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Rejection

Friend, Friend , Friend Till you at long last Heed My Moving Mouth But not the poetry I strive so severely But the river Remains on tumbling over These crimson cliffs I sense Antagonism ache Rejection abhorrent asleep -- I am so asleep Dreaming of Howling And roving over why? Am I never polite? Am I never always... Here? I fancy Laughter, Hapiness, Attention, Love, and still Slumber But this Night vision Will be...Soft?

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Jay Loveless

Date: 6/8/2009 10:07:00 AM

I Love This. Creative, And Different. The Usage Of 'Stompy Lines' As Cesar Put It DOES Make It More Dramatic. It Adds Such Effect To It. Awesome, Awesome Job!

Cesar Cantu

Date: 5/26/2009 1:46:00 PM

Stompy lines, makes the reading more dramatic and marked, nice nice nice; I loved the last line...jojojo soft is a yummy word, feels good when reciting it as it should be, with articulation and vocalization yep yep, thanks for the experience =D

L'Nass Shango

Date: 5/26/2009 1:16:00 PM

Glad for you ... I was worried for a minute that you were chased by the pied piper of poetry instead of following him ... it is better to dance than to run. Good write, my friend.

Brandy Megens

Date: 5/26/2009 11:29:00 AM

TOUCHING SAD BUT HONESTLY TRUE SO MUCH PASSION NICE WRITE