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Race of a Lifetime

He skis down the slopes of a snow covered mountain racing against time and his main adversary... avalanche in hot pursuit. ---------------------------------- Written 28th May 2016 Contest: Traditional Tanka Sponsor: Charlotte J. Puddifoot

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Laura Hay

Date: 8/10/2016 7:27:00 AM

Fantastic little write with such a great visual for the ending, well done on your win for this too, warm regards, Laura.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/11/2016 11:38:00 AM

You make an excellent critic, Laura:) Thank you! Warm regards // paul

Laura Leiser

Date: 6/24/2016 3:50:00 PM

Great tanka, Paul! Congrats on your win:)

Paul Callus
Date: 6/24/2016 3:56:00 PM

Many thanks, Laura:) Have a lovely weekend. Regards ... paul

Robert Stoner Jr

Date: 6/19/2016 1:00:00 PM

Congratulations Paul on this economic for with your strong visual impact, we'll done.

Paul Callus
Date: 6/24/2016 4:03:00 PM

Thank you for your feedback, Robert, and the congrats. All the best...paul

Meenakshi Raina

Date: 6/18/2016 7:40:00 PM

Congratulations Paul on your placement...

Paul Callus
Date: 6/24/2016 3:42:00 PM

Your visit and congrats are appreciated, Meenakshi; thank you! Regards // paul

Sandra Haight

Date: 6/18/2016 7:25:00 PM

Such a powerful and frightening vision in your Tanka, Paul. Congratulations on your placement! Well done! Sandra

Paul Callus
Date: 6/24/2016 3:41:00 PM

Thank you for the congrats and feedback, Sandra. Have a nice weekend. Regards // paul

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 6/18/2016 4:54:00 PM

this was another very good entry, with a strong last line; i liked the contrast of "hot pursuit" with the cold snowy mountains - congrats on your win in my contest :)

Paul Callus
Date: 6/24/2016 3:38:00 PM

Thank you Charlotte; I'm so pleased to be on your winners' list. You read my poem very well:) Excuse the late reply, but I was indisposed for some days; now recuperating. Warm regards ~ paul

Jan Allison

Date: 6/18/2016 4:52:00 PM

Many congrats Paul:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 6/24/2016 3:34:00 PM

Thank you for coming back with congrats, Jan:) hugs // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/16/2016 5:42:00 PM

I can visualize this so well and it is fhe main reason I never wanted to ski, fear of this very thing. Superb! ; )

Paul Callus
Date: 6/24/2016 3:33:00 PM

Hi Connie! Trying to catch up on backdated comments! Had not realized that this contest has been judged. Thank you for reading and liking. All the best. // paul

Kelly Deschler

Date: 6/6/2016 6:51:00 PM

Cannot wait to see what happens next in this cliffhanger... Great writing, Paul. I like the amount of action in this poem, it just gets the reader so involved in the adventure!... Good luck in Charlotte's contest!

Paul Callus
Date: 6/7/2016 1:06:00 PM

I love your insightful feedback, Kelly! Thank you for a pleasant visit:) ~ Sweet regards // paul

Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/28/2016 11:48:00 PM

If he is James Bond, he might win!! Great write!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/29/2016 10:01:00 AM

Thank you Arthur...James Bond always comes out on top, whichever way you look at it:) // paul

Edlynn Nau

Date: 5/28/2016 3:18:00 PM

Ha! Not much of a race when an Avalanche is your competition. They win hands down (arms down, legs down, heads up; we hope)! Fun one!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/29/2016 10:44:00 AM

I wouldn't ever dream of racing one, Edlynn!! Thank you for stopping by...pleasantly! ~ Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/28/2016 10:02:00 AM

this one is VERY good!!!

Paul Callus
Date: 5/29/2016 11:16:00 AM

Thank you Andrea! Traditional tanka is not my forte. Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/28/2016 7:26:00 AM

- With risking their lives .... big powers in avalanche - Great written, Paul - Luck in contest - Happy weekend - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 5/28/2016 8:38:00 AM

Thanks a lot, Anne Lise:) Hope you too have a lovely weekend! hugs // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/28/2016 4:51:00 AM

how visual and lovely, paul... thus is terrific!..huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 5/28/2016 7:09:00 AM

Thank you Nette; getting a 'terrific' comment from you is awesome:) hugs // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 5/28/2016 3:35:00 AM

Gosh what an action packed tanka Paul - good luck in the contest - must get mine posted quick! hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 5/28/2016 7:07:00 AM

Hi Jan! Although this is a traditional tanka, I did try to make the content somewhat modern. Hope Charlotte will like it! hugs // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/28/2016 2:59:00 AM

I have seen daring skiers try to beat the avalanche. It is chilling. I don't ski but love to watch it in IMAX or on t.v. A great entry Paul! ; )

Paul Callus
Date: 5/28/2016 7:04:00 AM

Yes, Connie, watching action like this on IMAX is very entertaining, but I personally would not want to be part of it! (I have never been skiing, and I know that it can be a dangerous sport). Thank you for reading and liking:) Regards // paul