Prematurely

Outside the rain-splattered window
winds whipped
tearing still-moist leaves
from their moorings
hurled to the ground
dying, like our love
prematurely
without a proper goodbye
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019

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De Beaulieu Avatar
November 16, 2019 at 2:50 PM
Hello Fershon wolf, I like this very sad poem.Have a nice day my friend.
Wolf Avatar
November 16, 2019 at 8:12 PM
Happy to see your comment, Darlene! Cheers, Gershon
Theraven Avatar
October 27, 2019 at 9:53 AM
Gershon, I like this poem and it's regretful message. I hate saying Good-byes. The German phrase may be better suited, 'auf wiedersehen'. -Richard
Wolf Avatar
October 27, 2019 at 10:12 AM
I agree, Richard. -- Until we meet again, or some such, is much better than 'Good-bye.' As in Russian, do cvidanya, and Hebrew's l'hitra-ot,' both meaning 'until we see each other again.' Smiles, Gershon
Adams Avatar
October 26, 2019 at 11:54 PM
it's raining here too....i could really see this scene...vivid images... that ending powerful....excellent write my friend... hugs
Wolf Avatar
October 27, 2019 at 9:25 AM
Appreciate the kind words for this bit of imagism, Sandra. Warmest wishes, Gershon
Faulkner Avatar
October 26, 2019 at 11:43 PM
Dying prematurely - how tragic, so sadly lovely-
Wolf Avatar
October 27, 2019 at 9:25 AM
Thank you so much, Michelle, for letting me know how you viewed this write. Warmest wishes, Gershon
Pigeon Tart Avatar
October 26, 2019 at 10:00 PM
Cowabunga dude, spectacular poem. A poetic musing perfectly crafted IMHO. A fave. xomo
Wolf Avatar
October 26, 2019 at 10:45 PM
'Cowabunga!' Wow! Haven't heard that one in a while. Thank you so, so much, my dear friend. Smiles! :)
Romios Avatar
October 26, 2019 at 9:38 PM
Stunning to the max! Panagiota
Wolf Avatar
October 26, 2019 at 10:43 PM
A thrill for me to read your enthusiastic comment, my dear friend. Thank you so much! Cheers! :)
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