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Portuguese Man o' War

Sunrise and already the water is being seared with a glow as if under a grill. You can feel the heat building in the morning air, the sand still warm from yesterday. The tide has left the creature stranded on the beach, its frilled sail glistening and rigged with blue tentacles clumped menacingly beside its motionless body. The sun will soon cook it to a dried out bladder. This drifting marvel of murder is now no more than sea phlegm coughed up on the crest of a wave. It looks so pitiful. And yet it still has the power to inflict a painful sting. Venom waits for one last desperate chance to snare some poor careless prey. My fingers seem possessed with a will to pick it up to see how it feels without being stung. I hover somewhere between head and hand, stranded by indecision. Footnote This is one of a series of poems that have the shoreline as the backdrop for the exploration of meaning in things washed up on the beach or in the experience of being in the moment. Paul

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Date: 4/5/2024 4:59:00 PM
a captivating poem, dear Paul. Your descriptive words created the perfect image of the man 'o war. I cringed when I thought about it killing one last victim. I appreciate the fascination with the creature--the duality of the beauty of the creature against its ugly power. That duality and curiosity created a moment's hesitation. Well done, sir! Have a great evening, Sara
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Paul Willason
Date: 4/7/2024 3:41:00 PM
Very perceptive commentary dear Sara...you seem to plug into my poems with ease, so grateful that you afford them such respect and care, your comments are a gift which I unwrap with joy. Pleased that you stopped and inspected this creature with me...indeed value your company and keen eye. Thanks Sara
Date: 4/5/2024 6:35:00 AM
Hello Paul, What a haunting portrayal of nature's beauty and danger intertwined. Your description of the creature stranded on the beach evokes a sense of both awe and trepidation. I love the imagery you conjure, from the glistening frilled sail to the menacing blue tentacles, which immerses me in the scene's atmosphere of both allure and peril. The internal struggle you convey, contemplating the creature's power despite its pitiful appearance, adds depth to the narrative. You leave me with a sense of fascination and caution. - Blessings, Daniel
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Paul Willason
Date: 4/7/2024 3:24:00 PM
Always a delight to read your commentary dear Daniel. Must confess I savour it like a dog with a juicy bone. Seriously, I thank you sincerely for the time you put into composing such reviews, you honor my little creations with your thoughtful and skilled summaries. Take care my friend.

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