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Preterition

Whoever I dreamt about
Certainly it was not she
Though any woman I dream of
It might very likely be she 

No I do not say that
She comes only at night
Though it should be very natural
If she avoided eyes of light

No balcony came out from the house
It was white and flat
Though a terrace would have been matching
And a stirring mouse

No the trees were not naked
But with rich foliage…


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April 14, 2016
For the Poetry Contest – Preterition
Hosted by: Sara Kendrick

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 5/19/2016 10:53:00 AM
Beautifully done. Congrats on your win my lovely friend. Loved always, bl
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Probir Gupta
Date: 5/21/2016 2:12:00 AM
Thank you...
Date: 5/18/2016 3:47:00 PM
Probir, congratulations on your placement in Sara's Preterition Contest. Sandra
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Probir Gupta
Date: 5/19/2016 8:49:00 AM
Thank you Sandra.
Date: 5/18/2016 10:01:00 AM
I like how you used the second line to hint of Preterition..Creative work..Thanks for participating in my contest..Congrats on your winning work..Sara
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Probir Gupta
Date: 5/19/2016 8:51:00 AM
Thank you so much for the appreciation and the evaluation...
Date: 4/30/2016 12:03:00 AM
Great write, Probir, a 7 and good luck in the contest.Eve
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Probir Gupta
Date: 4/30/2016 8:00:00 PM
Thanks Eve for the visit and appreciation. Love..Probir.
Date: 4/15/2016 6:35:00 PM
I love the last part of this. It's an amazing image!!
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Probir Gupta
Date: 4/15/2016 8:23:00 PM
Glad you like the actually 'preterition' image, concealing to reveal...
Date: 4/14/2016 1:40:00 PM
I know that preterition means emphasizing something by leaving it out. Are you omitting revealing who SHE is by beating round the bush, so to say? If that is the case, then you have succeeded! ~ Regards // paul
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Probir Gupta
Date: 4/14/2016 7:35:00 PM
Hasn't the sponsor hinted at the passing over or for that matter beating about the bush in order to gloss over in the model poem she quoted? In my poem , had the dreamer told the name straightaway, he would have been abused. And, the sponsor wants a preterition technique, not a poem on the act of preterition....Thanks and regards...

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