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Written: January 09, 2024 _________________________________________ A glimpse of a lavish dawn graced with hail, Thorn sparkles and dewdrops on the rose wane. Honey bees and robin-raptured boughs wail, Calling me young and pale with a spring strain. But I grasp the pride in the required time, With glee, his father leaped for the flower. As my zeal fades, I come back and sublime, Will loom to be weathered and will glower. Let me startle with pride in your garden, Since I just have a short time left to live. Let hope fool me if I'm weak from pardon, It could lead you to smile at a blithe thrive.

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Howard Kerr

Date: 2/6/2024 8:55:00 AM

Your poem is an uplifting tapestry of verdant visuals that automatically impress and imprint on the mind. Deep philosophically threads complement in a very profound sense the above mentioned imagery. Themes of fortitude and time are explored with vigour. Sotto, this is a truly remarkable opus Howard

Valsa George

Date: 1/11/2024 8:59:00 PM

Your poem is fresh and soothing like the sweet dawn graced with hail and dew. Nature is so soothing with a lot of sensory delights. Your poem is a conglomeration of both beauty and pricking truths. Flowers, honey bees and robins.... lovely combination! Your chosen words add a special beauty to the poem. Your rhyming skill always astonishes me.

Hiya Sharma

Date: 1/10/2024 6:04:00 PM

Gosh, another favorite from you, dear Sotto! How gorgeously you've described the intriguing feelings of the riveting nature that seeks to flourish through beauty in the garden.. You've so artistically given a voice to these nuances and coloured a mesmeric picture with your exquisite phraseology.. "Thorn sparkles and dewdrops on the rose wane" That first stanza is really captivating! "Since I just have a short time left to live" Nature too reminds us of life's fleeting essence.. Gorgeously done!!

Maria Fernandez-Garcia

Date: 1/10/2024 2:26:00 PM

Stunning Quatrain Sotto. Love and nature. Wonderful combination. Very well penned. I really enjoyed it. Thanks. Blessings

Silent One

Date: 1/10/2024 11:03:00 AM

Hey Sotto your poem vividly captures the fleeting beauty of a dawn adorned with hail, presenting a snapshot of nature in its momentary glory. It skilfully intertwines natural elements, such as thorns, dewdrops, honey bees, and robin-raptured boughs, creating a sensory experience that transports the reader to the scene... The poem masterfully weaves together themes of time, beauty, and the fleeting nature of life, leaving the reader with a contemplative and emotive impression.

Joseph May

Date: 1/10/2024 9:13:00 AM

Great imagery in this well crafted write Sotto..

Jay Narain

Date: 1/10/2024 9:09:00 AM

Nice emotional poem blended with nature. You have long life to live.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 1/10/2024 5:27:00 AM

such a soulful creation, dear Sotto! I appreciate the subtle way you addressed the transitory nature of time. Your rhymes grabbed my attention as did your rhyme scheme. I especially liked this line: "let me startle with pride in your garden since I have a short time to live." Every spring we plant flowers and bulbs. When they bloom, I am delighted and proud but always pause because I know their beauty is fleeting. Planting grounds me and helps me realize the fleeting nature of life itself. fav!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/10/2024 4:50:00 AM

Words woven beautifully with nature and emotions--lovely poem my friend.

Ink Empress

Date: 1/9/2024 11:58:00 PM

You always do rhymes so well, so unique and captivating. And this poem depicts inner emotions and how one finds light amidst fleeting time and all that which goes around. A very soul hitting and powerful poem this is. I love so many lines in this, especially love how you’ve written “ But I grasp the pride in the required time,“ can feel the strength there in just that line “ Since I just have a short time left to live. Let hope fool me if I'm weak from pardon,“ that hits so strong! BoL

Paige Hind

Date: 1/9/2024 7:16:00 PM

Oh this is beautiful. What a lovely metaphor, using your garden to bless lives, we all aren't guaranteed how long we live, but you grace us here :)

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 1/9/2024 6:38:00 PM

The description of an overflowing , but perhaps struggling garden, caught my interest. My gardens have always been maybe. I liked the glorification of the sparkling thorn. It's just different.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 1/9/2024 5:58:00 PM

Hey Sotto, your poem struck a chord, blending emotions into words beautifully. Your imagery painted vivid scenes, leaving a lingering resonance. Keep pouring your soul into verse; it's a gift that touches hearts. Well done! - Blessings Daniel