Ravenous Eldritch Wrath a Collab With James Fraser

RAVENOUS ELDRITCH WRATH The darkening skies in choir of wrath; The wind brisk banging blows; The withering of trees; The falling twirling leaves; The branches sudden irate tweak and split. Giving way to the rushing threat of death Will another candle die in it's final flicker of light? From afar High hasty orisons a gong in melancholic play Voice of mournings didn't save the day Only shrills that echoes in elevated ebb Sullen faces white as powdered chalk Sprung to view when moon casts its glow Bloodshot eyes a plague ready to pierce and blow Dark coloured lips close and open to rumble slow: "Sacred candles. sacred flames. Aid the magic I name. sacred candles. sacred flames. Aid the magic I name." Again and again they chant- As they go round and round Stopping awhile to kneel Then raise their hands up in the air. [their shadows sleek as serpentine hiss casting chills in the catacombs' wall] On the centre... A blindfolded lady in white hangs on logs of X Her tied arms spread left to right Her legs set apart but truss tight Down to where the log stands A black man half-naked in mask holds a whip Slashing it side by side in quick thunder thudding trips A quietness abounds as the chanting stops This eerie eldritch silence eating into the night She of the above allows rays to glisten: "Moon of the dark, tranced faces listen" I of the numbered, tattooed, scribed, scored Command you to stand, heathens, my horde! Silence is shattered by the cracking of his whip Lacerating white linen, now in reddened seep Cries turn to howls, the beating of this beast Joyous dancing tongue, rasping at this feast Faces now morose. Excitement high! Incite Darkened desires in crave, this mooned night Slowly he walks towards this writhing tethered Taken, she will be forsaken. Feathered! His hands against the X, his face leans Asp tasting, touching drawing red Dressage of white, now cast, her flesh Hungered, undaunted, heathens chanting "Sacred candles. sacred flames. Aid the magic I name. sacred candles. sacred flames. Aid the magic I name." Now taken, clouds drift amidst cobalt blue An empty soul lies listed, under darkened hue Spores now carried, bedded, soon they'll born Every one a number, forever they'll adorn Heathens, oh! chanting ones, bow, now sworn I of the numbered, tattooed, scribed, scored Bow, chant, blindfolded, taken, your now adored. © James Fraser and Olive Eloisa Guillermo Written October 17, 2014

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Date: 5/3/2015 10:36:00 PM
Olive, Congratulations on your win. Thanks for the support. SKAT
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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/3/2015 3:38:00 AM
thanks much Skat.. =`)
Date: 11/6/2014 12:32:00 PM
- I'm a little late ..... But, I will congratulate you on a great winning poems Olive and James ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 3/6/2015 9:28:00 AM
thanks you Anne Lise. :)
Date: 11/5/2014 3:52:00 PM
Hi Olive_eloi...I read this one before but somehow I failed to leave a comment. May I say that I enjoyed this co-write, something different from what you usually write, although your 'touch' is still visible. Congrats on a worthy showing in the contest. // paul
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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 3/6/2015 9:27:00 AM
thanks much Paul.. :)eee too late reply from me.
Date: 11/4/2014 7:55:00 PM
Congratulations to the two of for this poem.
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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/5/2014 8:18:00 AM
Thanks Brenda. :)
Date: 11/4/2014 1:54:00 PM
Many congrats James and Olive on this incredibly creative write:-) Hugs Jan xxx
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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/5/2014 8:17:00 AM
Thanks much Jan.. :)!
Date: 10/19/2014 4:48:00 AM
Wonderful creative write Olive n James! Great work my friend!
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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 10/19/2014 6:58:00 AM
thanks much Dr. Upma.. I appreciate.. :)
Date: 10/19/2014 4:41:00 AM
Way to go you two..Very creative..I wanted to say Olive, thanks for the recent visit to my blog with get well wishes..I am sorry so long in responding but I have had some bad days ..I feel like the worse is behind me now..I have felt much better the last few days..Sara
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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 10/19/2014 6:54:00 AM
it's okei Sara.. :) What's more important is you are getting better. :) thanks for this drop.. :)//olive eloisa
Date: 10/18/2014 10:31:00 AM
Olive, what a joy it was writing with you again, and a totally different subject to from what you've written previously. It's amazing what the mind can think up, and what poets can bounce off each other - James :)x
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Date: 10/19/2014 10:04:00 AM
Writing collabs with you I so enjoy Olive, and I certainly would like to continue James :)
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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 10/19/2014 9:02:00 AM
thanks you MR. James.. :) I must say that this collaboration is a wow.. :)! this my second poem that talks about the dark.. :D?! poems of dark topics not my usual but well, you did help me this.. I admire your imagination and your encouragement.. :)! Hope this not the 4th and the last collaboration we will have.. :D! :) // olive eloisa :)
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