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Rain Dance

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Poem of the Day (POTD) Winner for April 15th, 2025

gently on the roof water marches as rice grains, manna from heaven attend our homeland, exiled clouds pour your romance onto cracking earth. Our poor scorpions, in bellies of hot, dormant wells raised their generations. Shamans still dance in rings, arousing bands of blessing. Timbre grows, grains gaining size, dusty dreams refreshing.

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Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 4/30/2025 6:47:00 AM

Dear Trina, What a gentle invocation-each line a prayer for renewal, echoing the ancient rain dances where hope and gratitude moved in rhythm with the earth. I love how you blend the image of manna, cracked earth, and ancestral rituals, that even in drought, there’s a longing for blessing and connection. Like the rain dancers of old, your words bring a quiet, healing music to thirsty hearts deserving POTD. Spring Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

thriveni c mysore

Date: 4/15/2025 8:22:00 PM

Congratulations on POTD honor dear poet. ahoy, your gentle rain grains gained size.. what an inspiring write this is, lovely again. cheers dear friend!!!

Brandy Nicole

Date: 4/15/2025 6:39:00 PM

Sometimes the wait can be difficult, but God takes care of everyone. Congratulations Trina, on Poem of the Day. Many wonderful blessings to you. Hugs, Brandy

Trina Layne
Date: 4/16/2025 5:42:00 AM

Thank you, Brandy! Waiting is always the hardest part.

Nancy Kaufman

Date: 4/15/2025 12:21:00 PM

Dear Trina, Congratulations on this stunning POTD. Your words were so visually descriptive. It's a wonderful write I will fav this one. Blessings to you and enjoy your day..

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 12:50:00 PM

Most appreciated, Nancy. Thanks for taking the time to give it a read and a fav :).

Benjamin Bartley

Date: 4/15/2025 10:53:00 AM

Congratulations on your POTD! "Poor scorpions" Whew, it must be hot. Thanks for sharing!

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 12:49:00 PM

LOL! Just a tiny bit of hyperbole. Thanks Benjamin!

Arlo Parker

Date: 4/15/2025 10:32:00 AM

POTD worthy indeed. :)

Arlo Parker
Date: 4/16/2025 12:19:00 PM

Clearly you have peaks….don’t let the valleys prolong your growth. Bless.

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 12:48:00 PM

Thank you, Arlo. I will enjoy the honor for as long as the day lasts. This forum has been useful in helping me to develop my writing. I am all about getting better. Glad to see the growth ... and to experience the valleys and the mountains in my writing journey. It's also nice to have a few cheerleaders along the way ~ TL.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 4/15/2025 10:12:00 AM

Congratulations on your POTD win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful "Rain Dance" write. Have a wonderful spring day and blessed Easter..........

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 12:40:00 PM

Nice to hear that, Paula. All the best to you, and thanks.

Jim Slaughter

Date: 4/15/2025 10:11:00 AM

I love this, Trina. Sorta makes me feel like dancing! Congrats on POTD, as well.

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 12:39:00 PM

Thank you, Jim. Dance like no one is watching. Greetings from Barbados! TL

I Am Anaya

Date: 4/15/2025 9:54:00 AM

Dowsed are the rain waters above ground, necessary in times of climates changing patterns of April's showers. Your romantic words worthy of the Poem of the Day! Trina Congratulations! ~Anaya

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 12:36:00 PM

Thank you for reading the work and your appreciative comments! Blessings. TL

Mickey Grubb

Date: 4/15/2025 8:58:00 AM

God's assurance--a sense of calm strength and certainty, like the steady beat of rain on thirsty soil in your poem. Trust in HIM. Beautiful imagery. Congrats on your POTD.

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 12:34:00 PM

Mickey, thank you. Trusting in God is man's best hope.

