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No more coats and woolen mittens. It's a time of new beginnings, when a dormant world awakens from Winter's slumber. Thawing snow becomes dancing brooks, quenching the thirst of Mother Earth. Birds feather their nests, trees bud anew, flowers open to bloom, and so does the love within my heart. The breath of Spring gives me reason to sing as I confess my love for you. Clear are the frosted window panes of glass. Winter coats and mittens are stored away. Visible are the blades of fresh green grass, As I feast my eyes on this sweet Spring day. Daffodils bloom, buds burst on maple trees. Trickling streams flow to a raging river. A songbird's sweet trills waft upon the breeze I thank Spring for being such a giver. My heart also sings of love now unbound, But I would be guilty and thus remiss, If to you, the one my dear heart has found, I'd not bestow upon your lips, our first kiss. I find it hard to breathe on this Spring day. Because you have taken my breath away November 18th, 2015 Haibun Free Style Contest

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Date: 1/23/2016 6:40:00 PM
I've finally got things going on Twitter again, after a bit of a break over the Silly Season. So I'm now fulfilling my promise to tweet links to the top three. Best of luck with a few more reads, and here goes...
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Date: 1/23/2016 6:44:00 PM
Hiya, Scott. Nice to see you and happy you can tweet. Thanks!
Date: 12/28/2015 7:01:00 AM
Beautiful! Congrats!
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Date: 12/28/2015 7:19:00 AM
Many thanks to you, Hija.
Date: 12/22/2015 3:29:00 PM
Congrats on your win!!!Sara
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Date: 12/22/2015 3:43:00 PM
Thank you Sara. It's nice to see you.
Date: 12/21/2015 3:23:00 PM
Congratulations on 2nd place win with this wonderful Haibun free style!
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Date: 12/21/2015 3:27:00 PM
Thank you very much, Susan.
Date: 12/21/2015 7:21:00 AM
Another win Lin!! Congratulations Dear.
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Date: 12/21/2015 7:31:00 AM
and another nice comment from you. Thanks, Michael.
Date: 12/20/2015 7:17:00 PM
Lin, Congrats on your Haibun Free-Style win. ~LINDA~
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Date: 12/20/2015 7:48:00 PM
Thank you.
Date: 12/20/2015 12:56:00 PM
Congrats Lin! well deserved win!! -luloo *smiles*
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Date: 12/20/2015 1:14:00 PM
Thanks, Luloo
Date: 12/20/2015 11:06:00 AM
LIN, Congratulations on your Haibun Free-Styled win. WUV **SKAT**
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Date: 12/20/2015 1:13:00 PM
Thanks.
Date: 12/20/2015 9:40:00 AM
You wrote a sonnet after the prose, oh yeah. And at that you have written a piece on Love, such a great topic, such a great read. A fabulous combination. Thanks for bringing this piece to my contest, and congrats on the joint 2nd place.
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Date: 12/20/2015 10:10:00 AM
Thanks a lot, Scott, for the complements and for the explanation of what you liked about it. Thank YOU for sponsoring and for the introduction to the Haibun. It's become one of my favorite forms.
Date: 11/19/2015 7:47:00 AM
aww..this is gorgeous, I long for the spring days again. Warm writing and wonderful descriptions.
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Date: 11/19/2015 8:02:00 AM
Thank you, Cas. I could see having a picnic in this park.. Soooo many beautiful flowers."
Date: 11/19/2015 5:57:00 AM
Hard to breathe because you took my breath away...wow loved it. JDH
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Date: 11/19/2015 8:02:00 AM
How irksome when my comments wind up in the wrong spot! I wish we could remove them. lol sorry John.... but I am so glad that you liked that last line...
Date: 11/18/2015 12:06:00 PM
Prose and a delightful sonnet make this haibun an attractive offering, Lin! A warm welcome to spring, as love is felt in the air! Lovely end couplet. ~ Regards // paul
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Date: 11/18/2015 12:11:00 PM
Hi, Paul.. Thanks a lot for such wonderful comments. ;)
Date: 11/18/2015 7:54:00 AM
Spring's celebration, heart's joy, poetry's grandeur, dear Lin! Where do you live? A seven!
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Date: 11/18/2015 8:00:00 AM
Merci, dear Demetrios...for your visit to my spring garden and the 7 daffodils you leave with me. I live in New Orleans...Deep South of the U.S. where most of the year feels like perpetual Spring... Four years in the snowy state of Colorado were enough of cold and ice, though I do miss the first snow.
Date: 11/18/2015 2:29:00 AM
Wow, this is so very refreshing to read especially at this time of year, Lin. Always a pleasure to read your great skilled penmanship.... Theresa
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Date: 11/18/2015 4:13:00 AM
Such compliments! I don't have a harsh winter where I live, so I can't wish for an early Spring, but it's such a wonderful season for renewal of many things. Thank you for visiting, Theresa.
Date: 11/18/2015 1:59:00 AM
I feel this way every Spring!!! You've read & have written my mind in this piece Lin! I hope it won the contest!!!! p.s. Your name reminded me of Frankie Lane, and his song, "Making Memories." I love that song!
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Date: 11/18/2015 4:11:00 AM
Thank you so much, Red. I'm not familiar with the song, but I'll surely find it. I appreciate your well-wishes.

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