Right As Rain

I’m feeling right as rain again,
Without those nasty kidney stones.
It’s nice to be without the pain.
I’m feeling right as rain again.
Those things were driving me insane.
Now no more crying, groans or moans.
I’m feeling right as rain again,
Without those nasty kidney stones.

*A colleague was in agony with his kidney stones, not me : )
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Greenlee Avatar
June 22, 2011 at 8:21 AM
Well put.Those I hear are agonizing....Thanks for your comment on my poem.Have a great day love...
Mister Roboto Avatar
June 18, 2011 at 1:30 AM
now this is my type of poem! I was looking for some forms of poetry which the style and mine might blend. Triolet came to my sights, and led me back to you my friend. ha!---What form is that? I am no poet...but I am trying to learn all these forms. When I write, it's more like a, well, how do I say this...a #2. I get it all out. I try not to look at it afterward either. BUT, now I have been going back to check and see if I've Shat any good forms.-I hope we are still friends after this vulgarity!
Susan Avatar
June 15, 2011 at 7:25 AM
thanks for introducing me to the triolet. I am not yet familiar with all the forms, and wonder if i'll ever be! so many to choose from! I think you captured the pain well in this poem. As as far as contests go, you know what you like. Think of an interesting contest, then pick the best ones for winners, and don't worry about the people who don't win. There will be other contests for them and maybe, like me, it will motivate them to try harder!
Knop Avatar
June 13, 2011 at 9:25 AM
Great Triolet Jack! I wished I could comment more or post more poems but my right arm and hand are still prevent me from writing. Still painful and also my left shoulder. But thank you so much my friend for your kind comments and mails!!!A friend of mine also suffered from kidney stones which must be hell of pain. Love, Gert and have a great week ahead!
Fraser Avatar
June 12, 2011 at 8:01 AM
I had them a few years back Jack, very painful indeed. I still have a small one in my left kidney, I hope it stay put, and stays small. I appreciate what he has gone through. Many thanks for your always kind words :)
Dietrich Avatar
June 12, 2011 at 7:28 AM
Definitely you have got to try a kyrielle! It was a delight to find out from your blog you are a fan of forms like the sonnet!
K. Avatar
June 11, 2011 at 10:27 PM
oh youchy! thank you for the note at the bottom, i hope your friend will be all right though... and super congrats on your PM :D yay for you :D
A   Avatar
June 11, 2011 at 10:20 PM
Jack,, ouch,, painful... thanks for sharing i suppose... and i'm here also to tell you that you have a very good poet friend in Linda marie... and thank her.. and i was glad to haver pass her p.m. to you.. congratulations... yes i'm happy i finnaly got it squared away... also don't forget the little poets like me,, take care,..p.d.
Sweetheart Avatar
June 11, 2011 at 7:02 PM
soup mail Jack..luv..
Devonshire Avatar
June 11, 2011 at 9:48 AM
Your "wigwag" comment cracked me up, Jack. Wigwam is a common term here, but I've never heard "wigwag" used before. Keep those glasses on. LOL I heard from Gert and sent you a blind copy of his email. He's still in pain, but is waiting for test results from an MRT. He'll be in my prayers until he gets the results and hopefully some good news June 20. Love, Carolyn
Poet Avatar
June 10, 2011 at 7:31 PM
No doubt you are very witty Jack...Enjoyed this clever write..best wishes.
Foulk Avatar
June 10, 2011 at 6:25 PM
i have not had them yet, but my son did, lots of pain that i don't want. reading this i was in a little pain, very vivid write.
Kendrick Avatar
June 10, 2011 at 2:27 PM
Jack, neat write..I am glad that it was not you but feel for the friend..My husband had a bout with them in the past year and it was not pleasant company for him..I hope that your area did not sustain very much damage from the hail..We have limbs and leaves down all over the place but nothing drastic..Thanks for the kind review..Sara
Sweetheart Avatar
June 10, 2011 at 1:58 PM
one of my sons also had kidney stones and he paralleled it like women giving birth it was so painful and stressful.. he finally passed it but after fifteen hours of agony... he thought he would be holding a baby ..haha.. nice Triolette.. a sweet form for a ouchy situation luv.. feeling the emotion of these lines..
Devonshire Avatar
June 10, 2011 at 1:33 PM
LOL Jack, it wasn't Robin who was haunting Sherwood Forest. People told him he could hide there because his enemies would not enter. They thought the forest was haunted. Thanks for your comments. Yes, that co-write with James on "Goodbye, Good Ridance" is still one of my favorite poems. We released some angst and came up with quite a funny poem. Love, Carolyn
Devonshire Avatar
June 10, 2011 at 8:47 AM
LOL Now that's a novel approach to the "stones" contest, Jack. From what I've heard, Kidney stones are very painful. I've never tried a triolet before, but this one is super. Best wishes in the contest, my friend. Love, Carolyn
Dietrich Avatar
June 9, 2011 at 9:46 PM
BRAVO, is this your first triolet?? I am proud of you if it is becuase you did AWESOME with it. Don't you just love them? they are the cutest way to just speak to one moment! And I hope I feel as happy as you do about your kidney stone removal when I go and get my shoulder operated on end of June!
Falotico Avatar
June 9, 2011 at 3:09 PM
Very Nice, and I am glad your are feling better.... and thanks for all your nice comments this week...Michael
Long Avatar
June 9, 2011 at 2:30 PM
glad you are feeling better. this was very clever.cory
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