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DEAR DIARY

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"Every day is a page to write a new story". 

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Sunday        I wasn't sure dear diary, would I find a new home here
                    Would this be a permanent place to live without leaving

Monday        This morning I greeted them with a smile so wide
                    Hoping they would accept this frightened, tiny me

Tuesday       Hello diary, my little sister does seem subdued
                    Like me she doesn't speak, but she seems quite wise

Wednesday  Dear diary, my father is indifferent, avoiding me
                    Does not treat me like family, more like an assistant

Thursday     Quick scribbled note today, my mother wants my healing
                    From illness and from gayness, She's praying every day

Friday          I spoke to my social worker, I cannot live there anymore
                    The care for me is too hard, they want me to go away
 
Saturday      Hello my quiet friend, today writing is so painful
                    I packed my things to leave, can't speak, too broken
 
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Today           My sister wants me with her, she fixed a room for me
                     She loves me and embraces me, I think I will go
                
Tomorrow    I will have a home, and I will start brand new
                    I will make this work, my diary, we turn this page, we're blank.

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2nd place in contest: Quote Response
Sponsor: Nayda Ivette Negron 
December 5, 2016

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Date: 12/25/2016 6:53:00 PM
This is such a creative approach. I am glad that it ended on a happy note. Great idea. Congratulations.
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Darren White
Date: 12/26/2016 12:19:00 AM
Thank you Janis, it just asked for this approach :)
Date: 12/25/2016 11:52:00 AM
It's really touching. I totally agree with Tamal, the way you expressed is really so raw and therefore seems real. Is this really your story or is it a fiction? I hope u don't mind me asking this. By the way, congratulations on your win.
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Darren White
Date: 12/25/2016 11:59:00 AM
Hello Afzal thank you, this is part of my story yes, it's not fiction. You are allowed to ask :)
Date: 12/25/2016 5:54:00 AM
Darren, I like how you turned this into diary pages. Much conflict each day, but you show how one day there is hope and you keep writing! Congrats!
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Darren White
Date: 12/25/2016 6:54:00 AM
Yeah, that is exactly what I intended with it. Thank you :)
Date: 12/25/2016 12:45:00 AM
Darren, this is a superlative of a poem. The narrator's emotions are laid raw and bare. Congrats on your win.
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Darren White
Date: 12/25/2016 12:51:00 AM
Thank you for these wonderful words, my friend! I am glad you recognized the emotion in there.
Date: 12/24/2016 10:05:00 PM
Congratulations Darren.
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Darren White
Date: 12/24/2016 10:50:00 PM
Ohhh, THANK you :) I am honoured!
Date: 12/6/2016 9:43:00 PM
Good luck on the contest my friend! Wonderfully written... A new start in a new place, surrounded by love and acceptance - this warms my heart and brings a smile to my face. A new beginning so well deserved... :* <3
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Claudia Polydoro
Date: 12/7/2016 4:46:00 AM
Pretzel fingers crossed, but I already have a gut feeling that it will be a great one for you guys <3
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Darren White
Date: 12/6/2016 11:35:00 PM
Yes :) Looking forward to Christmas this year for the first time ever. <3
Date: 12/6/2016 6:49:00 AM
Blank pages, a clean slate, couldn't have written it better Darren! Good luck, it's deserving of a win in its unique capture.
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Darren White
Date: 12/6/2016 12:12:00 PM
Hi Paloma! I am glad you like it, it just asked for this format :)
Date: 12/6/2016 4:21:00 AM
This is such a creative way to have approached this!
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Darren White
Date: 12/6/2016 4:29:00 AM
Thank you Rebecca. . I saw it literally before me.
Date: 12/5/2016 2:46:00 PM
This was so cool Darren, sad at points but smile producing at the end. I love how you formatted this, it is perfect for the challenge. Good luck.
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Darren White
Date: 12/5/2016 2:49:00 PM
Thanks Chris, yes, I am glad for the smile at the end :)
Date: 12/5/2016 2:11:00 PM
Wow Darren - This has me speechless. Thank you for showing what people go through and God Bless you. Stay strong :) Good luck in the contest.
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Darren White
Date: 12/5/2016 2:22:00 PM
Heidi, thank you. You stay strong too :)
Date: 12/5/2016 1:08:00 PM
A very powerful poem that exposes the under belly of society
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Darren White
Date: 12/5/2016 1:25:00 PM
Thank you, and yes it does!
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