Rewriting Poems

i long to hold you
like a poet 
holds their pen

caress you gently
beneath the linger
of thoughts
as they fall
from the depths
of mind

play with you
like a poet 
plays with words
in the depths of poetry

lay you down
on sheets of white
in the thrusts
of metaphor
like a poem

then rewrite you again
through breathless sighs

written 9/25/2019
Best free verse of 2019
Sponsored by John Hamilton
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019

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Geist Avatar
February 22, 2020 at 8:26 PM
Peaceful pleasant poem.
Adams Avatar
February 22, 2020 at 8:38 PM
Thank you so much Pax :) hugs
Barden Avatar
January 7, 2020 at 10:15 PM
Beautiful - Blessings and congrats on your win in John's contest, Sandra - keep on writing, my friend, and thank you for sharing. Blessings! :o) <3
Adams Avatar
January 8, 2020 at 10:07 AM
Thank you so much for stopping by and leaving such kind words for me to find Greg...hugs and blessings :)
Roper Avatar
January 5, 2020 at 3:45 PM
Congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve
Adams Avatar
January 5, 2020 at 5:40 PM
Thank you so much Eve... hugs :)
Chiri Avatar
January 5, 2020 at 1:42 PM
Sandy simply beautiful win!;) congratulations!;)
Adams Avatar
January 5, 2020 at 1:47 PM
Thank you so much Brenda :) hugs
Hamilton Avatar
January 5, 2020 at 1:39 PM
This is a poem I love, and you know that! Congrats Sandy for being in the top for 2019!
Adams Avatar
January 5, 2020 at 5:39 PM
Perhaps I will. I had to pass up some really good ones for line counts :) hugs
Hamilton Avatar
January 5, 2020 at 5:15 PM
Just a thought for next time, maybe adjust the line count to make it work for the contest? Then after you win....adjust the line count back to how you like it!!
Adams Avatar
January 5, 2020 at 3:40 PM
me too ...i had a couple others in mind but they were over the line count... my short little lines make it hard to stay under 30 but wouldn't equal 10 lines of most poet's writes if i adjusted them...i like my little lines though...it's me...
Hamilton Avatar
January 5, 2020 at 2:24 PM
Yeah too bad I think your cobblestones write was your best last year, too bad it already got a top win in one of my contests!
Adams Avatar
January 5, 2020 at 1:45 PM
thank you John...i have others i felt more worthy but they were all over the 30 line limit... Thank you for the win, kind words and always hosting such wonderful contests... your contests have helped me write some beautiful poems this past year... hugs :)
Barden Avatar
December 17, 2019 at 5:35 AM
Best wishes and congratulations on your win in Brian's contest, Sandra - keep the ink flowing, my friend! Blessin! :o) <3
Adams Avatar
December 17, 2019 at 11:20 AM
Thank you so much Greg... what a kind thing to say.... hugs :)
Na Avatar
December 16, 2019 at 2:57 PM
Congrats on your winning poem Sandra
Adams Avatar
December 16, 2019 at 7:16 PM
Thank you so much Greg... hugs
Gondolf Avatar
December 16, 2019 at 9:53 AM
Congrats on your win in Brian's Contest, Sandy, it is such a pleasure to read this poem again. Hugs, John
Adams Avatar
December 16, 2019 at 11:06 AM
Thank you John... hugs
Hamilton Avatar
October 13, 2019 at 3:44 PM
Wonderful read for the 3rd time, hey check out the top 100 all time on the soup, this amazing poem found it's place, imagine how high it will climb as it gets more views, I think it's around 70 and going up!
Hamilton Avatar
October 13, 2019 at 4:07 PM
Actually 81
Adams Avatar
October 13, 2019 at 3:53 PM
wow, thank you for the news John...i will have to go look, it still gets views and comments here and there....to think i wasn't sure if i liked it when i first posted it and almost took it back down.... hugs
Gauthier Avatar
October 8, 2019 at 7:14 AM
Beautifully sensuous poem, Sandra. A FAVE for me. Congrats on your well deserved POTD.
Adams Avatar
October 8, 2019 at 9:20 AM
Thank you so much Line...it was one of my more simple poems :) hugs
Wood Avatar
October 2, 2019 at 9:16 AM
Congratulations Sandra on this well-deserved recognition. This beautiful poem left me a little out of breath! Regards, Dean
