Paul Callus Poet Tanka

Race of a Lifetime

He skis down the slopes
of a snow covered mountain
racing against time
and his main adversary...
avalanche in hot pursuit. 

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Written 28th May 2016
Contest: Traditional Tanka
Sponsor: Charlotte J. Puddifoot

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Laura Hay August 10, 2016 at 7:27 AM Fantastic little write with such a great visual for the ending, well done on your win for this too, warm regards, Laura. Paul Callus August 11, 2016 at 11:38 AM You make an excellent critic, Laura:) Thank you! Warm regards // paul

Laura Leiser June 24, 2016 at 3:50 PM Great tanka, Paul! Congrats on your win:) Paul Callus June 24, 2016 at 3:56 PM Many thanks, Laura:) Have a lovely weekend. Regards ... paul

Robert Stoner Jr June 19, 2016 at 1:00 PM Congratulations Paul on this economic for with your strong visual impact, we'll done. Paul Callus June 24, 2016 at 4:03 PM Thank you for your feedback, Robert, and the congrats. All the best...paul

Meenakshi Raina June 18, 2016 at 7:40 PM Congratulations Paul on your placement... Paul Callus June 24, 2016 at 3:42 PM Your visit and congrats are appreciated, Meenakshi; thank you! Regards // paul

Sandra Haight June 18, 2016 at 7:25 PM Such a powerful and frightening vision in your Tanka, Paul. Congratulations on your placement! Well done! Sandra Paul Callus June 24, 2016 at 3:41 PM Thank you for the congrats and feedback, Sandra. Have a nice weekend. Regards // paul

Charlotte Puddifoot June 18, 2016 at 4:54 PM this was another very good entry, with a strong last line; i liked the contrast of "hot pursuit" with the cold snowy mountains - congrats on your win in my contest :) Paul Callus June 24, 2016 at 3:38 PM Thank you Charlotte; I'm so pleased to be on your winners' list. You read my poem very well:) Excuse the late reply, but I was indisposed for some days; now recuperating. Warm regards ~ paul

Jan Allison June 18, 2016 at 4:52 PM Many congrats Paul:-) hugs jan xx Paul Callus June 24, 2016 at 3:34 PM Thank you for coming back with congrats, Jan:) hugs // paul

Connie Marcum Wong June 16, 2016 at 5:42 PM I can visualize this so well and it is fhe main reason I never wanted to ski, fear of this very thing. Superb! ; ) Paul Callus June 24, 2016 at 3:33 PM Hi Connie! Trying to catch up on backdated comments! Had not realized that this contest has been judged. Thank you for reading and liking. All the best. // paul

Kelly Deschler June 6, 2016 at 6:51 PM Cannot wait to see what happens next in this cliffhanger... Great writing, Paul. I like the amount of action in this poem, it just gets the reader so involved in the adventure!... Good luck in Charlotte's contest! Paul Callus June 7, 2016 at 1:06 PM I love your insightful feedback, Kelly! Thank you for a pleasant visit:) ~ Sweet regards // paul

Arthur Vaso May 28, 2016 at 11:48 PM If he is James Bond, he might win!! Great write! Paul Callus May 29, 2016 at 10:01 AM Thank you Arthur...James Bond always comes out on top, whichever way you look at it:) // paul

Edlynn Nau May 28, 2016 at 3:18 PM Ha! Not much of a race when an Avalanche is your competition. They win hands down (arms down, legs down, heads up; we hope)! Fun one! Paul Callus May 29, 2016 at 10:44 AM I wouldn't ever dream of racing one, Edlynn!! Thank you for stopping by...pleasantly! ~ Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich May 28, 2016 at 10:02 AM this one is VERY good!!! Paul Callus May 29, 2016 at 11:16 AM Thank you Andrea! Traditional tanka is not my forte. Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen May 28, 2016 at 7:26 AM - With risking their lives .... big powers in avalanche - Great written, Paul - Luck in contest - Happy weekend - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Paul Callus May 28, 2016 at 8:38 AM Thanks a lot, Anne Lise:) Hope you too have a lovely weekend! hugs // paul

Nette Onclaud May 28, 2016 at 4:51 AM how visual and lovely, paul... thus is terrific!..huggs Paul Callus May 28, 2016 at 7:09 AM Thank you Nette; getting a 'terrific' comment from you is awesome:) hugs // paul

Jan Allison May 28, 2016 at 3:35 AM Gosh what an action packed tanka Paul - good luck in the contest - must get mine posted quick! hugs Jan xx Paul Callus May 28, 2016 at 7:07 AM Hi Jan! Although this is a traditional tanka, I did try to make the content somewhat modern. Hope Charlotte will like it! hugs // paul

Connie Marcum Wong May 28, 2016 at 2:59 AM I have seen daring skiers try to beat the avalanche. It is chilling. I don't ski but love to watch it in IMAX or on t.v. A great entry Paul! ; ) Paul Callus May 28, 2016 at 7:04 AM Yes, Connie, watching action like this on IMAX is very entertaining, but I personally would not want to be part of it! (I have never been skiing, and I know that it can be a dangerous sport). Thank you for reading and liking:) Regards // paul