Red Orchard

I don’t remember 
much about the day the deer jumped 
the fence and broke its neck.  

Late summer and I inhaled 
the plump morning air—red 
apples, brown
sugar and grass, my 
pudgy feet padding the damp
linoleum squares
where sunlit streams flooded gol-
den through the yawning kitchen window.   

And out that window, just beyond 
the five-foot chain link line,
an antlered buck 
lay, his great head twisted 
toward an ‘appled’ sky.

Then my mother 
a steam kettle whist-
ling “look away! look away!” “look away!”
and my father’s whispers 
thick curtains closing 
on the jagged red light rising.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Smith Avatar
July 24, 2012 at 4:59 AM
Great poem This really came alive for me.
Austin Avatar
July 23, 2012 at 12:12 PM
This is special - the childish drama, the image and flash of the piece. Love it! Congrats on the selection. daver
Onclaud Avatar
May 3, 2011 at 11:11 AM
a gripping piece that is so experiential, soul... the movement of the plot flows like running water! you've got style! :) huggs, nette
George   Avatar
April 30, 2011 at 5:28 PM
You take the reader there with you, Jen - in the actual moment - with all senses vibrating. Wonderful writing, dear Jen, Love, Elaine
Foulk Avatar
April 16, 2011 at 3:44 PM
a sad piece of great poetry you penned. love the way you used your words wisely. thank you for your comment on Made in Heaven. yes my grandson is really a treat to take care of. i have written two more, but am still working on them.
Guzzi Avatar
April 16, 2011 at 3:04 PM
I hate seeing the road kill it's awful. You nailed it! Good write. [Thanks for the nice comment there are many poems on Nepal, China, Japan, Egypt. You seem to enjoy that not many read them I would love it if you would.] Light & Love
Sweetheart Avatar
April 16, 2011 at 2:04 PM
Power packed with great imagery Soulfire... bringing the crescendo lines at the end luv.. what a sight to behold ... what a sound.. enjoyed this descriptive write with much creative essence luv..
Mehta Avatar
April 16, 2011 at 1:27 PM
Touchy and moving tale of the deer, You have a nice flair for writing well worded verses, Soulfire
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