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You came like rain I waited since twilight; How would I deeply say with tenderness? the way you filled my life with cool delight, Like a touch of raindrops in the wilderness. You gaze like ivory clouds at noontime; How would I deeply say with so much glee? the way you touch my heart with love sublime, like a kiss of cloud's silhouette in me. You smile like crescent moon in summer nights, How would I deeply say with hopeful heart? the way you soothe my soul in soaring heights like a soft moonglow that shall not depart.

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Date: 4/18/2020 11:28:00 AM
I enjoy your old style English in this love poem, poet JCB. Nice flow and a wonderful simile to end with. Well done! ~ John
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Date: 4/16/2020 7:38:00 PM
Hey, you write so well, keep the gems sparkling, enjoyed all your poems, waiting for more
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Date: 4/15/2020 10:31:00 PM
A lovely way to say I love you. Beautiful, JCB. ...Fran
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Date: 4/15/2020 9:31:00 AM
You are an iceberg poet. There is much depth beneath the words that grace the surface.
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Date: 4/13/2020 1:08:00 PM
This is so beautiful, JCB, like the touch of raindrops in the wilderness. Welcome to Poetry Soup. John
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Date: 4/13/2020 5:15:00 PM
Thank you for your warm welcome dear poet John.Stay safe.
Date: 4/12/2020 11:00:00 AM
This has a distinct Chinese poetic flavour to it all; you might enjoy reading up on both Japanese and Chinese poetry formats...it might well suit your particular style of writing I do very much think. Welcome to the "Soup", JCB Burl! :) john
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Date: 4/13/2020 4:25:00 AM
Thank you dear poet John for your insightful feedback. Looking forward to reading your creations.
Date: 4/12/2020 7:38:00 AM
I love this poem, simply beautiful. Welcome to Poetry Soup. I hope all is well JC Hawkens
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Date: 4/13/2020 4:25:00 AM
Thank you dear poet JC..Wishing you well.
Date: 4/10/2020 10:34:00 PM
I simply love this enchanting poem! It's in my faves. A Happy Easter to you and yours.
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Date: 4/11/2020 2:22:00 AM
Thank you so much dear poet Judy for such a heart-warming comment and for adding this to your faves.
Date: 4/10/2020 10:39:00 AM
Sooo beautiful!
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Date: 4/10/2020 2:17:00 PM
And you are soooo sweet dear poet Kim!
Date: 4/10/2020 10:14:00 AM
Your soul is releasing pure poetry in this missive JCB
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Date: 4/10/2020 2:19:00 PM
And you are exuding energy that inspires us(beginners) dear poet Caren. Thank you.
Date: 4/9/2020 4:02:00 PM
what a beautiful gem, JCB
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Date: 4/9/2020 6:50:00 PM
Thank you dear Andrea.

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