Rebirth

You told me to remain the same. 
That I was perfect , I didn't need to change. 
But that couldn't possibly be true, otherwise you wouldn't have left? 
You wouldn't have been able to find anyone to replace me, if I was perfect then you had already  found the best? 
I mean with you I was always hopeful, endearing and considerate. 
For you I actually tried to be just that, perfect. 
It's my biggest regret. 
I allowed you to put me in a box, you defined me. 
From how I wore my hair to how I should speak. 
You killed my creativity, my youthfulness, my spontaneity. 
And it's ironic, I allowed those things because I saw you the same way, a perfect person, knowing  no such beast exist,  but to me you were as close to perfect as perfect could get. 
So I let...you kill me, I let you will me and mold me and recreate me, in hopes of being everything you could ever dream. 
My soul died with you, you had the matches 
But I struck the box that created the flame
And you watched as everything I was burned to ashes. 
You said I was perfect and still you tried to change me. 
You left me in ashes and I had to gather all of what I could see. 
You forced a rebirth in me , to rise again like a Phoenix
Because you can not fix this 
I can not fix this
Fire creates rebirth. 
A new start. 
A new beginning.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Rios Avatar
June 10, 2016 at 1:23 PM
I can feel the emotion in this no one is perfect , but we are trying what we can do to be a greatr person
Makama Avatar
May 26, 2016 at 1:28 PM
You are more than a best new poet. You are excellent, wonderful and mind jerking. What a lovely piece this is. Welcome to poetry soup dear colleague.
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May 3, 2016 at 10:00 PM
Mari, Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT *
Dalei Avatar
April 30, 2016 at 11:52 PM
Hi mari, Nice and wonderful first entry. Welcome to poetry soup. Hope you will enjoy our community. Wish you a fruitful journey ahead.......with love.
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April 30, 2016 at 7:16 PM
PS, Mari,,, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@
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April 30, 2016 at 7:15 PM
I had a feeling your first poem was going to be ABC form, Mari... I don't know what this form is called, your style is real familiar though. I'm liking it.... Linda
Williams Avatar
April 30, 2016 at 7:59 PM
I'm not clear on the different formatting of poetry , what is ABC Style
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