Adams Avatar
October 2, 2019 at 9:28 AM
thank you Dean, for your visit and lovely comment!
There Avatar
September 30, 2019 at 11:43 PM
Belated congratulations, Sandra :)
Adams Avatar
October 1, 2019 at 9:36 AM
Thank you so very much :) hugs
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 28, 2019 at 5:59 PM
This delightful poem really made me smile Sandra. Congratulations on having it honored with POTD! It is very deserving! I loved the metaphors. This little gem is going into my Faves! : ) xxoo
Adams Avatar
September 29, 2019 at 12:30 PM
Thank you so much Connie, I am honored and humbled by your words... hugs :)
Proxenos Avatar
September 28, 2019 at 3:57 PM
Wow Sandra - what a truly beautiful comparison between a sheet of white paper and white sheets where love lingers - love this poem - congratulations on POTD, a truly deserved honor! Hugs, Jennifer.
Adams Avatar
September 29, 2019 at 12:29 PM
Thank you so much Jennie...sometimes the quick scribbles without thought turn out best :) hugs
Mcconnell Avatar
September 28, 2019 at 3:31 PM
Congrats Sandy on the POTD, no wonder you won it with this little gem! so succulent a piece full of passion, sensuality and love indeed. hugs, Gordon
Adams Avatar
September 29, 2019 at 12:28 PM
Thank you so much Gordon, what a kind thing to say... hugs :)
La France Avatar
September 28, 2019 at 12:39 AM
Sandra, so beautifully penned, your poem is truly breathless, congratulations on your deserving POTD !
Adams Avatar
September 28, 2019 at 5:10 AM
Thank you dear heart :) hugs
Mishra Avatar
September 28, 2019 at 12:08 AM
A unique imagination.... Wonderful start " I long to hold you like a poet holds their pen" Congrats on POTD!
Adams Avatar
September 28, 2019 at 5:09 AM
Thank you so very much :)
Squyres Avatar
September 27, 2019 at 5:48 PM
Visually succulent and creative writing. Congrats on poem of the day !! Love it !!
Adams Avatar
September 27, 2019 at 6:35 PM
Thank you so much Debra :) hugs
Hamilton Avatar
September 27, 2019 at 5:27 PM
Ok what more can I say. Congrats on POTD stunning writing getting all the deserved accolades!
Adams Avatar
September 27, 2019 at 6:34 PM
Thank you so much John...to think i almost deleted this one when i first put it out there...Your comments always make me smile :) hugs
Nicole Avatar
September 27, 2019 at 4:29 PM
This is playful, passionate and sensual- all at the same time. Ahhh, yes!!! I love this Side of Art. :) I can see that you do too. Congratulations Sandra, on Poem of the Day. :) Brandy
Adams Avatar
September 27, 2019 at 4:40 PM
Thank you Brandy...yes i love the word play and metaphoric approaches...it makes it fun...love when poetry allows the reader to draw their own conclusion :) hugs
One Avatar
September 27, 2019 at 2:06 PM
Damn.... Another amazing poem... Very sensual and romantic.. congratulations on potd..
Adams Avatar
September 27, 2019 at 4:42 PM
Thank you my friend...not my usual, i know, every now and then i throw some romance out there :) hugs
Scars Avatar
September 27, 2019 at 1:49 PM
oh my! amazing poem sweet Sandy, well deserved honor :) -luloo
Adams Avatar
September 27, 2019 at 4:43 PM
Thank you so much Luloo...i was actually shocked when i found out :) hugs
Mcgee Avatar
September 27, 2019 at 12:23 PM
Your words evoke such romanticism and beauty. So lovely and deserving of POTD a fav.
Adams Avatar
September 27, 2019 at 4:44 PM
Thank you Jeanne, your kind words made me smile tonight :) hugs
Warrior Avatar
September 27, 2019 at 12:06 PM
Back to Congrats!!! on this spectacular verse my friend...glad it made POTD!!!...^WW^ :o)
Adams Avatar
September 27, 2019 at 4:45 PM
Thank you WW...my muse kind of did this one on her own, i was trying to type for a contest and the pages stayed blank.. then i gave in :) hugs
Cunningham Avatar
September 27, 2019 at 11:45 AM
Just back from my travels to find this well deserved poem honoured with POTD. Nice one Sandra and congrats. Tom
Adams Avatar
September 27, 2019 at 4:46 PM
Thank you so much Tom...sometimes i pen softer tones then my normal ....hugs :)
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