Riptides

riptides sneaky undertows drags black sand back into waves ~ sea hawks sound alarms 4/3/23 Contest: A New Nature Themed Haiku Sponsor: Tania Kitchin

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Valsa George

Date: 4/10/2023 9:15:00 PM

Whenever we are at the edge of a seastrand, we experience such undertows and feel the sand under our feet slipping away. I feel it. Great haiku. All the best dear Sam.

Sam Kauffman
Date: 4/12/2023 10:27:00 AM

You are so right Valsa. As the waves move in and out we can feel the sand pulling our feet into the waves! It makes me happy to know that this haiku was a visceral experience in poetry! Blessings of the Easter season to you dear friend!

Joanna Daniel

Date: 4/4/2023 1:56:00 AM

Great haiku, Sam:)

Sam Kauffman
Date: 4/4/2023 10:00:00 AM

Thank you so much Jo! This one was such fun to write! Blessings to you! Happy Easter!

John Watt

Date: 4/3/2023 4:07:00 PM

Samba, I always enjoy your sports-related poems. Missing your home town a little? Smiles, R&Rbro

Sam Kauffman
Date: 4/3/2023 8:27:00 PM

Was wondering if anyone would get the double reference! I should have known you would see it right away! This poem was especially fun to write - a little something different! Happy times now that B-Ball is back - the smell of the grass, garlic fries and the sound of a home run off a wooden bat! So glad you enjoyed this haiku! Blessings dear friend! Our Alleluias are coming. Happy Easter!!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/3/2023 1:25:00 PM

- Great one, Sam :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs

Sam Kauffman
Date: 4/3/2023 8:17:00 PM

Thank you so much Anne-Lise! Every time one of our winter storms rolled in there was an ominous sense of warning. All the best! Hugs.