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Poolside Relaxation

On a striped deckchair
she reclines, cold drink in hand,
soaking up the sun.

Her tanned skin glistens.
Teasingly, her tongue explores
her full lower lip.

Dark blue sunglasses
subtly separate pretence
from reality.

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Contest: Compose a Choka
Sponsor: Janis Thompson
Placed 3rd
© 18th July 2016

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Jenni Kalicharan

September 15, 2016 at 4:49 PM

Incredibly beautiful. Great imagery. I love it! Jenni_K

Paul Callus

September 17, 2016 at 3:23 PM

Thank you very much for your complimentary remarks, Jenni! I am so pleased that you enjoyed it. Regards // paul

Lynn Marie

August 20, 2016 at 4:15 PM

Wow..amazing crystal clear imagery with incredible depth in so few words. I love evocative poetry, particularly one's of few words("economy of words" is a goal of mine, I have a "long way" to go..lol) your piece is brilliantly penned, a pleasure to read. Congrats on the contest, very worthy and deserved...a fave and a 7+ :-) blessings, lynn p.s. my first ever read of a "Choka", definitely one I will revisit often to study on my "learning" journey...thank you :-)

Paul Callus

August 21, 2016 at 6:07 AM

Thank you for your lovely feedback, Lynn:) Both the high rating and the fav are also much appreciated. I see that you take your 'learning journey' very seriously, but I can assure you that regardless of forms, your poetry has already impressed me...in a positive way:) Best regards // paul

Laura Hay

August 10, 2016 at 7:13 AM

Love this one especially the last lines, well done again Paul! Warm regards, Laura.

Paul Callus

August 11, 2016 at 11:45 AM

Once again, thank you, Laura! You have been a busy reader:) Warm regards // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

August 5, 2016 at 8:48 AM

Wow Paul awesome choka.. No wonder a win.. Big congrats!!

Paul Callus

August 6, 2016 at 3:30 PM

Thank you for reading and liking, Upma! Both the 'awesome' and congrats are truly appreciated:) Best regards // paul

Teddy Kimathi

July 27, 2016 at 6:00 AM

Congrats Paul, for your placement with this fine piece!! ;-)

Paul Callus

July 27, 2016 at 1:51 PM

Thank you Teddy! ~ Best regards // paul

Michael Dom

July 25, 2016 at 11:24 AM

Great to see this standing out where it should. Cheers!

Paul Callus

July 25, 2016 at 5:41 PM

You are kind and supportive, Michael...thank you! Regards // paul

Sandra Haight

July 24, 2016 at 5:32 PM

Paul, congratulations on your podium win in the 'Choka' contest! Very mysterious! Sandra

Paul Callus

July 25, 2016 at 5:40 PM

Thank you Sandra. I truly enjoyed your winning entry, too! Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

July 24, 2016 at 5:30 PM

BIG congrats on a job well done, Paul.

Paul Callus

July 25, 2016 at 5:33 PM

Thank you, Andrea! All the best:) // paul

Alexis Y.

July 24, 2016 at 3:10 PM

Hi Paul, You make me want to go relax by the pool. Good imagery.Congratulations on your winning write:-) Alexis

Paul Callus

July 24, 2016 at 4:54 PM

Thank you , Alexis. You're still in time to come to my pool; I'll save you a deckchair, and an umbrella to go with it; drinks on the house:) ~ Regards // paul

Angie Thomas

July 24, 2016 at 1:14 PM

I love the imagery in this poem as well as the calm relaxed atmosphere it creates... Great write! Hugs, Angie :)

Paul Callus

July 24, 2016 at 4:20 PM

It's a pleasure to have you stopping by with lovely feedback, Angie. Thank you:) Hope your muse is still keeping you good company! Hugs back to you....regards // paul

Jan Allison

July 24, 2016 at 8:50 AM

Dropping back with my congrats Paul:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

July 24, 2016 at 10:19 AM

Thank you, Jan. Double congrats on your no 1 spot:) Hugs // paul

Janis Medders Tobechi

July 23, 2016 at 7:26 PM

Congratulations on your win. Cute little choka...Thanks for being in the contest.

Paul Callus

July 24, 2016 at 10:13 AM

Thank you very much, Janis...I had not realized the results were out! It was a pleasure participating. ~ Regards // paul

Vera Duggan

July 22, 2016 at 8:29 PM

Hi Paul, love this little Choka, easy to read and understand, only wish our weather would fine up so we can sit outside in the sun, good luck in the contest my friend..take care......Vera

Paul Callus

July 23, 2016 at 6:46 AM

Glad that you enjoyed this humble poem, Vera! The weather here is in the 30s, but strangely enough the sea is still rather cool when compared to previous years. Yesterday I went swimming, but did not last more than an hour in the water! Warm regards // paul

Sara Kendrick

July 22, 2016 at 6:00 PM

Reads like a winner..Way to go for the contest..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Paul Callus

July 23, 2016 at 6:35 AM

Many thanks, Sara:) Have a nice weekend! Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux

July 21, 2016 at 6:14 PM

Sexy! Makes a guy want to hang out by the pool.

Paul Callus

July 22, 2016 at 11:49 AM

Thank you, Richard! All the best...paul

Ravi Sathasivam

July 21, 2016 at 5:17 AM

Excellent. Very sensitive write. Short and sweet. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.

Paul Callus

July 21, 2016 at 5:32 PM

Thank you for the 'excellent' comments, Ravi! Pleased to have you visiting. Regards // paul

Laura Leiser

July 20, 2016 at 8:54 PM

Nice write, Paul, with a headache by of sexy ;)

Paul Callus

July 21, 2016 at 5:19 PM

Thank you for reading and liking, Laura:) Regards // paul

Laura Leiser

July 20, 2016 at 8:54 PM

I mean "hint", lol!!

Jan Allison

July 20, 2016 at 4:34 PM

I can picture the scene so well Paul - great imagery:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

July 21, 2016 at 5:10 PM

Thank you, Jan. I think I'll change the title later on so that I'll have her sitting by the pool:) Hugs // paul

Michael Dom

July 20, 2016 at 12:39 PM

such a subtle screen those sunnies provide for secret shadows her eyes choose to hide I like this one, Paul.

Paul Callus

July 21, 2016 at 4:37 PM

I'm pleased you found this to your liking, Michael. Thank you for the feedback. Regards // paul

Len Gasun

July 20, 2016 at 10:28 AM

Wonderful poem and form my dear friend, Paul! Well-done. Good luck in the contest my dear friend. Thanks a lot for sharing! love and hug, Leonora

Paul Callus

July 21, 2016 at 4:25 PM

Thank you for a lovely and encouraging visit, Leonora:) Always lovely to have you around! Love & Hugs // paul

Viv Wigley

July 19, 2016 at 11:29 PM

A great little write, Paul, a sort of Jack Vettriano painting, in verse. Clever. Will do well. Regards, Viv

Paul Callus

July 21, 2016 at 3:59 PM

Thank you Viv. Incidentally I came across Vettriano images last weekend and I was inspired by them to write about a dozen short poems, but this wasn't one of them. Regards // paul