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Raindrops End

satisfying sound, raindrops end— swooshing of dark-wet, late green branches intensifying quiet of morning thunder and lightning rescind— mourning absentee birds there’s no sun as Autumn comes, apples ornamental— in sodden basket of orchard. sweetness lies on ground rolled in debris of sticks and stones. whispering zephyr coolness in its aplomb. choice lovelies brim on trees. the waterlogged bark with placidity of dawn— sudden break of chirps
9/17/2020 Contest: Writing Challenge - Nature, Four in One Sponsor: Constance La France crystalline, kimo, verse (Yalto), haiku howmanysyllables used to verify syllable count *Yalto invented by Edward Ibeh

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Date: 9/29/2020 1:21:00 PM
Kim, congratulations on your win in my Nature Four in One Challenge with this excellent write, a FAV for me _Constance
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/29/2020 7:55:00 PM
Thank you, Constance!
Date: 9/21/2020 2:53:00 PM
love the description Kim and the use of Edwards yalto form:-) many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/21/2020 7:24:00 PM
Thank you, Jan! xx
Date: 9/21/2020 7:31:00 AM
- Not so much sun at this time ... autumn has come with crisp air ... a great poem, Kim - Congratulations on your win :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/21/2020 11:53:00 AM
Thank you, sweet friend!
Date: 9/17/2020 11:09:00 PM
I love light rain. Not iin Malta. It rains occasional and always a heavy down pour. ~~
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/18/2020 3:40:00 AM
Wow! Always heavy downpour!
Date: 9/17/2020 9:06:00 PM
Your imagery brought back the prettiness of nature immediately into my head.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/18/2020 3:38:00 AM
Thank you, Caren!
Date: 9/17/2020 5:19:00 PM
Great descriptions, Kim... Here there's no sun now because of those infernal West Coast Fires. The haze hangs over the atmosphere every day. ~ Dazed
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/17/2020 6:23:00 PM
So sorry! :(
Date: 9/17/2020 10:46:00 AM
Many great descriptions in this poem. Well done Kim :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/17/2020 11:22:00 AM
Thank you, Heidi!
Date: 9/17/2020 10:18:00 AM
I absolutely love a slow, soaking rain. nothing intense just a slow rhythm on my tin roof:) A most enjoyable soothing read, Kim. Good luck!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/17/2020 11:17:00 AM
Thank you, Daniel!
Date: 9/17/2020 7:53:00 AM
Very nicely said, Kim; I use to enjoy driving in a gentle rain -- less traffic on the streets, and a freshness to the air that one can taste and feel though every pore of ones being.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/17/2020 7:59:00 AM
Truly is refreshing :) Thanks, Joe!

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