Reception

There is no fireplace
in your room
so I cannot come up;
still, the borders of your smile
eclipse my ambivalence,
warn of belatedness.

I journey home
and slip into sleep
fix my gaze into nightspace,
linger half-awake,
remember your whispers
when we were seventeen.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2008

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Suzadail Jr. Avatar
November 13, 2008 at 8:39 AM
A touch of melancholy, a bittersweet memory, an exceptional poem. Vince
Kittrell Avatar
November 13, 2008 at 7:57 AM
Thank you for the nice comment. I'm not sure why I don't use punctuation...makes it feel like work to me (?) I love your piece...I loved being 17...
Moreno Avatar
November 12, 2008 at 11:58 PM
This is a very creative piece, keep up the good work...Raul
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