Jan Allison Poet Rhyme

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Rhyme Time - For Contest

This morning I went shopping
Tripped over, started hopping
My milk bottle it went slopping
The store cleaner began mopping

I hobbled out of the store
Got caught in the sliding door
Lost my wallet and now I’m poor
I really can’t take anymore

Then I fell on to my knees
Dropped my bag and my car keys
Gave out a massive sneeze
And then began to wheeze

I found my red sports car
The door it was ajar
They’d stolen my Snickers bar
It really was quite bizarre

I jumped behind the wheel
I began to shout and squeal
Why my Snickers did they steal -
It really was quite surreal

My shopping trip was tough
I was feeling pretty rough
I drove off in a huff –
I’d really had enough 

Had an ache in my poor old head
Drove home and went to bed
Shopping trip left me half dead …
Will opt for home delivery instead!

I thought I’d pen a rhyme
With words that are sublime
I hope this one is fine
And in the list will shine

05~28~15

Contest:- Rhyme Time
Sponsor:- Pendleton Arkwright

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Shonima Burman June 25, 2015 at 9:09 AM Enjoyed every bit of it Jan. Jan Allison July 4, 2015 at 4:23 PM thanks so much for your support:-) hugs jan xx

Eve Roper June 5, 2015 at 6:11 PM This one is fine, I have had a few like that but I actually fall on my knees. a 7 hugs eve Jan Allison June 5, 2015 at 6:14 PM oh dear Eve - thankfully mine is purely a fiction write for the contest:-) Hugs janxx

Old Buck June 4, 2015 at 1:32 PM Jan: I can certainly understand your mourning the lose of a Snickers Bar. It's interesting how a well guided rhyme can take an "ordinary" day and make it sound so "magical". Well done. oldbuck Jan Allison June 4, 2015 at 1:35 PM I never know what will come out of my pen Old buck - i just have to go with the flow of my muse - this is total fiction but I guess it could happen lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Thomas Martin June 1, 2015 at 3:32 PM Really I loved this one, Jan!! Your rhyming lines are so graceful (know say that all the time about your verse) Jan Allison June 1, 2015 at 3:36 PM Thanks Thomas I do appreciate your support:-) I just write and hope others like my musings:-) Hugs Jan xx

Dorian Petersen Potter May 31, 2015 at 2:55 PM Excellent pen Jan! This is so funny and so much fun was for me to read it, it sure made me smile a lot,my dear friend. I truly enjoyed it! You're so funny with this one. Lol...A 7!Thanks a lot for visiting my page and all.Very much I appreciate it.Wishing you a very lovely week!In his light!God bless you! Hugs!:) D. Jan Allison May 31, 2015 at 3:16 PM Glad it made you smile Dorian:-) hugs Jan xx

Lanette Kissel May 31, 2015 at 2:39 PM Jan, I love this poem. Really funny and just plain fun. Good work. Lanette Kissel Jan Allison May 31, 2015 at 3:16 PM Thanks Lanette:-) hugs Jan xx

Cecilia Macfarlane May 30, 2015 at 7:26 PM Jan, this is hilarious!! It was so much fun to read, you have an awesome sense of humor. Hugs Jan Allison May 31, 2015 at 3:11 AM Thanks Cecilia I have always tried to write with humour since day one - this is just a silly rhyme penned for the contest not based on real life at all lol - my imagination goes into overdrive and this is the result lol:-) Hugs Jan xx

Emile Pinet May 30, 2015 at 10:39 AM Your words are well chosen and convey their meaning well allowing for a smooth flow of thoughts from line to line in perfect rhyme. Emile. Jan Allison May 30, 2015 at 12:04 PM Thanks so much for dropping by Emile:-) Hugs Jan xx

Darlene Gifford May 30, 2015 at 6:01 AM Thanks for my morning laugh, Jan. A sure winner and a 7. Darlene Jan Allison May 30, 2015 at 7:02 AM Glad I made you smile:-) Hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso May 29, 2015 at 7:27 PM Its hard to write dark depressing poetry with you around!!!!!!!!!! ( and thats a good thing ) Jan Allison May 29, 2015 at 7:30 PM aww thank you my friend:-) I do have bad days too but I have to go with my muse when it comes to writing and thankfully she is usually in a playful mood:-) Hugs jan xx

