling thorn. It's just different.

Daniel Henry Rodgers January 9, 2024 at 5:58 PM Hey Sotto, your poem struck a chord, blending emotions into words beautifully. Your imagery painted vivid scenes, leaving a lingering resonance. Keep pouring your soul into verse; it's a gift that touches hearts. Well done! - Blessings Daniel