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Sweet petrichor, you rise like a phoenix from the moist lush green vegetation, filling my nostrils with your earthy essence. Tell me, is it any wonder that the sky cries? Peering down at the earth’s destruction she sobs bitterly. Her torrent of tears causes rivers to burst their banks, houses built on flood plains are in peril from a deluge of water. It is the greed of man who ruins our earth Changing the natural course of rivers, constructing houses in areas of coastal erosion, destroying our rain forests for filthy lucre. Is it any wonder that the sky cries? Peering down at the earth’s destruction she sobs bitterly. Rain Contest Sponsored Eve Roper 06~08~16

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Sara Chansarkar

Date: 8/16/2016 10:41:00 AM

Yes,sky can't help but cry today!Loved this one Jan,but I love all of your poems!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/16/2016 12:05:00 PM

Aww thanks Sara that is such a lovely comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Jean Murray

Date: 8/16/2016 6:29:00 AM

Poor Earth Jan. Well done.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/16/2016 12:05:00 PM

Thanks Jean:-) hugs Jan xx

Afzal Nusker

Date: 8/15/2016 10:54:00 PM

Congrats on your win, Jan. I enjoy reading your poems very much.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/16/2016 3:25:00 AM

Thanks Afzal:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 8/15/2016 9:46:00 PM

A very powerful message, Jan. Congrats on your fine placement in the contest. Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 8/16/2016 3:26:00 AM

Thanks Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Arnone

Date: 8/15/2016 7:48:00 PM

Congrats, Jan. :-) P.S. I'm sure you don't want to abandon modern technology and return to the trees. If the world were a Shangri-La, would the rain never fall?

Jan Allison
Date: 8/16/2016 3:27:00 AM

Don't think we can stand in the way of technology Tom but there has to be a balance :-) hugs Jan xx

Janis Thompson

Date: 8/15/2016 7:34:00 PM

We are truly causing these environmental disasters. Congratulations.

Jan Allison
Date: 8/16/2016 3:28:00 AM

Man has to take responsibility Janis:-( hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 8/15/2016 5:23:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Jan :) a powerful message sent ! Hug Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 8/16/2016 3:28:00 AM

Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 8/15/2016 4:49:00 PM

Jan, this is very sobering...a wonderful take on the contest lady...congrats on your top placement in the Rain contest! :)-luloo

Jan Allison
Date: 8/15/2016 5:06:00 PM

Thanks LuLoo it was written for another contest and didn't place so I was delighted to be able to submit it to Eve's contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Ralph Sergi

Date: 7/9/2016 7:34:00 AM

As always ,I am deeply impressed by your poem although it was poignant Great Words, Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 7/10/2016 6:38:00 PM

thanks so much Ralph i am battling to try and clear up the back log of comments i have to reply to - have been away for 8 days and not very active on soup:-) hugs jan xx

Old Buck

Date: 7/7/2016 2:36:00 PM

Jan: I had just received notice from Soup of some special works. I looked for your name and of course there it was. I'm glad I was directed to it. It was very heart rendering. Our city went through such a flood just about 8 years ago. Now they are trying to fix what man had broken to cause the mess. Thanks for the great reminder of Natures Tears. oldbuck

Jan Allison
Date: 7/10/2016 6:38:00 PM

Man and nature at odds and nature has the power to win - we have so many lessons to learn:-( hugs Jan xx

Roses Roses

Date: 6/26/2016 6:11:00 PM

This is amazing, you captured every essence of a beautiful story! I love this !!!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/26/2016 6:13:00 PM

Thanks so much for dropping by:-) hugs jan xx

Timothy Hicks

Date: 6/10/2016 11:06:00 PM

This was very cleverly succinctly done with the depiction of the skies crying for all the terrible things we've done. With poems such as this, is it any wonder we keep coming back for more of The Jan?

Jan Allison
Date: 6/11/2016 6:58:00 AM

Aww thanks Timothy - there are 2 more 'trump' limericks for your delight - 'scooping the poop' and hair apparent' lol:-) hugs jan xx

Jean Murray

Date: 6/10/2016 5:29:00 PM

For a second I thought It was "peeing down at earth" Jan. Only for the topic is so serious, I would not put it past you.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/11/2016 6:57:00 AM

Ha ha ha Jean - I can write serious stuff too lol:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 6/10/2016 11:57:00 AM

Excellent take on the rain topic, Jan. Pity the sky did not cry a bit over Malta this winter! gl in the contest. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 6/10/2016 11:58:00 AM

It sure cried over our little Island Paul and many parts of the UK:-( hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath

Date: 6/9/2016 5:00:00 PM

Beautifully done my lovely friend. Your heart is a natural heart loving the nature. A 7 for this beautiful poem my lovely friend. Good luck in the contest. Loved always, bl

Jan Allison
Date: 6/10/2016 11:58:00 AM

Thanks so much BL:-) hugs jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 6/9/2016 3:35:00 AM

This is exactly how our place looked after the flood we experienced in December:( "Changing the natural course of rivers, constructing houses in areas of coastal erosion," - just the right reasons for such disasters and they call it 'natural'!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/9/2016 6:14:00 AM

Oh Jo I'm so sorry to hear about what happened to you. No wonder the sky cries!:-( hugs jan xx

Joanna Daniel

Date: 6/9/2016 3:35:00 AM

Loved your refrain:) Very well used, all the best, Jan:)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/9/2016 6:14:00 AM

Thanks again Jo:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Hauser

Date: 6/8/2016 11:52:00 PM

Wonderful piece

Jan Allison
Date: 6/9/2016 1:06:00 AM

Thanks Mike and not a funny line in sight - I do surprise people at times lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 6/8/2016 10:46:00 PM

Very good write, that is what it looks like just a few miles from here, home gone, animals drowned , lives lost.:'(

Jan Allison
Date: 6/9/2016 1:05:00 AM

It is such a tragedy Eve:-( hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/8/2016 1:31:00 PM

- Very well written dear Jan, a serious part of our world - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/8/2016 1:34:00 PM

Not sure if it has a chance in the contest Anne Lise am not sure what the sponsor is after but I go with my muse:-) hugs Jan xx

Janet Runyan

Date: 6/8/2016 12:39:00 PM

I just love this. It's really touching to me. I always love reading your work

Jan Allison
Date: 6/8/2016 12:43:00 PM

Thanks Janet that is a lovely comment I am very pleased you like my poems - i just write and hope for the best:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 6/8/2016 11:22:00 AM

Excellent, Jan! The strong emotions of your take on rain run deep! Should do very well in contest :)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/8/2016 11:33:00 AM

I'm not sure if it is what the sponsor is after Laura I write and get inspired by a contest but my list of N/A is growing longer by the day but as long as I am inspired to write that is the important thing:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless

Date: 6/8/2016 10:54:00 AM

OUCH@!!!!! but Mom always said "the truth only hurts when it's supposed to"

Jan Allison
Date: 6/8/2016 10:56:00 AM

Its hurting now John and a don't think a sticking plaster on the world is quite enough !:-) hugs Jan xx

Miraj Raha

Date: 6/8/2016 10:15:00 AM

Thanks for the reminder Jan,how foolish we are isn't it?cutting down the branch on which we are sitting,still man's greed prevails.A sad state of affairs.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/8/2016 10:32:00 AM

It is so so sad Miraj:-( hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 6/8/2016 10:08:00 AM

Excellent Jan. I believe in part it is our own fault.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/8/2016 10:32:00 AM

It sure is our fault indeed - not sure if this is what the sponsor is after but i go with the flow of my muse:-) hugs jan xx