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Refreshed

I really wanted, a refreshing day Thinking to myself, what was the best way First some cold water, I splashed on my face Evidence of sleep, vanished without a trace I felt my pores shrink, my eyes came awake Brrr I was so cold, I started to shake Perhaps a warm shower, was the answer for me I ran the hot water but needed to pee Off to the toilet as the water ran hot Not so refreshing, it burned quite alot Jumping from the shower, I slipped and hit my head Things had started out well, but I ended up dead Before I knew it, I stood at Heaven's gate Better to show up early than to get there too late I was handed a mint, it seems I had bad breath One of the side effects, of succumbing to death Minty and refreshing, it gave me a glow As the gates opened I went with the flow I was quite curious, wondered what I'd see There the tree of life, right in front of me I walked towards it, reached up for some fruit Soft music was playing, I think a Pan Flute As I began to bite, a voice told me to stop Being quite startled, I let the fruit drop Saint Peter asked me, "How did you end up here?" my knees started knocking, I was overcome with fear Was I bound for Hell, I truly hoped not I prefer refreshing and Hell is quite hot Saint Peter was laughing, there had been a mistake I wasn't bound for Hell, or a fiery lake It seems I'd been taken, way before my years I felt so refresed as I shed thankful tears My body was gone, I needed one new He promised me one, with no teeth to chew So down through the clouds, placed into a womb So warm and cozy, not cold like a tomb All of my memories, firmly in tact Until my birthday, when I felt a smack All thoughts and memory, vanish without a trace Refreshing new love, found in my mother's face

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 12/1/2014 2:36:00 AM
Ha! This was a most intriguing write. You sprinkled it with humor and came out with enlightenment. I love zany stories that have deeper meanings behind the lines - refreshing to read this original work.
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Date: 11/25/2014 10:34:00 AM
Re-incarnation. A creative well structured poem. Me likes it!
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Date: 11/22/2014 10:40:00 PM
A nice one with good rhyme,kudos Richard.
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Date: 11/19/2014 3:32:00 PM
exceptional Rick a master piece hugs 7
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Date: 11/17/2014 11:12:00 PM
Excellent poem Richard! Truly enjoyed reading this one for you today. A 7 for me! :) Love and light! xxx D.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/18/2014 7:17:00 AM
Thanks Dorian.
Date: 11/17/2014 3:22:00 PM
smiling a delightful piece richard excellent pen dear friend
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/18/2014 7:17:00 AM
Thanks Liam.
Date: 11/17/2014 5:06:00 AM
Wonderful poem Richard, what a great story, what fabulous fun ("bad breath", had never thought of it, you've an immense imagination). Enjoyed the read.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/17/2014 7:49:00 AM
Thanks my friend Scott, I appreciate the compliment.
Date: 11/16/2014 8:39:00 PM
Oh Richard, you outdid yourself on this one! Magnificent! #7 I loved it!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/17/2014 7:50:00 AM
It was going to be a serious poem and somehow it ended up being this instead.
Date: 11/16/2014 6:45:00 AM
This is wonderful, full of humor, hope, and insight. It is always refreshing when a mother gazes at her child with amazing love.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/16/2014 7:28:00 AM
Good morning Monterey, yes mom's are pretty amazing!
Date: 11/15/2014 8:33:00 PM
Richard, Enjoyed your write here very much!! Quite Marvelous with some poignant and deep thoughts. A "7" and a FAV. Best Always, Gary
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/16/2014 7:29:00 AM
Thanks Gary, even when I wish to entertain I wish for there to be a grain of substance. Thanks for commenting.
Date: 11/15/2014 7:29:00 PM
:) I'm with Mama Bear on this one...
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/16/2014 7:31:00 AM
Thanks, not planning on exiting any time soon.
Date: 11/15/2014 6:52:00 PM
Nicely written but I am afraid that I am not ready to lose my son so be more careful LOL You are so talented it makes me so proud Love you . Mom
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/15/2014 7:18:00 PM
Hopefully I will be around for many many more. I love you too!
Date: 11/15/2014 3:48:00 PM
Lovely....excellent bits of humor and the end is marvelous... Another life.
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Date: 11/15/2014 2:39:00 PM
Nice rhythm...Super ending...'Refreshing new love, found in my mother's face'...Best to you...
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Date: 11/15/2014 2:15:00 PM
Hehe!I really loved it.So entertaining this is and with the most beautiful ending.Made me think of reincarnation: )..Lovely dear Richard.
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Date: 11/15/2014 2:06:00 PM
loved the humour , the flow of the rhyme and the tenderness of the final two lines Richard:-) Its a 7 from me Hugs Jan x
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