Mike Miller Poet Free verse

Results Day

Swaddled in a grey woollen scarf
Soft rain falling gently on your face. 
Crows CACKLING in the trees overhead
Tipping leaves, laden with droplets,
DRIPPING  like heavy tears,
SMACKING the concrete path below.

You sigh as you draw close to me
FLICK your cigarette, take a draw. 
Hands trembling, you open the car door
The CLUNK of metal breaks the hush. 

A train RUMBLES in the distance. 
The scent of your chanel perfume 
OOZES into the frost chilled car. 
Outside a gaggle of nurses
CHATTER  and FIZZ after work. 

I turn to you and MURMER ,
Fumbling for words like a fool, 
You WHISPER clasping your hand round mine,
 “ I’ll be alright  - the tumours benign.”

Onomatopoeia Poetry Contest
Sponsor - Emile Pinet

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Paula Goldsmith June 29, 2023 at 10:23 AM A powerful write. Life is filled with both good/bad. Have a blessed day..................

Valerie Staton February 6, 2022 at 5:03 AM You wrote this poem beautifully. Take care and God bless!

Jan Allison November 18, 2021 at 12:27 PM A poem that touched me deeply as my hubby has had cancer and I have had a benign breast lump, many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx Mike Miller November 24, 2021 at 1:06 PM Thank you Jan - This is something that touches so many people. Both my parents too. I hope your husband is now over his cancer and so pleased that your result was benign. Thank you so much for sharing your experience and your feedback. Mike x

Reason A. Poteet November 14, 2021 at 5:18 PM Well-written, great choice of words for the prompt, onomatopoeia. You might use all caps for "swaddled" as well. Congratulations on your piece, love the surprise ending. Mike Miller November 24, 2021 at 1:08 PM Thank you ! I could almost hear the train in the distance as I was writing it - Thanks for the tip re swaddling - May head to the edit button ! Thank you for your comments Mike

Beata Agustin November 14, 2021 at 5:34 AM WOW! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this... God bless you. Mike Miller November 24, 2021 at 1:12 PM Thank you Beata. I enjoyed the challenge. God Bless you too.

Emile Pinet November 13, 2021 at 10:32 AM Congratulations Mike! Your heartfelt poem earned a distinguished place in my onomatopoeia contest, well done my friend, Emile. Mike Miller November 13, 2021 at 3:04 PM Thanks so much Emile ! It was a great idea for a competition and I enjoyed composing this poem in response to it - these competitions are a great way to jump start the poetic muse and get the words flowing again. Thanks for your encouragement