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written for the Glenn Hughes contest sponsored by Robert James L, on the song " Red Sun" Thank you dear soupers for your support and I appreciate your messages and comments, I will be responding slowly , and please know that I wish you all very happy holidays! Sending all soupers light today and always 

I still follow the blinking spells of the rose wine sunsets before surging sandstorms, believing in the euphoric breeze floating across the shivering skyline, echoing vermilion voices, lost in the limestone grains, as questions of change interrogate the empathy encrypted within my inhibited intuition, like spices of kismet flames, swirling to the fluid fluency of sentimental keys in saxophone tunes… But in the midst of moving monsoons, I feel the eagle feathers of Zeus rain upon the crystalline swing, crooning songs of tameless time~ wrapped in the crescent cocoon of silent splendor, as I rise, dressed in steel and silver. I hear the bluebird dream in symphonies of the karmic sea, streaming with specters of star-struck ghosts… O majestic marine jewel, change is a promised ocean. It’s sprouting coral blues from reefs of ambergris embers, awaiting floods of onyx tears and jagged thistles, like a tsunami of smeared streaks reflecting the smoke and swollen stains of the red sun. Tonight, I erase the last mistake; a scribbled imitation of my aching past, for I could not veil the scars, failing to seize the splitting clusters of slate and garnets, burning between sleepless lakes, drenched in midnight terrors, as satanic waves blur the turquoise surfing through the limitless twilight. Yet, I hear the mermaid moon call my name in magical refrains, steering my iridescent silhouette to an ivory shore where ebony hints of ink would home the hermit castles, where you and I can breathe~ as soulmates destined to draw neon lifelines from bioluminescent sparkles… So let the bluebird drift into an orchid dream where karma is the poet~ draped in deep violet, writing elegies to the eclipsed eyes of the red sun that stole the silk and sage of summer sighs… And change is more than just a mere rhyme, it is the ultimate essence to rearrange whimsical words woven within wind from honey and gold of a dulcet dawn.

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Date: 2/1/2025 11:29:00 AM
Congratulations on your trophy win Dearest Empyyy. "change is a promised ocean." How I love this. It delves into the reality of a positive change and water means life, the ocean represents vastness. Also it moves further into a charade of words. Like an unrealistic expectation born out of creativity. I like the duality of this line.
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Date: 1/9/2025 2:12:00 AM
As expected, this is an exceptional poem. Phrases like "rose wine sunsets," "eagle feathers of Zeus," and "bluebird dream" are brilliant as they evoke emotions necessary to good poetry.
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Date: 1/5/2025 8:17:00 AM
‘where karma is the poet’…. Your poetry always amazes me. This poem was destined for the trophy, the moment your pen hit the paper. Thank you for loving Glenn as much as I do. Please consider writing for my next contest, ‘Hughes Turner Project’ … and together we can all ‘hear the bluebird dream’!!
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Date: 1/5/2025 7:23:00 AM
Congratulations on your win dear poet. Cheers!!!
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Date: 12/29/2024 3:59:00 AM
'wine sunsets', timeless time, sleepless lakes, onyx tears, crescent cocoon'.... such matchless images, fantastic metaphors and a plethora of stunning word coinages, make your poem stand out. Though there was heart ache and pain in the past and uncertainty in future, I see a progression from the 'rose wine sunsets' to a 'dulcet dawn'. Another gorgeous poem.
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Date: 12/28/2024 4:30:00 PM
It's gorgeous. :) Love your epiphanies ! <3
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Date: 12/28/2024 12:01:00 PM
Dearest Ink, Your superb verse explores metamorphosis and the cyclical cycle of change. It employs vivid images and metaphors to examine personal development, the passage of time, and the emotional landscapes that follow these changes. The theme also incorporates natural aspects like sunsets, storms, and oceans and personal thoughts on previous errors, self-discovery, and destiny. Change is represented as a terrifying force and a beautiful promise, implying hope for rebirth and greater connection among life's turmoil. The poem is full of sensory language and uses a range of literary strategies. Strong visual imagery is used throughout, with terms like "rose wine sunsets," "bluebird dream," and "crystalline swing" evoking vivid images.
