Jan Allison Poet Free verse

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Rain

Sweet petrichor, you rise like a phoenix
from the moist lush green vegetation,
filling my nostrils with your earthy essence.

Tell me, is it any wonder that the sky cries?
Peering down at the earth’s destruction she sobs bitterly.

Her torrent of tears causes rivers to burst their banks,
houses built on flood plains are in peril from a deluge of water.

It is the greed of man who ruins our earth
Changing the natural course of rivers, 
constructing houses in areas of coastal erosion,
destroying our rain forests for filthy lucre.

Is it any wonder that the sky cries?
Peering down at the earth’s destruction she sobs bitterly.

Rain Contest Sponsored Eve Roper
06~08~16

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Sara Chansarkar August 16, 2016 at 10:41 AM Yes,sky can't help but cry today!Loved this one Jan,but I love all of your poems! Jan Allison August 16, 2016 at 12:05 PM Aww thanks Sara that is such a lovely comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Jean Murray August 16, 2016 at 6:29 AM Poor Earth Jan. Well done. Jan Allison August 16, 2016 at 12:05 PM Thanks Jean:-) hugs Jan xx

Afzal Nusker August 15, 2016 at 10:54 PM Congrats on your win, Jan. I enjoy reading your poems very much. Jan Allison August 16, 2016 at 3:25 AM Thanks Afzal:-) hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight August 15, 2016 at 9:46 PM A very powerful message, Jan. Congrats on your fine placement in the contest. Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison August 16, 2016 at 3:26 AM Thanks Sandra:-) hugs Jan xx

Tom Arnone August 15, 2016 at 7:48 PM Congrats, Jan. :-) P.S. I'm sure you don't want to abandon modern technology and return to the trees. If the world were a Shangri-La, would the rain never fall? Jan Allison August 16, 2016 at 3:27 AM Don't think we can stand in the way of technology Tom but there has to be a balance :-) hugs Jan xx

Janis Medders Tobechi August 15, 2016 at 7:34 PM We are truly causing these environmental disasters. Congratulations. Jan Allison August 16, 2016 at 3:28 AM Man has to take responsibility Janis:-( hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper August 15, 2016 at 5:23 PM Congratulations on your win, Jan :) a powerful message sent ! Hug Eve Jan Allison August 16, 2016 at 3:28 AM Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars August 15, 2016 at 4:49 PM Jan, this is very sobering...a wonderful take on the contest lady...congrats on your top placement in the Rain contest! :)-luloo Jan Allison August 15, 2016 at 5:06 PM Thanks LuLoo it was written for another contest and didn't place so I was delighted to be able to submit it to Eve's contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Ralph Sergi July 9, 2016 at 7:34 AM As always ,I am deeply impressed by your poem although it was poignant Great Words, Jan Jan Allison July 10, 2016 at 6:38 PM thanks so much Ralph i am battling to try and clear up the back log of comments i have to reply to - have been away for 8 days and not very active on soup:-) hugs jan xx

Old Buck July 7, 2016 at 2:36 PM Jan: I had just received notice from Soup of some special works. I looked for your name and of course there it was. I'm glad I was directed to it. It was very heart rendering. Our city went through such a flood just about 8 years ago. Now they are trying to fix what man had broken to cause the mess. Thanks for the great reminder of Natures Tears. oldbuck Jan Allison July 10, 2016 at 6:38 PM Man and nature at odds and nature has the power to win - we have so many lessons to learn:-( hugs Jan xx

Roses Roses June 26, 2016 at 6:11 PM This is amazing, you captured every essence of a beautiful story! I love this !!! Jan Allison June 26, 2016 at 6:13 PM Thanks so much for dropping by:-) hugs jan xx

Timothy Hicks June 10, 2016 at 11:06 PM This was very cleverly succinctly done with the depiction of the skies crying for all the terrible things we've done. With poems such as this, is it any wonder we keep coming back for more of The Jan? Jan Allison June 11, 2016 at 6:58 AM Aww thanks Timothy - there are 2 more 'trump' limericks for your delight - 'scooping the poop' and hair apparent' lol:-) hugs jan xx

