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Riding the Waves

At the helm
stands tall, surveying
choppy waves
up ahead
face set, determination
he braces himself

Expertly
navigating, he
holds steady
amid the
instability, while the
waves intensify

Eyes widen
as storm surge rolls in
skies darken
winds blow fierce
fighting to stay afloat now
frightened by the swells

Finally
waves begin to calm
dark clouds lift
debris drifts
but he is still intact and
bravely sailing on

Sun breaks through
brilliant, glittering
glorious
golden warmth
gleaming horizon makes him
giddily alive

Intrepid
unmovable and
steadfast, this
is true love
a courageous man willing
to brave all my moods


(NOTE: Although I listed this as a Free Verse, it is actually in Shadorma form...)

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Michelle Faulkner

Date: 11/16/2018 11:01:00 PM

Moving tribute to your love, like the contrast 'holds steady/amid instability' - I think I will give this form a try!

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 11/17/2018 3:01:00 PM

Thank you, Michelle! ;) You should definitely try it!! It's really a fun and versatile form!

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 10/19/2018 3:07:00 AM

You have found yourself a keeper, and he has found one also! I had no idea until the ending this was a metaphor. Very nicely built, full of optimism and hope!

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 10/19/2018 9:54:00 PM

Thank you so much, my friend! ;) You read it exactly as I had hoped (with the metaphor being a surprise at the end)... Glad you liked it!

Line Gauthier

Date: 10/18/2018 10:16:00 PM

Lovely poem and lovely form, Rhona.

Rhona Mcferran
Date: 10/19/2018 9:46:00 PM

Thank you, Line! ;) I just discovered this form recently, but am enjoying it very much!