Jan Allison Poet Lay

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Remember Remember the Fifth of November

Huge bonfires burn with flames so bright,
as fireworks light the sky tonight
Excited children’s faces glow
as we observe a stunning show;
with rockets shooting in the sky
but loud bangs make some children cry

I set some gold sparkler’s alight
my children whoop with great delight
The display ends, it’s time to go
my little ones say ‘oh mum no’
I take them home for pumpkin pie ... 
next year we’ll see more rockets fly!

Lay November Poetry Contest

8 syllables per line checked with how many syllables
Rhyme checked with rhymezone

Sponsored by William Kekaula

11/14/20

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Regina Mcintosh December 6, 2020 at 6:44 PM Congrats on a deserved winning placement. This is gorgeous and so kind to the heart with inspiring thoughts. Love and prayers and may God bless you, dear Jan

Eve Roper December 4, 2020 at 8:53 PM Congratulations on your winning placement. Hugs Eve

Sara Kendrick December 3, 2020 at 6:03 AM Congrats on your winner. Sara

William Kelii Kekaula December 2, 2020 at 5:50 PM Thank you for sharing a wondrous part of yourself, Jan, my compliments on your honorable placement, Aloha! William

Krish Radhakrishna November 26, 2020 at 2:09 PM superb! great rhyme and flow! pumpkin pie makes me hungry!!

Akkina Downing November 16, 2020 at 5:13 PM This is perfectly crafted... Beet wishes :)

Jennifer Proxenos November 15, 2020 at 12:12 PM Beautiful poem and many memories revived of the 5th November when we had all Ricky's friend around or when we used to go to his. It was a night to look forward to as it was always a group of 5 children and each had their fireworks so they had 5 times as many - this is a wonderful bonfire fireworks poem Jan, I enjoyed it so much and faved it. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Rico Leffanta November 15, 2020 at 10:42 AM Well done, Jan! Good luck in the contest! Sadly, digital photography does not convey the firework colours, so one really needs to be there. Guy Fawkes was always sad to me as people threw antique wood on the bonfires; why not plywood or prestwood? Aloha! Rico

Victor Buhagiar November 15, 2020 at 2:48 AM Excellent poem, Jan. UK will always celebrate Guy Fawkes Day. ~~ Jan Allison November 15, 2020 at 5:25 AM I'm not sure how many celebrated this year with lock down, our own local display didnt take place ... and we are covid free but have 'isolated' cases and so far none in the community:-) hugs jan xx

Carole Duet November 14, 2020 at 9:20 PM Beautifully descriptive and a delight to read. Good luck in the contest, Jan. Carole :D Jan Allison November 15, 2020 at 5:24 AM thanks Carole so lovely to see you again, hope you are well:-) hugs Jan xx

Evelyn Judy Buehler November 14, 2020 at 7:51 PM Your masterful rhyming adds to the magic of this beautifully vivid poem, Jan. The lovely picture is well suited, too. hugs, Evelyn Jan Allison November 15, 2020 at 5:23 AM thanks Evelyn:-) hugs Jan xx

Mystic Rose Rose November 14, 2020 at 6:19 PM Ah, I love fireworks, and your words too. Hope you had a great day, Jan. Jan Allison November 15, 2020 at 5:12 AM thanks Pixie, we didnt go this year the local display was cancelled as was the one in the capital:-) hugs Jan xx

Elaine George November 14, 2020 at 5:55 PM Beautiful example of this genre of poetry, dear Jan.~ Elaine Jan Allison November 15, 2020 at 5:11 AM thanks Elaine its only my third attempt at the form:-) hugs Jan xx

Simon Hamill November 14, 2020 at 5:49 PM I love it.brings back childhood memories.thank you.:) Simon Jan Allison November 15, 2020 at 5:10 AM we used to go to our neighbours the mum used to make the most amazing toffee apples and we would have baked potatoes from the embers of the fire:-) hugs Jan xx

Gershon Wolf November 14, 2020 at 5:06 PM Thanks to this brilliant write, I shall now remember the fifth of November!! Thanks, Jan! :) gw Jan Allison November 15, 2020 at 5:09 AM thanks GW:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues November 14, 2020 at 4:46 PM So lovely! What will today’s kids remember...life has come to a standstill. I want the bonfires and fireworks too! Jan Allison November 15, 2020 at 5:09 AM we are lucky here Kim as life does go on as normal as we are deemed covid free but have some isolated cases (but the number of those is increasing) many displays were cancelled this year, we didnt bother travelling to the north of the island where they were holding one:-) hugs Jan xx

Beryl Edmonds November 14, 2020 at 4:14 PM A delightful poem to read, with its cheery content and good rhythmical beat. Love the animated picture too... Belle x :-) Jan Allison November 14, 2020 at 4:25 PM thanks for the lovely comment Belle:-) hugs Jan xx

Pam Deremer November 14, 2020 at 3:51 PM Thank you for sharing. Jan Allison November 14, 2020 at 4:25 PM thanks for dropping by Pam:-) hugs jan xx

Tom Cunningham November 14, 2020 at 3:31 PM I often wonder if Guy Fawkes had succeeded would the displays be much bigger lol. Well written Jan, good luck. Tom Jan Allison November 14, 2020 at 3:37 PM lol :-) Got to say it was pretty quiet here they didnt have a display in Douglas or locally to us, in fact i didn't hear any fireworks going off until a couple of days after bonfire night:-) hugs Jan xx