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Queen Sea and Her Three Paramours

So enchanted was Sun by Queen Sea as he sat near some clouds high above he began sliding down stealthily till he touched the dark face of his love. Then Sir Sky, so aroused by Sea’s hue, began melting along with Sun’s rays, and by now, Sun was dipping into the blue depths of Queen Sea. In a daze, Sky gazed down, and with ruddishness blushed! Then a third lover looked on the face of Queen Sea. Feeling thrilled, Night then brushed rosy heavens with deep purple lace. Night embraced lovely Sea! Sun was gone. And again, Sky with envy looked on. Sonnet done in nine-syllable lines for the Anapest Trimeter Contest of Pendleton Arkwright

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Date: 3/23/2015 1:56:00 AM
9 syllables per line has lent itself to enchantment. There is glorious imagery! God bless, Julia, xx
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Date: 1/1/2015 10:18:00 AM
Congrad's Andie fine use of personification as well as meter! Light & Love Happy New Year
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Date: 1/1/2015 9:24:00 AM
What an extended metaphor, great anapest. Congrats.
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Date: 1/1/2015 9:16:00 AM
Andrea, congratulations on your 1st Place win for this beautiful poem. You used very imaginative characters for your lovely Sonnet! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 1/1/2015 8:46:00 AM
Dropping back with my congratulations Andrea:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Date: 1/1/2015 6:54:00 AM
Congratulations on your first place top spot win Andrea. Very beautiful.
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Date: 12/31/2014 8:50:00 PM
Did you read my original comment on this poem. I'm sure you didn't read it because you would of probably blocked me! hahaha
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Date: 12/31/2014 8:47:00 PM
Congratulations on your stunning first place win. Only four people placed at all so this is a huge win for you!!!!
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Date: 11/17/2014 1:32:00 PM
Sensual and charming, love the manifestation that goes on here. beautiful work.
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Date: 11/9/2014 7:03:00 AM
This is so imaginative and enchanting. Your images are pure bliss. It is destined to win.
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Date: 10/26/2014 10:26:00 AM
what a wonderful write with very clever personification - a guaranteed big winner here, my friend
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Date: 10/25/2014 10:25:00 AM
Undoubtedly the most imaginative and well written poem I have seen for this contest. I wish you a top placement, though your poem can win it on its own without my wishing. Funny, captcha 333. What a poem for it!
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Date: 10/24/2014 3:11:00 AM
Lovely imagery, Andrea... (almost like a 4-some... yeah, I know, not funny)
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Date: 10/24/2014 12:27:00 AM
Okay....now here is the winner! It would be for me Andrea. This is going straight into my fav's and it was such a delight to read you simply must share it at PFT. I think this poem made my night! hugs, Connie
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Date: 10/23/2014 10:30:00 PM
Nice personification and imagery, Andy. There are some expressions too.
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Date: 10/23/2014 10:32:00 PM
I meant fine expressions.
Date: 10/23/2014 7:50:00 PM
Splendid write Andrea... I get a little confused trying to figure out stressed and unstressed syllables....hugs
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Date: 10/23/2014 5:40:00 PM
I do love this description: "Night then brushed rosy heavens with deep purple lace." This was a marvelous piece of poetry.
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Date: 10/23/2014 10:05:00 AM
Whats to say but this is wonderful! Your imagination and skill are awesome. If this doesn't win, there must be some famous poets in competition. Love, daver
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Date: 10/23/2014 6:21:00 AM
simply glorious Andrea really love this excellent pen so thrilling hugs
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Date: 10/22/2014 11:01:00 PM
This write brought a smile to my face my friend! I've been away for too long, I surely have missed some awesome poetry! I will bring some Halloween poetry for the next couple of days, but will have to go back to school after that! I have missed all of you! What a magnificent poem here Andrea! I really loved reading this tremendous piece this evening! What a grandiose write! Great Work!!
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Date: 10/22/2014 4:54:00 PM
Andrea, this is so lovely, love it's content and grace you've put down here, what a wonderious vision so sweetly place here for all of us soupers to read, great job here lady, love the part about the sun melting into the sea, then the sea being saved by her lover the night, great job, cheri Thanks also about your comments on slender man, I personally don't believe in this creature of shadow, but I wanted to do a currant subject for my young people my sons age. This is something he chose, cheri
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Date: 10/22/2014 4:06:00 PM
I love the way your words blend and chime one right off of the next! well done
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Date: 10/22/2014 2:23:00 PM
Beautiful innocent creation...Nice structure...I enjoyed your personification...I request you, please read the Bengali poems of Rabindranath Tagore ( First Non-European Nobel Prize winner. )English version of his poems are available in our great Poetry Soup...He wrote every feelings of human being. As a Bengali it is too much difficult for me to write an unique poem...I try to do my best. Best to you...I love your poetic eyes...
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Date: 10/22/2014 2:14:00 PM
You know I love personification. This is beautiful; love it!!!
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Date: 10/22/2014 1:37:00 PM
stunning beautifully painted piece andrea love the picture it drew for me
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