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Riding Out the Thunder Storm

The poor little thing, he was just a’shivering Scared right out of his wits I’d see him jolting Bewildered, seeking strong arms to hold him tight To make him feel a little safe and calm his fright Though at times I’d feel earth’s sudden trembling To me t’was but torrential rains with bolts of lightning Everyone knows I’m deaf since birth just like my aunt But my dear little dog didn’t buy my being nonchalant He shivered violently with those pitiful large eyes As viciously outside the storm continued to terrorize I took my pooch into my loving arms, got warm Curled up and together waited out the storm Tried to appease his pounding heart Confident was he we’d never be apart AP: Honorable Mention 2020 Submitted on February 14, 2018 for contest DESCRIBE A THUNDER STORM WITHOUT THE SENSE OF SOUND sponsored by BRENDA CHIRI - RANKED 3RD

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Date: 6/28/2018 11:30:00 PM
God blessed the dog with you and blessed you with the dog... Beautiful
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Date: 4/15/2018 11:26:00 AM
Oh lucky you!! I see you got a win in this contest. Wish I had (I am jealous of those that won!!) Your approach was very interesting, having the main character not be able to even hear the storm. WELL DONE . It's at the top of the second page for your best poems!!
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Date: 4/15/2018 11:45:00 AM
Thank you so much for your lovely visit, Andrea.
Date: 3/5/2018 8:19:00 AM
Lovely penning Line! Congratulations on your well deserved win :) xomo!
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Date: 3/5/2018 9:24:00 AM
Thank you so much, Maureen. Much appreciated.
Date: 3/5/2018 4:08:00 AM
An excellent win for a heartwarming poem Line. Congratulations on your deserving third placement! : )
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Date: 3/5/2018 9:23:00 AM
Thank you so much, Connie. Most appreciated.
Date: 3/3/2018 11:59:00 PM
Well deserved win Line. Congratulations. Tom
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Line Gauthier
Date: 3/4/2018 8:51:00 AM
Thank you, Tom. Much appreciated visit and comment.
Date: 3/3/2018 10:12:00 PM
Congratulations on your win.. wonderful imagery made me feel every line...
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Line Gauthier
Date: 3/3/2018 10:19:00 PM
Thank you, Eve. Much appreciated visit and comment.
Date: 3/3/2018 7:37:00 PM
Ahh....this is such a clever way to incorporate the theme.... Our dogs get terrified during thunderstorms..so it was easy to relate! Well done Line !!
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Date: 3/3/2018 8:38:00 PM
Thank you for your warm visit and comment, Carrie.
Date: 3/3/2018 6:58:00 PM
Line, I enjoyed where you took the theme to describe a 'soundless' thunderstorm! Lovely imagery of comforting a beloved pet who heard it all! Congrats on your well-deserved podium win! Hugs, Sandra
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Line Gauthier
Date: 3/3/2018 7:12:00 PM
Thank you so much, Sandra. It was based on an actual event.
Date: 3/3/2018 6:39:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Line. Well deserved.
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Date: 3/3/2018 7:11:00 PM
Thank you, Rhoda. Much appreciated.
Date: 2/19/2018 10:28:00 PM
Had a dog just like that, reminded me of him. They bark so loud but run from thunder...Nicely done.
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Date: 3/3/2018 6:39:00 PM
Little chickens on four legs, right David? Thanks for your visit and comment.
Date: 2/15/2018 12:02:00 PM
Hi Line, Just shows what a lovely and kind caring person you are.:)
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Date: 2/15/2018 12:10:00 PM
You are so sweet to say that, Tahira. The old saying is so true... it takes one to know one. Line xx
Date: 2/15/2018 10:44:00 AM
You have a quick wit and an enviable imagination. Your poem was heartfelt, believable and just human enough to be easily relatable. Wonderful work, with great thought given to the subject mater as the story gently unfolded for the readers delight. It flows well and holds your interest from start to finish. It says a lot without much thought , but a lot of heart! It rings true and is a joy to read my friend, Emile.
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Date: 2/15/2018 12:14:00 PM
Thank you so much, Emile. Unfortunately I have less merit than you might think. My poem is based on a true story that happened to me with a neighbour's dog that had snubbed me for a year. We were best buds after that memorable occasion. And, of course, I am not deaf... although I have been accused of having selective hearing. Thank you so much for your kind message and encouragement. Line xx
Date: 2/15/2018 10:18:00 AM
I love your approach which unfolded beautifully. A joy to read, completely complete this poem is and utterly believable. I believe you did an excellent job with the theme. All the best ... CayCay
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Date: 2/15/2018 12:14:00 PM
Thank you so much, CayCay. Love your visits and messages. Line xx

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