Jan Allison

Date: 4/15/2025 8:28:00 AM

Great imagery, congrats on POTD:-) hugs Jan xx

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 12:28:00 PM

Your feedback is appreciated. Thanks a lot, Jan! TL

Mat Ignacio

Date: 4/15/2025 7:52:00 AM

nicely phrased, each line a piece of intrigue - a pleasure

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 12:26:00 PM

Thank you, Mat! TL

Tom Woody

Date: 4/15/2025 5:58:00 AM

Nice POTD Treener. Rain dancing won't do much but the kingdom of God will restore earths balance when Jesus arrives in his glory. Patience is hard

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 6:01:00 AM

Amen, Tom! Thanks for your message. I appreciate it.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 4/15/2025 5:30:00 AM

Congrats Trina, your moves like a monsoon with gentle drops turning to lifeblood, those parched cracks drinking in cloud-song. I see shamans spinning hope into dust, scorpions curled in ancient heat, the earth’s hunger met note by note. The earth remembers, and so do we. Spring Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 5:44:00 AM

Thank you, Daniel. I appreciate you taking the time to read the work. I am pleased that it resonated with you. That makes me smile.

Trina Layne

Date: 4/15/2025 5:25:00 AM

Hey, thanks everybody, and I will thank everybody individually ... I'm glad for the writing and that it has connected with people. God be praised for His gifts to us - His words, His sunshine, His rain, His life. Wherever in the world you are from, blessings!

Tania Kitchin

Date: 4/15/2025 3:25:00 AM

Trina, a wonderful poem. Congratulations on POTD.

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 5:27:00 AM

Thanks for your feedback. Have a wonderful day!

Karen Jones

Date: 4/15/2025 3:09:00 AM

Love the imagery! Congratulations on potd! Enjoy your day!

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 5:28:00 AM

The sound of rain is so inspiring. Thanks. I am glad you took something from it. Blessings from Barbados!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/15/2025 3:00:00 AM

- Congratulations on your beautiful p.o.t.d., Trina :) - hugs

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 5:30:00 AM

Thank you, Anne. Have a great day!

Hiba Junaid

Date: 4/15/2025 2:17:00 AM

I love your imagery and writing style. Congrats on POTD! Have fun writing, and be blessed always, Hiba <3

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 5:32:00 AM

Hiba, I appreciate your feedback. Indeed, writing is a wonderful thing. Blessings!

Zyrool Gifford

Date: 4/15/2025 2:01:00 AM

Hello Trina, this is truly a beautiful piece. Congratulations on your POTD win. Have a wonderful day.

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 5:34:00 AM

Thank you, Zyrool! Have a great day also.

Gary Radice

Date: 4/15/2025 12:34:00 AM

Beautifully written Trina. Congratulations for POTD. Cheers - Gary

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 5:37:00 AM

So happy you enjoyed it, Gary. Greetings from the land of friendly sunshine :)

Tom Cunningham

Date: 4/15/2025 12:33:00 AM

We certainly need the rain to nourish our crops, congratulations to you Trina on today's POTD honour. Tom

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 5:38:00 AM

Thank you, Tom!

thriveni c mysore

Date: 4/14/2025 7:15:00 AM

how well you describe dear gifted poet, 'water - rice grains/exiled clouds/grains gain size' +FAV. your words dance charmingly, with ease. Happy writing.

Trina Layne
Date: 4/15/2025 5:42:00 AM

Thank you, Thrive. I appreciate your work as well, and I am always appreciative of your comments on mine. Be well today!

Susan Ashley

Date: 4/13/2025 4:46:00 PM

Dear Trina, I adore the sound of rain and the reverent spirit of this beautiful poem. Your sensory imagery brings the “rain dance” to vibrant life for both my heart and imagination. Your poetic artistry shines with appreciation and talent, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Trina Layne
Date: 4/14/2025 5:22:00 AM

Your words of encouragement are appreciated. Many thanks, Susan! Barbados is a water-scarce country. With climate change, we might become a nation of rain dancers.