Ptsd

He took down his gun today,
a telescopic rifle made for hunting.

From high atop the rise the people down below
appear so close and focused through the 'scope.

He spends all day breaking down the gun 
and re-assembling it,
polishing each part until it gleams.
He fits the telescope,
lifts the weapon to his shoulder for just another look.

He'll bide his time...

The time has come, his palms are moist.
In the cross-hairs there are children,
lots of children dressed in Santa suits.

Where are the men with rifles on their backs?
...the men he was expecting?

A half-hour passes. He slowly lowers the rifle
and puts it back into its case.

Another half-hour passes
and he stumbles down the stairwell 
to the street, his mind confused and torn.
Crossing a bridge he stops 
to hurl the case into the river.

He wanders slowly home 
to his studio apartment,
his haven of forgetfulness,
his pressed and perfect Ranger uniform,
and wonders why he just cannot stop crying.

He took down his gun today...
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015


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Date: 12/21/2015 1:28:00 AM
I came by to read this one again, this poem speaks, and resonates with me, bravo again.
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Date: 12/20/2015 1:34:00 AM
Makes one wonder how many lonely souls who have been left on the scrap heap after years of service go through similar scenes and routines in order to hang on to a scrap of sanity, Keith. A great write, with, as it should be, a bleak uncertain ending. Impressive. Regards, Viv
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Date: 12/19/2015 2:26:00 AM
Awesome Keith. Read it time and again. You did well my fellow
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Keith Bickerstaffe
Date: 12/19/2015 6:48:00 AM
Thanks Craig... much appreciated. Keith
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Date: 12/19/2015 6:47:00 AM
Date: 12/18/2015 10:22:00 PM
I might add this was a superb poem, that highlights the issue, its flows so well and tells such a painful story in a beautiful way. A7 all the way.
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Date: 12/19/2015 6:50:00 AM
Thanks for the positive remarks Arthur... I am most grateful. Best wishes Keith
Date: 12/18/2015 10:21:00 PM
Hi there Keith, I didn't see this as an anti-gun poem, I saw this for the title and its heart-wrenching, for those who lay their life on the line, so that we as poets may write freely, I have no solutions at hand, but we owe them much more than we seem to give them as a society.
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Date: 12/18/2015 9:52:00 PM
Nice anti gun poem Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish
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Keith Bickerstaffe
Date: 12/18/2015 10:00:00 PM
Thanks Matthew... much appreciated. Keith
Date: 12/18/2015 5:37:00 PM
Gosh I found the imagery quite chilling Keith :-( hugs jan xx
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Keith Bickerstaffe
Date: 12/18/2015 5:42:00 PM
Thanks Jan... who knows what is in the minds of those soldiers subject to the atrocities of war... how do they deal with their nightmares? Lots of TLC I would suppose. Keith
Date: 12/18/2015 4:40:00 PM
I have one close to me in combat... I'm hoping the above is not his fate well written piece, potential horror and real horror
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Date: 12/18/2015 4:53:00 PM
I ave never been in combat... my age precluded it. Who knows what lurks in the mind of a soldier who has witnessed atrocities, and what he might do. Thanks Declan! Best wishes, Keith
Date: 12/18/2015 9:14:00 AM
This one was a punch to the gut, it made me empathize with someone who was planing an unthinkable act.
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Keith Bickerstaffe
Date: 12/18/2015 9:20:00 AM
Yeah... one wonders what is in the minds of those similarly afflicted, especially since they were once driven in combat to commit 'unthinkable acts' themselves. Thank you my friend. Best wishes, Keith
Date: 12/17/2015 10:01:00 PM
Keith, a very sad poem, many people suffer this. Life fails to give all we need. Sometimes I wonder if it is fear of ever living again. Love the poem. A perfect 10. I'm going to read this one more time. Love SKAT
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Keith Bickerstaffe
Date: 12/17/2015 10:06:00 PM
Thanks so much Sweetheart! Love and hugs, Keith xo
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