Jean Murray June 10, 2016 at 5:29 PM For a second I thought It was "peeing down at earth" Jan. Only for the topic is so serious, I would not put it past you. Jan Allison June 11, 2016 at 6:57 AM Ha ha ha Jean - I can write serious stuff too lol:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus June 10, 2016 at 11:57 AM Excellent take on the rain topic, Jan. Pity the sky did not cry a bit over Malta this winter! gl in the contest. Hugs // paul Jan Allison June 10, 2016 at 11:58 AM It sure cried over our little Island Paul and many parts of the UK:-( hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath June 9, 2016 at 5:00 PM Beautifully done my lovely friend. Your heart is a natural heart loving the nature. A 7 for this beautiful poem my lovely friend. Good luck in the contest. Loved always, bl Jan Allison June 10, 2016 at 11:58 AM Thanks so much BL:-) hugs jan xx

Joanna Daniel June 9, 2016 at 3:35 AM Loved your refrain:) Very well used, all the best, Jan:) Jan Allison June 9, 2016 at 6:14 AM Thanks again Jo:-) hugs Jan xx

Joanna Daniel June 9, 2016 at 3:35 AM This is exactly how our place looked after the flood we experienced in December:( "Changing the natural course of rivers, constructing houses in areas of coastal erosion," - just the right reasons for such disasters and they call it 'natural'!!! Jan Allison June 9, 2016 at 6:14 AM Oh Jo I'm so sorry to hear about what happened to you. No wonder the sky cries!:-( hugs jan xx

Mike Hauser June 8, 2016 at 11:52 PM Wonderful piece Jan Allison June 9, 2016 at 1:06 AM Thanks Mike and not a funny line in sight - I do surprise people at times lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper June 8, 2016 at 10:46 PM Very good write, that is what it looks like just a few miles from here, home gone, animals drowned , lives lost.:'( Jan Allison June 9, 2016 at 1:05 AM It is such a tragedy Eve:-( hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen June 8, 2016 at 1:31 PM - Very well written dear Jan, a serious part of our world - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison June 8, 2016 at 1:34 PM Not sure if it has a chance in the contest Anne Lise am not sure what the sponsor is after but I go with my muse:-) hugs Jan xx

Janet Runyan June 8, 2016 at 12:39 PM I just love this. It's really touching to me. I always love reading your work Jan Allison June 8, 2016 at 12:43 PM Thanks Janet that is a lovely comment I am very pleased you like my poems - i just write and hope for the best:-) hugs Jan xx

Laura Leiser June 8, 2016 at 11:22 AM Excellent, Jan! The strong emotions of your take on rain run deep! Should do very well in contest :) Jan Allison June 8, 2016 at 11:33 AM I'm not sure if it is what the sponsor is after Laura I write and get inspired by a contest but my list of N/A is growing longer by the day but as long as I am inspired to write that is the important thing:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless June 8, 2016 at 10:54 AM OUCH@!!!!! but Mom always said "the truth only hurts when it's supposed to" Jan Allison June 8, 2016 at 10:56 AM Its hurting now John and a don't think a sticking plaster on the world is quite enough !:-) hugs Jan xx

Miraj Raha June 8, 2016 at 10:15 AM Thanks for the reminder Jan,how foolish we are isn't it?cutting down the branch on which we are sitting,still man's greed prevails.A sad state of affairs. Jan Allison June 8, 2016 at 10:32 AM It is so so sad Miraj:-( hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith June 8, 2016 at 10:08 AM Excellent Jan. I believe in part it is our own fault. Jan Allison June 8, 2016 at 10:32 AM It sure is our fault indeed - not sure if this is what the sponsor is after but i go with the flow of my muse:-) hugs jan xx

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