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See my comment under Sara's, if you want to know where my mindset was. Perhaps there is more or "less." :)

I have included the original poem “Pointless,” below.
I felt this poem had more to say. 

POINT

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here…there…every here…less
for the birds
the short stra 
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Pointless

pointless
here…there…everywhere
for the birds
the short straw
of the scarecrow
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Jim Slaughter

Date: 5/14/2024 10:12:00 AM

Interesting pieces, Kim. Maybe people just expect too much of scarecrows.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/14/2024 10:31:00 AM

Could be…lol…thanks for your perspective!!

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 5/12/2024 8:17:00 PM

Creative piece and enjoyed this write. Happy Mothers day. Have a wonderful week. love phyl

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/13/2024 7:09:00 AM

HMD! Thank you :)

Duke Beaufort

Date: 5/12/2024 1:12:00 PM

It's funny to see a repeat performance....I give it a standing ovation! There is little difference between the two when I think about it. All in how we want to look at things!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/12/2024 6:41:00 PM

The “w’s” become birds in flight…point here…there…the awkward “every here.” …also “less” for the birds. I loved playing with this one…just happened. Thanks for reading, Duke!

Mike Bayles

Date: 5/12/2024 10:05:00 AM

I like both poems, but the one on the bottom works a little better for me.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/12/2024 12:33:00 PM

Thank you..yes, that was the original. The second doesn’t work without the first :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/10/2024 3:36:00 PM

So which is the original? The one way at the bottom ? It is easier for me that one, but I love both poems.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/10/2024 9:36:00 PM

The bottom was the original, without it the second one probably doesn’t make sense.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 5/10/2024 10:04:00 AM

Such creativity! Wizard-like... Maybe you can lend some of your wizardry to the scarecrow. Either that or construct a 'brainpower charging station' for him.

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 5/10/2024 12:06:00 PM

LOL! Recharging the brain! Dr. Frankenstein, move over.