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Rakes and Flames

As the dawn expells its authoritive cast; they awake, but are abandoned. They turn--but their friend the sun ignores and they understand. They commune their relationship and part with their memories; and sigh. They say their good-byes in a tone of fullfilment, but aface their anxieties toward the skies for hope; but are denied. A clouded sky brings a chill in the air and a rustling of rakes and flames. Old as hell, written in HS for publication, circa 1971 by me. When I was young in the 60's in Ohio, we burned leaves in our backyard; sometimes our household trash too. You had to be me to be there GV. Count me in as last place. Take care.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 12/28/2014 11:25:00 PM
well, it's NOT last place. I enjoyed this one and your note that went with it. congrats.
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Date: 12/28/2014 11:33:00 AM
Congrats on the win Dave...huggs
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Date: 12/28/2014 11:01:00 AM
Love your taken on the theme - many congrats:-) Hugs jan xx
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Date: 12/28/2014 10:16:00 AM
Nive win Sir. thank you...PD
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Date: 3/20/2014 4:59:00 AM
Well penned write and congratulations on the fine win, dave
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Date: 3/20/2014 4:06:00 AM
- Congratulations on your win in the contest sponsored by Giorgio A.V. - A wonderful win poem from you Dave ! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/20/2014 1:01:00 AM
Dave, Congrats, awesome win! ~SKAT~
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Date: 3/19/2014 10:36:00 PM
Hi Dave, Impressive like the themes. Congratulations on your win. :) Love ~LINDA
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Date: 3/19/2014 3:34:00 PM
Dave, always think negative for a more positive outcome... Good philosophy, when it works... Congratulations on a well penned win. Verlena :)s!
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