Rain

Rain

After the rain, I shear off
A slice of rainbow, just for you.
Hyetal words run through my (b)rain
Drizzle, hail, deluge, downpour, showers...
But the most mellifluous and redolent
With memories of you
Is petrichor because like the
Bare rocks and gnarled tree trunks
The arid landscape of my heart
Longs for you, my rain in the desert,
And the heavenly scent reminds me of
That downpour…when you proposed. 
But now, clouds cover the sun 
Rain and tears run down my face
Because I miss you.

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Tanja Cilia

Date: 7/6/2016 2:46:00 PM

Thank you, all!

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 7/6/2016 8:48:00 AM

Hi Tanja. Congrats for your placement with this wonderful piece!! ;-)

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/6/2016 5:16:00 AM

Great write, Tanja:) Congratulations on your win:)

Carrie Richards

Date: 7/5/2016 2:46:00 PM

Slicing off a bit of rainbow !! I loved that metaphor !! Well done, Tanja!!

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 7/5/2016 1:01:00 PM

Hello Tanja and big congrats on your win! I really liked that idea of "shearing off" the rainbow plus I learned a new word in hyetal! This was a sad write, but I liked how you used petrichor here and the varying degrees of rain. Thank you for entering my contest :)!

Tanja Cilia
Date: 7/5/2016 1:46:00 PM

I won the contest? That's neat! Thank you. And thank you for providing us with the opportunity to write.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 6/12/2016 11:12:00 PM

Tanja, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/8/2016 12:38:00 PM

- Poetry: Music in words .... rhythmic expression of emotion, like the nectar of the bee, you are sharing here with us Tanja :) - Welcome to Poetry Soup :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)