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Once again grateful to Sandra for this wonderful collaboration.  Great tyring different styles of writing with her.  Always a pleasure to collaborate.  We both shared our dislike for Autumn, where everything is dying and here in the UK, skies are so grey and dull, unlike today, it is sunny!!!

 

Sun is held hostage by a blanket of clouds, reflecting an agitated addict's ashtray. Birds depart from soaked naked branches, as eyes seek refuge from the ugliness of change. I peer beneath this umbrage pitched upon the ground anticipating a palette of summer to simper back yet all I see are stick figure shadows frolicking as this bitter autumn wind encircles me Symphonies of the sky continuously weep. I watch petals float in puddles of regret, so I reflect back to a summer of mon amour, where Michelangelo hands sculptured my garden. Reflecting back, delicate strokes within velvety folds as fingers trace the edges of my heart's blossom crimson drops slip silently between my hands for even the beauty of a rose holds autumn's thorns Secure from rustic debris that blow against windows, 5pm twilight, means no rekindling with my cherished sun. My shortened days lash back through glares of street lamps with frosty glass etchings chiselled by night's harsh breath. Collaboration with Sandra Adams Silent One 20 October 2019

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Date: 10/30/2019 11:01:00 AM
Another wowser you have done with Sandy. Fantastic!
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Date: 10/26/2019 4:23:00 AM
A blessing for me to find this jewel this morn. You and Sandra have gifted us such a wonderful creation to read and enjoy! The depth, the beauty in the poetic expressions of the sad regret in life is right on the mark. Some of us have far too many regrets. A fav...
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Date: 10/24/2019 5:26:00 PM
Good going, this is a powerful poem.
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Date: 10/24/2019 12:47:00 AM
Excellent imagery here ~ love the bit of light (and warmth) offered in your reflection ~ excellent collaboration between the two of you!
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Date: 10/23/2019 12:26:00 PM
Well Done Silent One. You both write so well together. An excellent collaboration. God Bless, JB
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Date: 10/22/2019 12:54:00 PM
love the back drop! the imagery Is presented beautifully and the mesh is smooth. The poem is Good hands down.
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Date: 10/22/2019 12:04:00 PM
Silent One, October has been kind to you two. You have a true gift and gifted friend. The words of this poem flow in a melodious, yet melancholy fashion all their own. -Richard
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Date: 10/22/2019 11:00:00 AM
A beautifully written collaboration. Well done both of you :-) x
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Date: 10/22/2019 8:30:00 AM
You two write well together. This beats Poodles of Regret. Kidding aside, great imagery and emotional force.
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Date: 10/22/2019 1:29:00 AM
Lovely poem... wonderful collaboration.
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Date: 10/21/2019 5:19:00 PM
Another beautiful collaboration. I feel the same way about fall. "Agitated addict's ashtray" is my favorite part.
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Date: 10/21/2019 11:10:00 AM
Another gem from two gifted pens..some gloom in nature's retreat..so well expressed..excellent as always..kudos to you both Silent One and Sandy. I was travelling--hence delay in reading your beautiful poem.
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Date: 10/21/2019 10:23:00 AM
You and Sandra make such a great writing team, another gem. Dispite the gloom that comes with it I do love the autumn, was in the the new forest on Sunday and trees were just turning displaying beautiful colours and of course the ponies and donkeys everywhere. Tom
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Date: 10/21/2019 10:23:00 AM
Hi Silent, this is such an excellent collaboration by you both. A true collaboration where two write as one, each giving the write its true wonder. In this free verse, you both use the full scope of the form. Two pens truly singing as one. A delight to the senses, a poem to be savoured, so many rich lines. Have a wonderful Monday. Your friend always.,,Mike. A Fav
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Date: 10/20/2019 11:46:00 PM
You write so eloquently together, like perfect pen mates
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Date: 10/20/2019 11:22:00 PM
Perhaps Autumn is a touch of sadness, in some parts of the world. However, there is beauty even in the simplest of moments. I think so anyway. Finding that peace, within a season. The heart can do. If willing!! You both have a way with words. This is so beautifully written and presented. ~ Brandy
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Date: 10/20/2019 7:56:00 PM
Crisp images! Nicely done collaboration!
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Date: 10/20/2019 7:48:00 PM
Different aspect to Autumn, like this a lot. Excellent poetry you two....
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Date: 10/20/2019 2:15:00 PM
Wonderful write SO, sad that I already faved Sandys first, it's all the same in the end. This is a metaphorical delight, what creativity you two create together!
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Date: 10/20/2019 12:32:00 PM
- "I reflect back to a summer of mon amour, where Michelangelo hands sculptured my garden "... that's exactly what we miss ... when the fall comes with the cold death S.O. and Sandra ... beautiful written :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/20/2019 11:07:00 AM
"Reflecting back, delicate strokes within velvety folds as fingers trace the edges of my heart's blossom crimson drops slip silently between my hands for even the beauty of a rose holds autumn's thorns" I like this Stanza... A beautiful poem
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Date: 10/20/2019 8:15:00 AM
Oh man this one is Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious
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Date: 10/20/2019 6:46:00 AM
it is always great to collaborate with you, thank you again my friend...i like this one... hugs :)
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