Kabuteng P.Ink K. Poet Senryu

Proof Unveiled

(*unveiled*)

       she said no....
staccato heartbeats
          tell otherwise



                                                (*proof*)

                                               never again---
                                                    toilet tank hides bottles
                                                              drowning resolve







---for Chris' contest  O_o

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Adell Foster September 24, 2010 at 4:41 PM Indeed the proof is in more than the pudding, Congrats on your win in the contest my friend and thank you for your most welcomed comments on my tanka "Sweet Sanctuary" I truly appreciate it :-) God Bless, Always, Adell

Daniel Cwiak September 23, 2010 at 2:22 AM Great writes here, Nikko. I think the "proof" is just terrific. Congrats on your win in the contest. Dan C

Harry Horsman September 21, 2010 at 6:30 AM excellent. congrats on these winners. Harry

Carol Sunshine Brown September 21, 2010 at 4:22 AM Congratulations Nikko on your win in Chris D. Aechtner's contest "Not Another Senyru Contest!". Love, Carol

Connie Marcum Wong September 21, 2010 at 12:00 AM Congratulations on your win with these two gems! Great going Nikko!

Andrea Dietrich September 20, 2010 at 10:54 PM Two AWESOME ones (of course he has to rank you high with TWO good ones!!) Congratulations. Luv, Andrea

Barbara Gorelick September 20, 2010 at 3:04 PM Nice one Nikko..sad, but well written..congrats. BG

Caryl Muzzey September 20, 2010 at 2:48 PM A wonderful Senryu, congratulations on a well deserved win. Caryl

Carolyn Devonshire September 20, 2010 at 2:01 PM Nikko, Congratulations on your win! Love, Carolyn

James Fraser September 20, 2010 at 1:35 PM Excellent Nikko, very much deserving of it's winning place in this wonderful contest by Chris >> James :)

Dr.Ram Mehta September 20, 2010 at 1:23 PM Congratulations on this 3rd place in the contest, nikko

Debbie Guzzi September 20, 2010 at 12:48 PM unique as always!Congrad's Light & Love

Linda-Marie Sweetheart September 20, 2010 at 11:50 AM Congrats Nikko on your super win in the Senryu contest.. an awesome victory sweet friend.. enjoy with luv...

Royal Trevino September 20, 2010 at 10:56 AM nicee ^.^, from the looks of it this one's a winner :), congrats Nikko, =(^.^)=Royal

Francine Roberts September 20, 2010 at 10:23 AM awesome senryu, congrats on your win in the contest Nikko

Gert W. Knop September 18, 2010 at 7:06 AM Hey Nikko, parehong iyong Senryus ay malaki! Wow, ikaw wrote maraming poems kamakailan-lamang at ako ay kaya busy sa ibang bagay! And thank you for all your comments!! Ingat!...Gert:)

Carol Sunshine Brown September 16, 2010 at 10:05 AM Enjoyed reading your poetry today Nikko. Hope you have a wonderful day. Love, Carol

Andrea Dietrich September 16, 2010 at 12:09 AM wow, these are both SO GREAT,Nikko . I think you are great at senryu. Can you put two like this in his contest??

Carrie Richards September 15, 2010 at 3:48 PM A combo of power-house senryus! You have told a story, sad, but true too often! ~Great job! Love, Carrie

Susan Palli September 15, 2010 at 1:36 PM Well done! (I sent you soup mail)

Linda-Marie Sweetheart September 15, 2010 at 1:00 PM Wow Nikko this one is amazing and a terrific entry for the contes by Chris... good luck my sweet friend.. enjoyed your powerful words...staccato heartbeats huh??? luv it..

De R September 15, 2010 at 11:04 AM Great entry for Chris's contest,nikko...A lot of people think that drinking away their problems is the solution...but it's not. Good luck in the contest !:) Emilia

Francine Roberts September 15, 2010 at 10:44 AM good one, good luck in the contest

Diane Locksley September 15, 2010 at 10:34 AM There is no greater sadness than having a lover be a deceiver. Great work, Nikko. Good luck in the contest.

Carolyn Devonshire September 15, 2010 at 9:48 AM Quite a moving poem, Nikko. Deception can cause people a lot of pain and some do resort to "drowning" their sorrows. Best wishes for success in Chris's contest! Love, Carolyn