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Riding the Waves

At the helm stands tall, surveying choppy waves up ahead face set, determination he braces himself Expertly navigating, he holds steady amid the instability, while the waves intensify Eyes widen as storm surge rolls in skies darken winds blow fierce fighting to stay afloat now frightened by the swells Finally waves begin to calm dark clouds lift debris drifts but he is still intact and bravely sailing on Sun breaks through brilliant, glittering glorious golden warmth gleaming horizon makes him giddily alive Intrepid unmovable and steadfast, this is true love a courageous man willing to brave all my moods (NOTE: Although I listed this as a Free Verse, it is actually in Shadorma form...)

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Date: 11/16/2018 11:01:00 PM
Moving tribute to your love, like the contrast 'holds steady/amid instability' - I think I will give this form a try!
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Rhona Mcferran
Date: 11/17/2018 3:01:00 PM
Thank you, Michelle! ;) You should definitely try it!! It's really a fun and versatile form!
Date: 10/19/2018 3:07:00 AM
You have found yourself a keeper, and he has found one also! I had no idea until the ending this was a metaphor. Very nicely built, full of optimism and hope!
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Rhona Mcferran
Date: 10/19/2018 9:54:00 PM
Thank you so much, my friend! ;) You read it exactly as I had hoped (with the metaphor being a surprise at the end)... Glad you liked it!
Date: 10/18/2018 10:16:00 PM
Lovely poem and lovely form, Rhona.
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Rhona Mcferran
Date: 10/19/2018 9:46:00 PM
Thank you, Line! ;) I just discovered this form recently, but am enjoying it very much!

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