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Ragged

All night, wind ragged as rain blew. And the moon is seen as a squire view. To be a mentor to the cutting wind. In the sky, a single moon might askew. Oh, hurry to the lake in the wild. Both the lady and the bird sighed. If only we'd ever loved each other! If all they've done is look in mind. Utterance cracks as we become older. A lighted match's rosy cheeks, blusher. A sun storm raged underneath the ground. ? I clean our crystal skulls with a safe utter. I ramble with most of yesterday's wound. Along the ragged edges of a river round. Among the hopes that will never realize It was only me, my last day, and my hound. But yet, doesn't all life exist to demise? Can't the sun have some night bronze? Isn't it all promise that flickers so dimly? When faced with the stout dawn rise? It's likely that the odds aren't so dreary. But some, we will have to fight certainly. Surrounded by the lowland meadow. So I dare to daydream to attain victory.
Written: October 5, 2021 ''R'' Contest, New Or Old Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France.
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Kauffman Avatar
October 26, 2021 at 10:22 AM
Strong, powerful images, Lasaad - "can't the sun have some night bronze." Nothing ragged about this verse. Congratulations on your win. And thank you for your delightful message of congratulations. It was an honor to be on the winners list with so many gems. Blessings my friend.
Rodrigues Avatar
October 14, 2021 at 5:56 AM
I love the imagery here, Lasaad! The first 2 lines, and “A lighted match's rosy cheeks, blusher” and the great questions in the next to last lines.
Hankins Avatar
October 7, 2021 at 7:10 PM
Very clever, Lasaad. Congratulations on your placement in the contest.
Sambourne Avatar
October 7, 2021 at 6:59 PM
"Utterance cracks as we become older" - what a profound line, Lasaad. In fact, the poem contains many remarkable word couplings, like "I ramble...along the ragged edges of a river round." Superb alliteration. Congratulations! Best wishes, Brian
Pandit Avatar
October 7, 2021 at 2:20 PM
Glad your poem earned a podium win, Lasaad. BIG congrats to you.
Allison Avatar
October 7, 2021 at 2:11 PM
excellent ink Lasaad, many congratulations on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
Alex Avatar
October 7, 2021 at 9:53 AM
wONDERFUL WRITE WITH VERY THOUGHT PROVOKING QUESTIONS AND BEAUTIFUL ILLUSTRATION. CONGRATULATIONS!
Goldsmith Avatar
October 7, 2021 at 9:30 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a creative story/write and pretty picture. I enjoyed it. Have a blessed day................
La France Avatar
October 7, 2021 at 8:05 AM
Lasaad, congratulations on your win in my "R" contest with this wonderful poem, so well done ~ peace and tranquility _Constance
Trifiatis Avatar
October 6, 2021 at 9:15 AM
Deep writing that one needs the ability of a expert swimmer to reach the depth of your thoughts, my friend Lasaad. Blessings
Skelly Avatar
October 6, 2021 at 6:00 AM
All living matter has an end date, your absolutely right..Delice
Pandit Avatar
October 6, 2021 at 4:25 AM
Insightful write, Lasaad. Torn apart images you painted speak of life.
Buhagiar Avatar
October 6, 2021 at 1:44 AM
A philosophic poem Best for a win.
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