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Rejection

Friend, Friend	
, Friend
Till you at long last 
Heed 
My Moving Mouth
But not the poetry

I strive so severely
But the river
Remains on tumbling over
These crimson cliffs

I sense
Antagonism ache Rejection abhorrent asleep --
I am so asleep
Dreaming of 

 Howling
And roving over why?
Am I never polite?
Am I never always...
Here?

I fancy Laughter, Hapiness, Attention, Love, and still
Slumber
But this Night vision
Will be...Soft?

Copyright © Sajdah Al-Riyami | Year Posted 2009

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Jay Loveless Date: 6/8/2009 10:07:00 AM I Love This. Creative, And Different. The Usage Of 'Stompy Lines' As Cesar Put It DOES Make It More Dramatic. It Adds Such Effect To It. Awesome, Awesome Job! Login to Reply

Cesar Cantu Date: 5/26/2009 1:46:00 PM Stompy lines, makes the reading more dramatic and marked, nice nice nice; I loved the last line...jojojo soft is a yummy word, feels good when reciting it as it should be, with articulation and vocalization yep yep, thanks for the experience =D Login to Reply

L'Nass Shango Date: 5/26/2009 1:16:00 PM Glad for you ... I was worried for a minute that you were chased by the pied piper of poetry instead of following him ... it is better to dance than to run. Good write, my friend. Login to Reply

Brandy Megens Date: 5/26/2009 11:29:00 AM TOUCHING SAD BUT HONESTLY TRUE SO MUCH PASSION NICE WRITE Login to Reply