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Poolside Relaxation

On a striped deckchair she reclines, cold drink in hand, soaking up the sun. Her tanned skin glistens. Teasingly, her tongue explores her full lower lip. Dark blue sunglasses subtly separate pretence from reality. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Contest: Compose a Choka Sponsor: Janis Thompson Placed 3rd © 18th July 2016

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Jenni Kalicharan

Date: 9/15/2016 4:49:00 PM

Incredibly beautiful. Great imagery. I love it! Jenni_K

Paul Callus
Date: 9/17/2016 3:23:00 PM

Thank you very much for your complimentary remarks, Jenni! I am so pleased that you enjoyed it. Regards // paul

Lynn Marie

Date: 8/20/2016 4:15:00 PM

Wow..amazing crystal clear imagery with incredible depth in so few words. I love evocative poetry, particularly one's of few words("economy of words" is a goal of mine, I have a "long way" to go..lol) your piece is brilliantly penned, a pleasure to read. Congrats on the contest, very worthy and deserved...a fave and a 7+ :-) blessings, lynn p.s. my first ever read of a "Choka", definitely one I will revisit often to study on my "learning" journey...thank you :-)

Paul Callus
Date: 8/21/2016 6:07:00 AM

Thank you for your lovely feedback, Lynn:) Both the high rating and the fav are also much appreciated. I see that you take your 'learning journey' very seriously, but I can assure you that regardless of forms, your poetry has already impressed me...in a positive way:) Best regards // paul

Laura Hay

Date: 8/10/2016 7:13:00 AM

Love this one especially the last lines, well done again Paul! Warm regards, Laura.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/11/2016 11:45:00 AM

Once again, thank you, Laura! You have been a busy reader:) Warm regards // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/5/2016 8:48:00 AM

Wow Paul awesome choka.. No wonder a win.. Big congrats!!

Paul Callus
Date: 8/6/2016 3:30:00 PM

Thank you for reading and liking, Upma! Both the 'awesome' and congrats are truly appreciated:) Best regards // paul

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 7/27/2016 6:00:00 AM

Congrats Paul, for your placement with this fine piece!! ;-)

Paul Callus
Date: 7/27/2016 1:51:00 PM

Thank you Teddy! ~ Best regards // paul

Michael Dom

Date: 7/25/2016 11:24:00 AM

Great to see this standing out where it should. Cheers!

Paul Callus
Date: 7/25/2016 5:41:00 PM

You are kind and supportive, Michael...thank you! Regards // paul

Sandra Haight

Date: 7/24/2016 5:32:00 PM

Paul, congratulations on your podium win in the 'Choka' contest! Very mysterious! Sandra

Paul Callus
Date: 7/25/2016 5:40:00 PM

Thank you Sandra. I truly enjoyed your winning entry, too! Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/24/2016 5:30:00 PM

BIG congrats on a job well done, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/25/2016 5:33:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea! All the best:) // paul

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/24/2016 3:10:00 PM

Hi Paul, You make me want to go relax by the pool. Good imagery.Congratulations on your winning write:-) Alexis

Paul Callus
Date: 7/24/2016 4:54:00 PM

Thank you , Alexis. You're still in time to come to my pool; I'll save you a deckchair, and an umbrella to go with it; drinks on the house:) ~ Regards // paul

Angie Thomas

Date: 7/24/2016 1:14:00 PM

I love the imagery in this poem as well as the calm relaxed atmosphere it creates... Great write! Hugs, Angie :)

Paul Callus
Date: 7/24/2016 4:20:00 PM

It's a pleasure to have you stopping by with lovely feedback, Angie. Thank you:) Hope your muse is still keeping you good company! Hugs back to you....regards // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 7/24/2016 8:50:00 AM

Dropping back with my congrats Paul:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 7/24/2016 10:19:00 AM

Thank you, Jan. Double congrats on your no 1 spot:) Hugs // paul

Janis Thompson

Date: 7/23/2016 7:26:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. Cute little choka...Thanks for being in the contest.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/24/2016 10:13:00 AM

Thank you very much, Janis...I had not realized the results were out! It was a pleasure participating. ~ Regards // paul

Vera Duggan

Date: 7/22/2016 8:29:00 PM

Hi Paul, love this little Choka, easy to read and understand, only wish our weather would fine up so we can sit outside in the sun, good luck in the contest my friend..take care......Vera

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2016 6:46:00 AM

Glad that you enjoyed this humble poem, Vera! The weather here is in the 30s, but strangely enough the sea is still rather cool when compared to previous years. Yesterday I went swimming, but did not last more than an hour in the water! Warm regards // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/22/2016 6:00:00 PM

Reads like a winner..Way to go for the contest..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2016 6:35:00 AM

Many thanks, Sara:) Have a nice weekend! Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/21/2016 6:14:00 PM

Sexy! Makes a guy want to hang out by the pool.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/22/2016 11:49:00 AM

Thank you, Richard! All the best...paul

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 7/21/2016 5:17:00 AM

Excellent. Very sensitive write. Short and sweet. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/21/2016 5:32:00 PM

Thank you for the 'excellent' comments, Ravi! Pleased to have you visiting. Regards // paul

Laura Leiser

Date: 7/20/2016 8:54:00 PM

Nice write, Paul, with a headache by of sexy ;)

Paul Callus
Date: 7/21/2016 5:19:00 PM

Thank you for reading and liking, Laura:) Regards // paul

Laura Leiser
Date: 7/20/2016 8:54:00 PM

I mean "hint", lol!!

Jan Allison

Date: 7/20/2016 4:34:00 PM

I can picture the scene so well Paul - great imagery:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 7/21/2016 5:10:00 PM

Thank you, Jan. I think I'll change the title later on so that I'll have her sitting by the pool:) Hugs // paul

Michael Dom

Date: 7/20/2016 12:39:00 PM

such a subtle screen those sunnies provide for secret shadows her eyes choose to hide I like this one, Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/21/2016 4:37:00 PM

I'm pleased you found this to your liking, Michael. Thank you for the feedback. Regards // paul

Len Gasun

Date: 7/20/2016 10:28:00 AM

Wonderful poem and form my dear friend, Paul! Well-done. Good luck in the contest my dear friend. Thanks a lot for sharing! love and hug, Leonora

Paul Callus
Date: 7/21/2016 4:25:00 PM

Thank you for a lovely and encouraging visit, Leonora:) Always lovely to have you around! Love & Hugs // paul

Viv Wigley

Date: 7/19/2016 11:29:00 PM

A great little write, Paul, a sort of Jack Vettriano painting, in verse. Clever. Will do well. Regards, Viv

Paul Callus
Date: 7/21/2016 3:59:00 PM

Thank you Viv. Incidentally I came across Vettriano images last weekend and I was inspired by them to write about a dozen short poems, but this wasn't one of them. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/19/2016 3:58:00 PM

oh YES, I dig this!!!

Paul Callus
Date: 7/21/2016 3:13:00 PM

Thank you Andrea :) Regards // paul