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FICTION POEM FOR PORTAL, PRECIPICE, PERPETUAL WORDS CONTEST SPONSORED BY CONSTANCE LA FRANCE 01/22/24

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Please step away from the cliff edge Really, we need to talk, come sit by me Eric, we‘ve been through difficult times, but Can’t you see, jumping won’t solve anything I‘ll admit, I’ve been at rock bottom myself Perhaps that’s why I came up here today I considered ending it all, but then I saw you Come and hug me son, I miss your dad so much Everyone encounters grief, we must be open and honest

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James Peranteau

Date: 2/28/2024 9:53:00 AM

i once dear poet, lived 'scaringly' close to high speed transit lines where teens often committed that that whut my nephew did (him 'they say' with the gun). You wanted mine goose's bumps...you gott'm jan...great job...that werd "precipice", i like it ;) ...much love....p.s. jan, not that i wish for or want this way; 'it's tragic' for any soul, but 'i think' mind ya, that we, ourn us, kinda sorta maybe plan ourn demise in secret...ya know, in 15years hear on the Soup; i've been shot three times and hung twice...oh and had a shank pulled on me where i had to jump off uv the train...i put myself there...lol...i tramp too much ;)

Constance La France

Date: 2/14/2024 6:12:00 AM

Jan, excellent and congratulations on your win in my contest, love the image too, hugs, Constance

Bill Baker

Date: 2/7/2024 9:47:00 PM

Nice entry, Jan. Good luck in the contest. Good message in this Acrostic poem. It may help someone save a life. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill

Anisha Dutta

Date: 1/23/2024 9:02:00 PM

Lovely. I am touched. I can feel the emotions . Hugs

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 1/23/2024 8:18:00 AM

- A heartbreaking poem, Jan - One is really down at such a moment - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 1/23/2024 8:37:00 AM

Thanks sweet friend, thankfully it is a fictional write:-) hugs Jan xx

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 1/23/2024 6:58:00 AM

nicely penned for the contest...creative use of the Acrostic form. You've sufficiently described the precipices that we all encounter at some time. I appreciate you sharing your vulnerability. I was once at a similar precipice. Best wishes with the contest, hugs, Sara

Jan Allison
Date: 1/23/2024 8:36:00 AM

Hi Sara, it is a totally fictional poem for me, but i am pleased it comes across as being factual, it makes me think I have done a good job in creating the scenario:-) hugs Jan xx

James Peranteau

Date: 1/22/2024 3:44:00 PM

first offf dear poet, look at the direction the grass (at the bottom of the art) faces, the 'strong windz' pushed them that way :]...that meanz; the pneuma at the peek up there...yikes, yessss you for sure in this fantastic write, you save the soul; and without the doubt, many soulz, i pray, here on the Soup....ty jan!...much love, me ')

James Peranteau
Date: 1/24/2024 1:02:00 AM

say, wait thuh minute... are you not from the US...i'm computer illiterate...lol..az in, never looked into learn'n it here; az in, who'z from where...my apologies jan

Jan Allison
Date: 1/23/2024 8:37:00 AM

Aww James that's a lovely idea, but unfortunately the cost of sending books abroad is prohibitive hence why I self published via amazon. I did look into postage from the island - its £23.23 $29.52) by post or £47.63 $60.43 via courier!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/23/2024 4:13:00 AM

James Peranteau
Date: 1/22/2024 7:50:00 PM

;) thanx for your unintentional food for thought! i know uv your books dear poet...make sure that they git to Philadelphia Fee Library(Parkway) jan...they accept 'free' books especially contemporary artists, mark ("Please Shelf"... ty) I just love getting my curiosity readz from there *)

Jan Allison
Date: 1/22/2024 3:52:00 PM

Thanks James, thankfully for me it's purely fiction, I much prefer humour but am grateful for anything my muse comes up with at the moment on soup but I am writing new material for my next book:-) hugs Jan xx

Duke Beaufort

Date: 1/22/2024 3:34:00 PM

Very thought provoking Jan. I don't remember ever wanting to kill myself, but have seen suicides from time to time. We do need to have more help for people and be on the look out for people in trouble. I really like the resolution you have at the end of this poem.

James Peranteau
Date: 1/22/2024 3:55:00 PM

the answer iz, "gardenz" gardenz gardenz dear fellow...for anyone. did you know that Jehovah God Almighty had this very thing in mind when He Created humanz...botanical iz infinit, thus a beautiful thing for humanz to indulge...Solomon prayed for wisdom...first two thingz which Solomon realized...Gardenz and....you know it...."Women"! ;) much love

Jan Allison
Date: 1/22/2024 3:38:00 PM

Thanks Duke thankfully it is purely a fictional poem - i have too much to live for especially with my book publication and I'm working on book 2 lol, it is a very dark poem for me, there are so many more suicides especially with young men since lock down, so many are suffering from mental health issues and nothing is being done, such sad times, hugs Jan xx

Tom Cunningham

Date: 1/22/2024 2:52:00 PM

Quite a sad scene Jan, sometimes it gets too much and people can't see a way out but sometimes just talking and a hug can bring them back from the dark place they are in. Best of luck in the contest. Tom

Jan Allison
Date: 1/22/2024 3:16:00 PM

thanks Tom, it is a dark poem for me but I've written a good few limericks for the book today - of course I wont be posting them on soup though I want lots of new material:-) hugs Jan xx