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Date: 12/27/2024 11:27:00 AM
conveying your inner feelings through eloquent language so creatively assembled is stunning...each line weaves into the next , forming a progression of poetic thought...this is downright majestic , ink...applause and thankyou for my win in your latest challenge.
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Date: 12/27/2024 9:17:00 AM
One can only admire your interpretation of a famous poem. So well composed. Best for a win. I wish you a happy and healthy 2025.
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Date: 12/27/2024 8:48:00 AM
You are at it again with stunning images. You are ink empress queen of beautiful alliterative imagery! Too many to mention but your poem is swimming with them!
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Date: 12/27/2024 5:25:00 AM
"Tonight, I erase the last mistake; a scribbled imitation of my aching past, for I could not veil the scars," -- Stunning imagery throughout. Man could not bear his true image, how far he has fallen...life and earth a blessed illusion of Divine grace and love. We uncover in bits and digestible pieces. "So let the bluebird drift into an orchid dream where karma is the poet~writing elegies draped in deep violet," -- Indeed, Poetry is also key to our salvation, why I write and love.
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Date: 12/26/2024 9:17:00 PM
Your poem is incredibly lovely, and a great pleasure to read, Ink. As usual, the imagery swept me away. :)
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Date: 12/26/2024 5:25:00 PM
feel the eagle feathers of Zeus, please read my latest poem it was built on this one line of yours Ink, :)
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Date: 12/26/2024 6:01:00 AM
Well, you must have developed into an enthusiastic Glenn Hughes fan after writing so many poems influenced by his songs.. You always have a different interpretation to the song (not that I know any) and always delight the soup with your inventive metaphors and alliterative adjective... Your poem in my eyes, can be seen as a meditation on life's continuous cycles, the tension between past and future, and the personal evolution that comes with both internal and external change. The poems beauty lies in its ability to weave together profound ideas with rich, sensory language , which you do with so much ease... I can see a glowing trophy presented for this one.. Best of luck in the contest dear poetess..
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Date: 12/26/2024 5:47:00 AM
Pretty words inky. Karma sometimes is the poet, indeed. I've got some id like to write lol. Ivory shores sounds nice. I've seen photos of your sandy beaches.
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Date: 12/26/2024 3:55:00 AM
I feel the eagle feathers of Zeus/ now who on earth could ever picture the eagle feathers on Zeus, only you Ink could do that. " Does he really own feather on his back" I believe only you could be privy to that, your writing is out of this world, that is what makes it extra good. Love xo
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Date: 12/26/2024 4:06:00 AM
Hahah this comment made me laugh thank you sweet rose.
Date: 12/26/2024 12:02:00 AM
Your quill is on fire IE, stunning metaphors, love that line, rose wine sunsets, have seen many over the years. Have a great day, I'm out celebrating today at my daughters again. Happy holidays to you. Tom
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Date: 12/25/2024 11:40:00 PM
I read it .
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Date: 12/25/2024 11:40:00 PM
Gosh seriously you did? Haha
Date: 12/25/2024 11:25:00 PM
blinking spells of the rose wine sunsets.. oh wow!!! Damn papi.. questions of change interrogate the empathy encrypted within my inhibited intuition, mmm that line is gorgeous papi!! majestic marine jewel, change is a promised ocean… awaiting floods of onyx tears and jagged thistles, like a tsunami of smeared .. oooo absolutely divine!! failing to seize the splitting clusters of slate and garnets, burning between sleepless lakes,. Damn look at that flow !! The imagery is breathtaking! let the bluebird drift into an orchid dream where karma is the poet draped in deep violet,.. mmm.. rearrange whimsical words woven within wind from honey and gold of a dulcet dawn... a perfect ending to a perfect piece papi!!
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