Refreshed

I really wanted, a refreshing day
Thinking to myself, what was the best way
First some cold water, I splashed on my face
Evidence of sleep, vanished without a trace
I felt my pores shrink, my eyes came awake
Brrr I was so cold, I started to shake

Perhaps a warm shower, was the answer for me
I ran the hot water but needed to pee
Off to the toilet as the water ran hot
Not so refreshing, it burned quite alot
Jumping from the shower, I slipped and hit my head
Things had started out well, but I ended up dead

Before I knew it, I stood at Heaven's gate
Better to show up early than to get there too late
I was handed a mint, it seems I had bad breath
One of the side effects, of succumbing to death
Minty and refreshing, it gave me a glow
As the gates opened I went with the flow

I was quite curious, wondered what I'd see
There the tree of life, right in front of me
I walked towards it, reached up for some fruit
Soft music was playing, I think a Pan Flute
As I began to bite, a voice told me to stop
Being quite startled, I let the fruit drop
Saint Peter asked me, "How did you end up here?"
my knees started knocking, I was overcome with fear
Was I bound for Hell, I truly hoped not
I prefer refreshing and Hell is quite hot

Saint Peter was laughing, there had been a mistake
I wasn't bound for Hell, or a fiery lake
It seems I'd been taken, way before my years
I felt so refresed as I shed thankful tears
My body was gone, I needed one new
He promised me one, with no teeth to chew

So down through the clouds, placed into a womb
So warm and cozy, not cold like a tomb
All of my memories, firmly in tact
Until my birthday, when I felt a smack
All thoughts and memory, vanish without a trace
Refreshing new love, found in my mother's face
Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Hicks Avatar
December 1, 2014 at 2:36 AM
Ha! This was a most intriguing write. You sprinkled it with humor and came out with enlightenment. I love zany stories that have deeper meanings behind the lines - refreshing to read this original work.
Yvonne Avatar
November 25, 2014 at 10:34 AM
Re-incarnation. A creative well structured poem. Me likes it!
Kayode Avatar
November 22, 2014 at 10:40 PM
A nice one with good rhyme,kudos Richard.
Hamilton Avatar
November 19, 2014 at 3:32 PM
exceptional Rick a master piece hugs 7
Petersen Potter Avatar
November 17, 2014 at 11:12 PM
Excellent poem Richard! Truly enjoyed reading this one for you today. A 7 for me! :) Love and light! xxx D.
Lamoureux Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 7:17 AM
Thanks Dorian.
Mcdaid Avatar
November 17, 2014 at 3:22 PM
smiling a delightful piece richard excellent pen dear friend
Lamoureux Avatar
November 18, 2014 at 7:17 AM
Thanks Liam.
Thirtyseven Avatar
November 17, 2014 at 5:06 AM
Wonderful poem Richard, what a great story, what fabulous fun ("bad breath", had never thought of it, you've an immense imagination). Enjoyed the read.
Lamoureux Avatar
November 17, 2014 at 7:49 AM
Thanks my friend Scott, I appreciate the compliment.
Marcum Wong Avatar
November 16, 2014 at 8:39 PM
Oh Richard, you outdid yourself on this one! Magnificent! #7 I loved it!
Lamoureux Avatar
November 17, 2014 at 7:50 AM
It was going to be a serious poem and somehow it ended up being this instead.
Sirak Avatar
November 16, 2014 at 6:45 AM
This is wonderful, full of humor, hope, and insight. It is always refreshing when a mother gazes at her child with amazing love.
Lamoureux Avatar
November 16, 2014 at 7:28 AM
Good morning Monterey, yes mom's are pretty amazing!
Bateman Avatar
November 15, 2014 at 8:33 PM
Richard, Enjoyed your write here very much!! Quite Marvelous with some poignant and deep thoughts. A "7" and a FAV. Best Always, Gary
Lamoureux Avatar
November 16, 2014 at 7:29 AM
Thanks Gary, even when I wish to entertain I wish for there to be a grain of substance. Thanks for commenting.
Manassian Avatar
November 15, 2014 at 7:29 PM
:) I'm with Mama Bear on this one...
Lamoureux Avatar
November 16, 2014 at 7:31 AM
Thanks, not planning on exiting any time soon.
Bear Avatar
November 15, 2014 at 6:52 PM
Nicely written but I am afraid that I am not ready to lose my son so be more careful LOL You are so talented it makes me so proud Love you . Mom
Lamoureux Avatar
November 15, 2014 at 7:18 PM
Hopefully I will be around for many many more. I love you too!
Smith Avatar
November 15, 2014 at 3:48 PM
Lovely....excellent bits of humor and the end is marvelous... Another life.
Goswami Avatar
November 15, 2014 at 2:39 PM
Nice rhythm...Super ending...'Refreshing new love, found in my mother's face'...Best to you...
Chircop Avatar
November 15, 2014 at 2:15 PM
Hehe!I really loved it.So entertaining this is and with the most beautiful ending.Made me think of reincarnation: )..Lovely dear Richard.
Allison Avatar
November 15, 2014 at 2:06 PM
loved the humour , the flow of the rhyme and the tenderness of the final two lines Richard:-) Its a 7 from me Hugs Jan x
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