James Fraser May 29, 2015 at 6:47 PM When it comes to declaring the winners. I'll run through the crowd and give you a Fireman's lift and place you on the winners podium. This is lovely quirky Jan, hugs, James xxx Jan Allison May 29, 2015 at 7:17 PM I hope Pendleton likes it - there were no rules for the contest simply rhyme time so I went with the flow of my pen... I do worry about myself some times lol:-) Hugs jan x

Edwin Hofert May 29, 2015 at 1:59 PM I think the room is spinning! Oh wait! that's just me grinning. :) A 7 From one who knows the pain of having candy come up missing lol. Awesome poem Jan. And Good luck! <3 Jan Allison May 29, 2015 at 2:01 PM Thanks for dropping by Edwin always a pleasure to see you:-) Hugs jan xx

Richard Lamoureux May 29, 2015 at 8:56 AM Ha ha, the fun never ceases with you my dear. Jan Allison May 29, 2015 at 10:20 AM Pure fiction for the contest Richard - it only took about 10 mins to write:-) Hugs jan xx

Nette Onclaud May 29, 2015 at 3:39 AM ohh, what a grueling time!.. hope this didn't include a BHD, lol.. very fine write, jan.. hugggs Jan Allison May 29, 2015 at 7:18 AM Just a fictitious write for the contest - there were no rules so I just went with the flow of my pen and hope Pendleton likes it:-) Hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie May 28, 2015 at 11:26 PM Crikey Jan... did you walk under a ladder or did a black cat cross your path. I never realized shopping could be so interesting - Lindsay Jan Allison May 29, 2015 at 1:09 AM Pure fiction:-) Hugs jan xx

Alexis Y. May 28, 2015 at 11:26 PM Hi Jan, This poem is hilarious. I have a feeling that its going to shine! Good luck in the contest:) Alexis Jan Allison May 29, 2015 at 1:10 AM There were no actual details for the contest just said rhyme time - so I went with the flow of my pen:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandip Goswami May 28, 2015 at 10:28 PM Hi JAN (In Bengali and Hindi languages, JAN means SOUL). Yes, this one is fine. Thank you very much dear friend. Jan Allison May 29, 2015 at 1:09 AM Oh that is so lovely thank you Sandip:-) Hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer May 28, 2015 at 5:02 PM ha! very well done, jan! good luck in the contest... Jan Allison May 29, 2015 at 1:08 AM Thanks Ilene:-) Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich May 28, 2015 at 3:41 PM aha, begging for a win. It does not often work for me with many judges, but I think you stand a GREAT chance, Jan. This was really great fun and some great monorhymes!! Soupmail. Jan Allison May 28, 2015 at 3:42 PM The last stanza was actually my starting point - thought I would keep it in:-) Hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos May 28, 2015 at 2:13 PM You definitely shine here....but grab some auto wax and give that red car a spiff...just to add to the glamour..REALLY GREAT ...JAN...LOVED IT.. Jan Allison May 28, 2015 at 2:23 PM LOl Thanks Judy - just hope Pendleton likes it :-) Hugs Jan xx

Skat A May 28, 2015 at 1:33 PM good luck in contest Jan Allison May 28, 2015 at 1:35 PM Thanks Skat:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser May 28, 2015 at 12:39 PM This is a funny one, Jan! It made me smile to read it :) Jan Allison May 28, 2015 at 1:08 PM Thanks so much for dropping by Laura:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sneha Rv May 28, 2015 at 12:28 PM HEHE!! This was a great idea!! All the best!! :D :D Jan Allison May 28, 2015 at 1:08 PM Thanks Sneha just for fun for the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight May 28, 2015 at 12:18 PM Great poem for the contest, Jan! Awesome rhymes! Had me laughing! Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison May 28, 2015 at 1:07 PM Just a fun write Sandra there were no rules for the contest so I just came up with a rhyme:-) Hugs Jan xx

Mark Ackerson May 28, 2015 at 11:11 AM Funny, Jan... don't want to go shopping with YOU Jan Allison May 28, 2015 at 11:13 AM Pure fiction lol just decided on a fun rhyme - in all honesty apart from shopping for food which is essential I don't enjoy really enjoy shopping especially clothes shopping:-( Hugs jan xx