Remnants

I walk along a shore 
                 far inland from the roar  
                            of two great oceans, 
the Pacific to my west, 
        and much farther away,  
                                                        the Atlantic to my east.  

Here is desert land          and a foul-smelling, shrinking lake.  
Salt retention - the lake's peculiar claim to fame - 
attracts the curious few 
      who test the brackish waters to see if, 
             floating on their backs,  they really won't sink.  
Some tread far                                 out toward the horizon, 
salt stinging and painting their legs white. 

 Here now, alone with the sun and resident gulls, 
                I own this stretch of sand.  
Arid heat creates a desire in me
             to wade into the coolness of the water, 
but nearing pea-green scum, I opt for staying dry.

Suddenly, 
            a small wave appears, 
and with it,                     a splash of water on my legs. 

  
I close my eyes. 
                    For a moment, I'm the wisp of a cloud 
                    drifting above a cool lake big as a sea, 
                      mirroring the azure of sky long ago-
                               so long ago, in fact-
that I imagine this land right now 
                         -with its few creature inhabitants-
                                   has little resemblance to what was here before. 

I ponder what it could have been like
               those many centuries before,       but I cannot.
 Alas, I know very little of science or
     of how exactly this area   looked     or felt     or smelled 
                                   once upon a time 
                                       when it was more water than land. 
I know only this:
              today it is we                 that remain. . . 

I open my eyes, 
conscious again of the remnant water's stench,
and walk to my car, 
                 anticipating my drive back to the city,
                           with the top down
                                     and hot wind in my face.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Devnath  Avatar
December 13, 2013 at 10:50 AM
A great poem of imagination beautifully pictured. Sorry, am was busy. Loved always, bl
Hunter Avatar
December 10, 2013 at 2:31 PM
I love this moment, Andrea. This is the stuff I've been missing. "today it is we...that remain..." Love that!
A   Avatar
November 20, 2013 at 8:14 PM
Andrea, another lovely win... Can't believe I missed so many contests.... xox..Linda
Jones Avatar
November 18, 2013 at 9:52 PM
Congratulations Andrea....this deserved a wonderful win...and more...
Kamoonpuri Avatar
November 17, 2013 at 10:45 PM
Congrats for an aweinspiring beach muse! Andrea dis makes me tink, did humans hav to do sth with d polluting smell n changes. They do litter d indian ocean here where i live. Then sewage pipes too empty into d ocean. Ah ! I know d seas in paradise wud b unpoluted since God wud make them perfect there eh. Warmest wishes.
Johnson Avatar
November 17, 2013 at 2:04 PM
It's funny what triggers the mind to wonder how it was. When days before we all were born, was it the land of oz? Enjoyed your day trip Andrea. Peace. :)
Anglesey Avatar
November 16, 2013 at 7:35 PM
Andrea, It's difficult to put into words how well crafted this is. Just drove by that lake this weekend. I'm in SLC again. You captured the history and the reality and the *stench* perfectly. Way to go :)
Horsman Avatar
November 16, 2013 at 11:28 AM
amazing free verse Andrea, no i am not surprised,,,
Ryerson Avatar
November 16, 2013 at 5:31 AM
Aha! So this was for Charlotte's contest too...As I said below, I think this is one of your best, and that's saying something for sure...I know the convertable you refer too because I saw a picture of you in it on FB...do you still have it? Congrats my friend! - Tim
Ryerson Avatar
November 16, 2013 at 5:34 AM
If I'm not mistaken, there are no fish in that lake either because of the high salt content...
May Avatar
November 15, 2013 at 9:08 PM
congrats on your win Andrea
Guzzi Avatar
November 15, 2013 at 7:37 PM
See I told you it WAS stunning! Congrad's on your win Light & Love
Puddifoot Avatar
November 15, 2013 at 5:57 PM
andrea, this was an unusual piece from you, and it really painted a vivid picture of this place for me; I enjoyed the introspection and also the experimental line spacing you used to emphasize your words - congrats on your win in my contest! :)
Richards Avatar
November 15, 2013 at 5:34 PM
Ahhh........how did I miss this one?? The sense of melancholia is evident in every line......wonderful poem, Andrea!
Sirak Avatar
November 14, 2013 at 6:22 AM
777777777s! Your images are brilliant and so clear. I could imagine standing there with you. A WOW poem.
Seal Avatar
November 13, 2013 at 9:10 PM
A stunning write from start to finish Petal. wondering what was, how the imagination can taunt us when we only have the remnants to bear witness. Superb. Take care, Richard
May Avatar
November 13, 2013 at 7:52 PM
very precious moments of reflection in this poem Andrea....I enjoyed the read....hugs
Jordan Avatar
November 13, 2013 at 9:06 AM
Love the imagery. Have you seen Spiral Jetty, a major work of 20th Century sculpture? http://www.robertsmithson.com/earthworks/spiral_jetty.htm Jack
Maverick Avatar
November 13, 2013 at 1:25 AM
Good images tangy images from your salt lake excursion Andrea, thank you for your kind remarks on my latest write I may post some more; but at the moment i feel not inclined to much.' will try and catch up on some of your writes..Keep well Joe..)
A   Avatar
November 12, 2013 at 11:26 PM
Andrea, I don't know about that hot wind in my face... enjoyed the memory.... and thank you for enjoying my win,,,that was cool of Craig.... Wrote a new poem, with Kelly... hope you like it.."Atlantis". haha,,, I needed help, and she did great in helping me push my pen... stop by when you have time..Hugs.. Linda...
Chircop Avatar
November 12, 2013 at 1:45 PM
I love the imagery you created here..Alone with the sun..and gulls .Tnks for the journey to the great salt lake .Its us who remain and land..Yes remnants of what once was and who we are .even what is.An amazing post.
Austin Avatar
November 12, 2013 at 10:56 AM
Take it from a native, eh? And here I thought the Great Salt Lake was next only to the Tabernacle as a thing to be revered. Despite the shock, I did enjoy your poem so much. Love, daver
Ryerson Avatar
November 12, 2013 at 6:57 AM
Wow (and wow again!) This, in my opinion is one of your best efforts Andrea...The last verse is a knock-out...You have to be talking about The Great Salt Lake (?) My brothers and I stopped there on the way back from CA and yes, we COULD float on our backs without sinking and apparently the only inhabitants were swarms of flies...
Carrillo Avatar
November 11, 2013 at 11:29 PM
Andrea; this was nice and relaxing to read. Glad you had a nice time. Thaks for sharing.... Lucilla PS . I can't come around too much. I have been feeling very sick..
Jones Avatar
November 11, 2013 at 8:13 PM
Andrea you describe this place so perfectly...just looking out across the flats is mesmerizing..love the..pictures painted....lovely....
Pettit Avatar
November 11, 2013 at 1:28 PM
Are you describing the Great Salt Lake in Utah? If you are, then your words describe the place reasonably well. You've mentioned that you are in between the Pacific and Atlantic Oceans; so that rules out the Dead Sea in the Middle East.
Situation Avatar
November 11, 2013 at 4:21 PM
great guess!!!
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