Daver Austin Poet Haiku

Pot of Flowers

Porch pot of flowers
Surprising in October
We look at each other

Rejection has a smell
Forbidden perfume
Jack Daniels    morning    noon    night

She plays Clair de Lune
I can see her sitting there
Though there is a wall
Can see her fingers working
Aghh!    Utter futility!

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Skat A September 7, 2013 at 8:30 PM Congratulations Daver,, on having your poem featured on the soups Home Page. Love ~SKAT~

Poet Destroyer A September 7, 2013 at 4:47 PM Hello Daver, , Congratulations on your Featured Poem of the week. Nice seeing your poem on the front page... always~ Linda :-)

Andrea Dietrich May 5, 2012 at 8:58 PM Back here in the pot of flowers again. I sure wish I knew of your poems I have never seen, I bet somewhere back here are at least one or two like that, but I can't seem to find them! Anyway, this was one that I really enjoyed from the past!

Sara Kendrick March 3, 2011 at 4:17 PM Interesting write..I wonder about the last stanza..Is she making many mistakes in her playing?..Enjoyed reading..Your presence at my work was like a short summer breeze that cooled my too warm body...Sara

Andrea Dietrich January 7, 2011 at 8:34 AM I kind of get this one. Is she not playing the piano very well? Or is the futility in yourself? Glad to find an older one of yours I had not seen. This one is kind of deep for me .haha. LUv, Andrea

Deneen White October 18, 2008 at 4:34 PM this write gives one pause to think, interesting and thought-provoking, hope all is well with you my friend, take care D-nyce

Kristin Reynolds October 16, 2008 at 5:50 AM This is amazing - it takes in all the senses - well done, and very lovely, love Kristin

Joseph Spence Sr October 15, 2008 at 6:02 PM This is excellent. I can see the pot of flowers in October. The 2nd stanza certainly is appealing to the sense of smell. I like how the sense of touch really flows right into the last stanza of this haiku series. Great job! ~Joseph

October 15, 2008 at 4:23 PM Much to think about in your words. The format of this poem adds to the reading experience. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with us. Karen

Carrie Richards October 15, 2008 at 7:02 AM Oh this description is so melancholy and one can picture her sitting at the piano. I love Clair de Lune, it's one I play myself (without the Jack Daniels!) however it is a very moody piece, and in your poem, it really sets the scene! Well done...excellent poem! ~ Carrie