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Poisoned Sequence

Ruins
                                 Of a man
                         Sprawled in the mud
                    Betrayed by woman scorned
                                   Broken

                                    Victim
                                 Of slander
                            Eyes gaze on him
                 With contempt; tongues find him
                                    Guilty

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Maurice Yvonne

Date: 11/13/2014 3:57:00 PM

Beautifully composed. I can't even imagine the pain that man endured and still endures.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/14/2014 12:55:00 PM

That man endured a lot, not just pain; fortunately now people's reaction is 100% in his favour; at least the mud has been washed away. But I am sure that every night he replays it all in his mind.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 11/11/2014 7:21:00 AM

mmmmn! incredibly awesome with each line.. as lines progress, each line also is intensified.. .. choice of words are wow! and the message is another wow!... these are your poems that I find you best.. :)! olive eloisa.. :D!

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 11/12/2014 1:43:00 AM

Yes, I know it.. :) and wink! hugs back... :D!

Paul Callus
Date: 11/11/2014 11:27:00 AM

Thank you very much Olive_eloi!! You know that I express myself best in short writes. I love your insightful comments...illuminating feedback! Bless you! hugs // paul

Timothy Hicks

Date: 11/10/2014 3:33:00 PM

What an awful story, sorry to hear! You know, I'm not sure how the politics are in Malta, but I find that in the states it's very easy for women to get away with things. I've known a friend, of a friend, who got labelled "sex offender" by his wife. And simply because of the wife's story (having absolutely no physical evidence to show for) he now has that the label stuck to him in all his records. It's very sad.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/10/2014 3:42:00 PM

This was well orchestrated; the whole story very credible; the court had no alternative but to find him guilty. After years the daughter (who was supposed to have been sexually abused) could not live with the guilt any more and reported herself to the police; now he is free. // paul

Timothy Hicks

Date: 11/10/2014 10:18:00 AM

Wow, very powerful. Especially in the end... I couldn't help but think of the man kneeling in a court room, where all the jurors point and say, "GUILTY" - though he's been wrongly accused. I wonder if the woman framed him or something? There's a lot of subtext in this, which is the goal in poems of brevity.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/10/2014 3:26:00 PM

Yes, Timothy...the person I know was framed by his wife; she even got her daughter to lie in court; he spent time in prison before the daughter decided to come clean. // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/9/2014 11:27:00 PM

I really like this one. The last word guilty is such a GREAT concluding word!! My favorite of the two you posted.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/10/2014 4:54:00 AM

Thank you Andrea! This is my favourite, too; unfortunately I realized that the theme was not what the sponsor was asking for! // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 11/9/2014 6:33:00 PM

Paul, the poor soul, relationship can be harsh sometimes, and people’s tongues do wag when they should be silent :) hugs eve

Paul Callus
Date: 11/10/2014 5:04:00 AM

You are absolutely correct, Eve; unfortunately the harm done could be irreparable. hugs // paul

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 11/9/2014 2:40:00 PM

A dark deed indeed to taint one's reputation with false accusations..Its even sadder when those accusations were maluciously weaved,and untrue..Even worst when one does not have the right justification and is guilty for things he didnt do.Excellent post Paul.

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 11/9/2014 3:47:00 PM

Maliciously i meant oops.Yes unfortunately justice isnt always made in the way it should..a pity.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/9/2014 3:35:00 PM

As you might well know, Charm, people have been sent to prison because of lies and perjury. How can those wasted years ever be redeemed! How can traumatic effects be erased!! Appreciate both your visit and positive comments. // paul

David Meade

Date: 11/9/2014 2:35:00 PM

It reminds me of the quote: "Hell Hath No Fury Like A Woman Scorned" and then with blazing eyes and vicious wagging tongues the crowd gather like hunger wolfs -- the construction and flow are like two arrows flying straight to the heart.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/9/2014 3:22:00 PM

Many thanks David; that quote came to mind as well as I was writing it...you read my mind! Rest of your comments are also appreciated. // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 11/9/2014 2:28:00 PM

oh, powerful and sad one here, my friend - sure to be a winner, if for a contest. Hope you're having a great weekend : )

Paul Callus
Date: 11/9/2014 3:19:00 PM

Hi Jack! Glad you enjoyed this Cinqku...not being entered in any contest...as yet! Weekend was great, especially today as the weather has been perfect. Hope yours was a positive one, too. // paul

Tim Smith

Date: 11/9/2014 2:22:00 PM

This is very sad Paul...I know of two men this has happened to....scary thought when one's words are given more credit than another...Tim

Paul Callus
Date: 11/9/2014 2:40:00 PM

It is sad and the consequences are tragic...the stigma will haunt him for life...credibility nil. I well know; a friend of mine is living a nightmare! Thanks for stopping by Tim. // paul